issue147 同主题写作,留链互改啊

paburawUID: 2204657

TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 506          TIME: 上午 12:43:54          DATE: 2006-7-20

第一。让步，传统中的一些不好的观点随着社会的进步，应该是要被废除的，比如对黑人的歧视，对妇女的歧视，这些随着社会的进步，都将被慢满废除。

第二，现代的很多的观点来自与传统，无论是什么学科都是在前人的积累的基础上发展起来的，在文化方面，文艺复兴时期的作品给了现代艺术家多少的灵感，其建筑风格也影响了多少的现代艺术家，而且现在很多建筑都夹杂着古代的风格。在科学方面更是如此，就算是那些新近的学科，也不能例外。比如说计算机，也许就是从算盘abacus，到计算机calculator,最后慢慢发展到现代的计算机

第三，传统与现代并不想矛盾啊，我们应该从传统中发现我们需要的东西，把他们直接或者是加里改造而保留到现代中去，比如中国的中医和西医并存的情况，虽然两者的方法和理论完全不同，但是其目的是一样的，因而共存。而且两者相互促进发展更大，比如现在的很多疾病就提倡两种方法治疗，典型的例子就是SARS


Are tradition and modernization incompatible? Many argue it is, saying that one must choose between them. Insofar, the wheel of history rolls on, some tradition has stepped the stage of history, while some other has entered into modernization.

To begin with, I would like to admit that some tradition has been discarded, however not because it is traditional but is proved false by modern society. Some tradition handed down through generations has been reviewed by modern criterions, despite it may have a long history recognized by man as right, once it is proved wrong, not suitable for the progress of our society, would be jettisoned by man without sentiment. Consider gender prejudice, a common phenomenon in past, which was regarded as a natural way of treating women, now is being abandoned by most societies across the world. During that time, equal rights to women with men are regarded as ridiculous; along with advances democracy as a basic human nature, this viewpoint reversed. Likewise, giving civil rights to blacks is also regarded as dangerous claims, even by some housewives, who are also prejudiced by men in the same period, now is viewed as natural thing, becoming an indispensable part of democracy. The development in technology and science is a more outstanding example that new theories of certain scientific fields substitute the old ones, and most of time, the new one itself is not perfect, waiting to be changed or even replaced. Some tradition would and sometimes should be discarded because they are wrong or not suitable for the further progress of our society, then give way to more advanced one.

In the second place, no one would argue seriously that tradition is the basis of modernization. Many fields of modern society is being developed based on the accumulation handed down generations, even in some most futuristic areas, may also be inspired by ancestors. Through divergent means, tradition has entered into the modernization. In the field of art, artists can draw useful lessons from the artworks created by those famous artists in the past. For example, a large variety of artworks during Renaissance period leave future generations a splendid culture treasure, a treasure attracting countless artists studying and then learning from. When comes to the field of science and technology, the efforts of predecessors play an major role in further developing, no matter the theory is right or wrong, both contributing the development. Some may argue that the computer might be purely innovative creation of modern society. Nevertheless, they seem to forget abacus, the most primitive "computer", giving modern inventors inspiration to create calculator, then to today's computer.

The history offers a continuing story of compatibility of tradition and modernization, what we view as modernization today might become tomorrow’s tradition. Take a realistic example, happening in today's China; traditional Chinese medicine and modern medicine deriving from the Western countries are keeping abreast. Although they differ in their theory of causing disease, their methods of curing patients, they have the same goal, saving lives and relieving pains. SARS, an severe aspiratory This case helps us to accept this view, tradition and modernization are not contradictive to each other, as long as they are able to benefit to our lives, otherwise even modernization must be abandoned.

In sum, from what has been discussed below, there is no need to make a choice between tradition and modernization; instead, we can make use of both of them to enable the rapid progress of our society.

dicmiUID: 183392

不好意思，才看到你的回帖~~
马上改。。对不起啊

dicmiUID: 183392

TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 506          TIME: 上午 12:43:54          DATE: 2006-7-20

第一。让步，传统中的一些不好的观点随着社会的进步，应该是要被废除的，比如对黑人的歧视，对妇女的歧视，这些随着社会的进步，都将被慢满废除。

第二，现代的很多的观点来自与传统，无论是什么学科都是在前人的积累的基础上发展起来的，在文化方面，文艺复兴时期的作品给了现代艺术家多少的灵感，其建筑风格也影响了多少的现代艺术家，而且现在很多建筑都夹杂着古代的风格。在科学方面更是如此，就算是那些新近的学科，也不能例外。比如说计算机，也许就是从算盘abacus，到计算机calculator,最后慢慢发展到现代的计算机

