issue207 flyaw 第四周作业

风中尘埃UID: 164965

TOPIC: ISSUE207 - "Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are."
WORDS: 583          TIME: 1:31:10          DATE: 2006-6-7

Who we are is the eternal question being asked by the great minds of every generation and still hard to reach critical agreement. However, to some extent, common people don't take this question so serious that would bother their daily lives and would happy to  define themselves as Scotish, Germany, Chiness and so forth with the rituals and ceremonies being the most obvious symbols of them. So, to get to know other cultures, one should learn their special rituals and prepare for their special ceremonies to show his respect. This may suggest the significance of the rituals and ceremonies in defining a culture.

In our early lives, rituals and ceremonies in our culture may play a important part not only because of their meanings, but also because they bring happiness and common memeries into our families. Many people conceive a misconception that it is rational reflection rather than emotional memories that help us define who we are. At the begining of one's life, to be a, like Chiness, may have nothing to do with its special philosophy or history. Instead, it may simplely means that he could expect to eat mooncakes or have a laten in the Mid-autumn's day, or could remind him of the beautiful fireworks he played with his brothers in the Spring festival's eve. This happiness and memories will saturate into their blood and help him to define himself as a Chiness.

Moreover, rituals and ceremonies could do us virtues to keep our sense of self-definition. It will remind us the connections between our big faminly members in this busy world and recall the sense of being a Chiness. Imagine when you lived abroad long enough to nearly forget who you are, a call from your sister in spring festeval eve, which to send you good wishes and remind you to follow a old ritual of your culture to call your parents to Bainian, will surely arouse the memories and the sense of being a Chiness. In this aspect, to say that without rituals and ceremonies, societies or groups will suffer a loss in the sense of who they are may have some correctness.

However, one does not have to go very far to see that though important, rituals and ceremonies are only the expression of a culture, not the core inside it. It will help to define, but without it, a culture may not definitly to lose. The rituals and ceremonies are changeable, to make a balance between history and morden time, for the needs of a culture also being progressing. In the past of China, the ritual of Bainian requir the youngers to Koutou, which not needed today, to fit the imported values of democracy. If still follow the old procedure, many Chiness will resist it and even more, may not be pround of being himself and that is the most serious attack to a culture. The eagest thing for a culture to do to keep its identity and help its people to maintain it is to remain the ability of innovation. That is the core value of a culture.

As a conclusion, one should respect the rituals and ceremonies for the role them played in the construction and maintanance of a culture. But the very thing to help their people have a stable sense of who they are is to focus on the innovational ability of a culture itself. Any effort to over emphsize the ceremonies or rituals may a misleading will result in a miserable ending.

[ 本帖最后由 风中尘埃 于 2006-6-8 15:18 编辑 ]

夜一UID: 2130338

Who we are is the eternal question being asked by the great minds of every generation and still hard to reach critical agreement. However, to some extent, common people don't take this question so serious that would bother their daily lives and would happy to  define themselves as Scotish, Germany, Chiness and so forth with the rituals and ceremonies being the most obvious symbols of them. So, to get to know other cultures, one should learn their special rituals and prepare for their special ceremonies to show his respect. This may suggest the significance of the rituals and ceremonies in defining a culture.

In our early lives, rituals and ceremonies in our culture may我觉得去掉这个词会比较好 play a important part not only because of their meanings, but also because they bring happiness and common memeries into our families. Many people conceive a misconception that it is rational reflection rather than emotional memories that help us define who we are. At the begining of one's life, to be a, like Chiness, may have nothing to do with its special philosophy or history. Instead, it may simplely means that he could expect to eat mooncakes or have a laten in the Mid-autumn's day, or could remind him of the beautiful fireworks he played with his brothers in the Spring festival's eve. This happiness and memories will saturate into their blood and help him to define himself as a Chiness.

Moreover, rituals and ceremonies could我觉得用can会比较好，could一般用在虚拟语气，表示与事实相反 do us virtues to keep our sense of self-definition. It will remind us the connections between our big faminly members in this busy world and recall the sense of being a Chiness. Imagine when you lived abroad long enough to nearly forget who you are, a call from your sister in spring festeval eve, which to send you good wishes and remind you to follow a old ritual of your culture to call your parents to Bainian, will surely arouse the memories and the sense of being a Chiness. In this aspect, to say that without rituals and ceremonies, societies or groups will suffer a loss in the sense of who they are may have some correctness.

However, one does not have to go very far to see that though important, rituals and ceremonies are only the expression of a culture, not the core inside it. It will help to define, but without it, a culture may not definitly to lose. 我觉得与其说也许不会消减，不如说不是一定会消减The rituals and ceremonies are changeable, to make a balance between history and morden time, for the needs of a culture also being progressing. In the past of China, the ritual of Bainian requir the youngers to Koutou, which not needed today, to fit the imported values of democracy. If still follow the old procedure, many Chiness will resist it and even more, may not be pround of being himself and that is the most serious attack to a culture. The eagest thing for a culture to do to keep its definision and help its people to maintain it is to remain the ability of innovation. That is the core value of a culture.