第三，传统与现代并不想矛盾啊，我们应该从传统中发现我们需要的东西，把他们直接或者是加里改造而保留到现代中去，比如中国的中医和西医并存的情况，虽然两者的方法和理论完全不同，但是其目的是一样的，因而共存。而且两者相互促进发展更大，比如现在的很多疾病就提倡两种方法治疗，典型的例子就是SARS

[提纲很不错，学习：），其实第一点我有点不敢写黑人，赫赫。]

Are tradition and modernization incompatible? Many argue it is, saying that one must choose between them. Insofar, the wheel of history rolls on, some tradition has stepped [out？]the stage of history, while some other has entered [evolved是不是更合适？] into modernization. [这段我觉得TS不是很明显，这个是平衡观点么？]

To begin with, I would like to admit that some tradition has been discarded, however not because it is traditional but is proved false by modern society. Some tradition handed down through generations has been reviewed by modern criterions, despite[despite后面加名词性成分的哦] it may have a long history recognized by man as right, once it is proved wrong, not suitable for the progress of our society, would be jettisoned[不错] by man without sentiment[不确定这样的搭配，without hesitation也可以吧]. Consider gender prejudice, a common phenomenon in past, which was regarded as a natural way of treating women, now is being abandoned by most societies across the world. During that time[that time指代不明，in past~~], equal[equal在这边作什么成分？] rights to women with men are regarded as ridiculous; along with advances democracy as a basic human nature, this viewpoint reversed. Likewise, giving civil rights to blacks[blacks指代黑人不是很好吧，比较文明一点的ms是用Afro-American] is[was] also regarded as dangerous claims, even by some housewives, who are also prejudiced by men in the same period[housewives这句我觉得多了，最好还是不要了，多了这层意思，看的不清楚~~], now is viewed as [a] natural thing, becoming an indispensable part of democracy. The development in technology and science is a more outstanding example that new theories of certain scientific fields substitute the old ones, and most of time, the new one itself is not perfect, waiting to be changed or even replaced. Some tradition would and sometimes should be[这样的结构不错，学习：）] discarded because they are wrong or not suitable for the further progress of our society, then give way to more advanced one.

In the second place, no one would argue seriously[argue seriously是否认的意思么？直接用deny会不会清楚点？我没有用过这样的结构，不是很确定] that tradition is the basis of modernization. Many fields of modern society is[are] being[being？去掉吧] developed based on the accumulation handed down generations, even in some most futuristic areas, may also be inspired by ancestors. Through divergent[divergent不是很合适吧，用diverse] means, tradition has entered into the modernization. [For example应该放在这边的]In the field of art, artists can draw useful lessons from the artworks created by those famous artists in the past. For example, a large variety of artworks during Renaissance period leave future generations a splendid culture[cultural] treasure, a treasure attracting countless artists studying and then learning from. When [it]comes to the field of science and technology, the efforts of predecessors play an major role in further developing, no matter the theory is right or wrong, both contributing [to] the development. Some may argue that the computer might be purely innovative creation of modern society. Nevertheless, they seem to forget abacus, the most primitive "computer", giving modern inventors inspiration to create calculator, then to[去掉to，这个应该是和calculator并列的] today's computer. [这段写的不错，要学习~~]

The history offers a continuing story of compatibility of tradition and modernization, what we view as modernization today might become tomorrow’s tradition. Take a realistic example, happening in today's China; traditional Chinese medicine and modern medicine deriving from the Western countries are keeping[keeping？working] abreast. Although they differ in their theory of causing disease, their methods of curing patients, they have the same goal, saving lives and relieving pains[saving这个短语最好还是和same goal连在一起吧]. SARS, an severe aspiratory This case helps us to accept this view, tradition and modernization are not contradictive to each other, as long as they are able to benefit to[去掉to] our lives, otherwise even modernization must be abandoned[otherwise这句我觉得多了：）].

In sum, from what has been discussed below, there is no need to make a choice between tradition and modernization; instead, we can make use of both of them to enable the rapid progress of our society.[结尾比较清楚，很好]

[总的来说，挺不错的文章，用词很丰富的，读起来也很顺畅。要加油的就是写细节上的问题了+U+U]