As a conclusion, one should 我觉得这本身是一个事实性的命题，最好不要说到倾向上来，这样至少是没有助益的，既然题目要阐述如果没有典礼与仪式会怎么样，只要顺着说就行了，跟人们应该怎样做没有太大关系respect the rituals and ceremonies for the role them played in the construction and maintanance of a culture. But the very thing to help their people have a stable sense of who they are is to focus on the innovational ability of a culture itself. Any effort to over emphsize the ceremonies or rituals may a misleading will result in a miserable ending.

文章总体来说很不错，但有一些地方我与楼主有些意见不符，可以探讨一下：）

风中尘埃UID: 164965

事实性的命题，最好不要说到倾向上来
不太明白指什么？
如果是说不能用one should，而是要用比如ritual 或者ceremony 作主语，显得客观的话，我可能还是会觉得ets并不要求这么有板有眼，一片六分的范文里，结尾是，one would hope……可能我私人比较喜欢天马行空一点

说到这一点，我特地翻了范文和要求，说立场可以同意，部分同意，反对，或者提出自己的观点。想来ets主要还是考论证过程，对内容比较放松，毕竟i不是a，并不是牢牢针对claim才是唯一的办法，很多时候也很难那样展开。比如那篇关于环境的例文，文章并没有重点分析claim，只是把它当作一个框架，说了两点环境问题团结的现状，以及复杂性，最后说了点希望。我刚看到都吓了一跳，这样就算ananlitical writing了？！

我不知道我这个想法有多大正确性，反正我就觉得，如果可以自己立论，还不算跑题，像我这篇一样，关键词不抓ritual and ceremonies, 而是抓住define， 第三段说说怎样才是正确的保留文化认同的方式，会更有话说。这点欢迎持不同意见的说说

至与夜一想要探讨，那是二十万份欢迎~~~

夜一UID: 2130338

可能是理解的不太一样吧，无论怎样，你自己觉得可以就可以了

honeyviolaUID: 2199703

Who we are is the eternal question being asked by the great minds of every generation and still hard to reach critical agreement. However, to some extent, common people don't take this question so serious that would bother their daily lives and would be happy to  define themselves as Scotish, Germany, Chiness and so forth with the rituals and ceremonies being the most obvious symbols of them. So, to get to know other cultures, one should learn their special rituals and prepare for their special ceremonies to show his respect. This may suggest the significance of the rituals and ceremonies in defining a culture.

In our early lives, rituals and ceremonies in our culture may play a important part not only because of their meanings, but also because they bring happiness and common memeries into our families. Many people conceive a misconception that it is rational reflection rather than emotional memories that help us define who we are. At the begining of one's life, to be a, like Chiness, may have nothing to do with its special philosophy or history. Instead, it may simplely means that he could expect to eat mooncakes or have a laten in the Mid-autumn's day, or could remind him of the beautiful fireworks he played with his brothers in the Spring festival's eve. This happiness and memories will saturate into their blood and help him to define himself as a Chiness.语句挺温馨的

Moreover, rituals and ceremonies could do us virtues to keep our sense of self-definition. It will remind us the connections between our big faminly members in this busy world and recall the sense of being a Chiness. Imagine when you lived abroad long enough to nearly forget who you are, a call from your sister in spring festeval eve, which to send you good wishes and remind you to follow a old ritual of your culture to call your parents to Bainian, will surely arouse the memories and the sense of being a Chiness. In this aspect, to say that without rituals and ceremonies, societies or groups will suffer a loss in the sense of who they are may have some correctness. 我个人认为这段是延续了上段观点，不知道楼主怎么看的。

However, one does not have to go very far to see that though important, rituals and ceremonies are only the expression of a culture, not the core inside it. It will help to define, but without it, a culture may not definitly to lose. The rituals and ceremonies are changeable, to make a balance between history and morden time, for the needs of a culture also being progressing. In the past of China, the ritual of Bainian requir the youngers to Koutou, which is not needed today, to fit the imported values of democracy. If still follow the old procedure, many Chiness will resist it and even more, may not be pround of being himself and that is the most serious attack to a culture. The eagest thing for a culture to do to keep its identity and help its people to maintain it is to remain the ability of innovation. That is the core value of a culture. 这个观点有点模糊

As a conclusion, one should respect the rituals and ceremonies for the role them played in the construction and maintanance of a culture. But the very thing to help their people have a stable sense of who they are is to focus on the innovational ability of a culture itself. Any effort to over emphsize the ceremonies or rituals may a misleading will result in a miserable ending.