issue4 Smile-B组 第六次作业，欢迎批评，谢谢！

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TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."


   Knowledge is such a comprehensive conception that every field interacts with each other in deed. In my point of view, not only the knowledge and experience brought by outsiders is necessary for significant advance, in some contexts, but the researcher who obtains broad insights also will give the case more possibility.

   Generally speaking, cooperation in different field may serve as an easier way or even plays crucial role in producing significant advancement. Every field of study compelled by the professors with specific knowledge improves in its own path, however , essences of other fields always exert powerful force to celebrate the process by oozing inspiring ideas. The case of MIT adds great weight to this reasoning. Traditionally, each research program would spend their teatime in a hall where they can communicate with others and debate some controversial problems in different field, meanwhile, some nameless scientists utilize this precious chance to provide their creative discoveries to prominent figures even in different field of study, who has comprehensive knowledge and experience then usually can give them foresee introduction. This tradition acts as a broad platform which sparkle the study in every field with glory and magnificence, finally the unshakable status of MIT established in education field.
    Historically, however, more stunning achievements came true according to individuals’ efforts, who adhered to beliefs of identifying truth. For instance, Menet, an Australian monk, who is honored as 'Father of Genetic' by posteriors, benefited to the abundant experiences both in monastery and University of Vienna. In his time, how genes inherit or evolve confused most of the scientists even after the published theory 'Origin of Species' for Darwin only found the phenomena but failed to give a precise explanation. But Menet, discriminated by experts in biology field, finally identified the inherent principle that results in the ' unchanged' factors from generation to generation, which was based on his abundant mathematics knowledge. Cooperation, although has its significant sense, usually ignored by specialists, for they could not have a large picture and unconsciously focus on their own toe nails. Only some individuals occasionally apprehend more than one major could achieve the gloried goal by under bearing discriminations of primary specialists.
   Nowadays, education has established its purpose on the base of shaping its students into more comprehensive individuals, who cover various knowledge such as science, art, and so on, which eventually boost every field of study. For example, a program named 'Free Choice' is established for all students in University of Washington. This program aims at providing students subjects involving most of the newly developed intersectant knowledge. Communication prevails to a larger scope because it is stilled into every students mind. Just as what the president of this university said, various knowledge helps students build a well thinking quality. Although technology has developed to such a high level, problems that human beings face become more complex as well. Comprehending intersectant knowledge, which embodies the inner conformity of knowledge, can lend us powerful strength to deal with these stubborn troubles.
  In conclusion, individuals with comprehensive knowledge are necessary especially in today's world. No barriers between different fields can be strong enough to hinder our step in pursuing significant advancement, and our society will benefit a lot from crucial problems solved one by one.

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TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."


Knowledge is such a comprehensive conception that every field interacts with each other in deed. In my point of view, not only the knowledge and experience brought by outsiders is necessary for significant advance, in some contexts, but the researcher who obtains broad insights also will give the case more possibility. 挺好的，看了你的开头，打开了我的思路，呵呵

Generally speaking, cooperation in different field may serve as an easier way or even plays crucial role in producing significant advancement. Every field of study compelled（用advanced会不会好一点？） by the professors with specific knowledge improves in its own path, however, essences of other fields always exert powerful force to celebrate the process by oozing inspiring ideas. The case of MIT adds great weight to this reasoning. Traditionally, each research program would spend their teatime in a hall where they can communicate with others and debate some controversial problems in different field, meanwhile, some nameless scientists utilize this precious chance to provide their creative discoveries to prominent figures even in different field of study, who has comprehensive knowledge and experience then usually can give them foresee（foreseeable?） introduction. This tradition acts as a broad platform which sparkle the study in every field with glory and magnificence, finally the unshakable status of MIT established in education field. 感觉这个例子不是很能够说明问题啊，

Historically, however, more stunning achievements came true according to individuals’ efforts, who adhered to beliefs of identifying truth. For instance, Menet, an Australian monk, who is honored as 'Father of Genetic' by posteriors, benefited to（to要不要加啊？） the abundant experiences both in monastery and University of Vienna. In his time, how genes inherit or evolve confused most of the scientists even after the published theory 'Origin of Species' for Darwin only found the phenomena but failed to give a precise explanation. But Menet, discriminated by experts in biology field, finally identified the inherent principle that results in the ' unchanged' factors from generation to generation, which was based on his abundant mathematics knowledge. Cooperation, although has its significant sense, usually ignored by specialists, for they could not have a large picture and unconsciously focus on their own toe nails. Only some individuals occasionally apprehend more than one major could achieve the gloried goal by under bearing discriminations of primary specialists. 这个例子不错哦，挺合适的，支持了TS

Nowadays, education has established its purpose on the base of shaping its students into more comprehensive individuals, who cover various knowledge such as science, art, and so on, which eventually boost every field of study. For example, a program named 'Free Choice' is established for all students in University of Washington. This program aims at providing students subjects involving most of the newly developed intersectant knowledge. Communication prevails to a larger scope because it is stilled into every students mind. Just as what the president of this university said, various knowledge helps students build a well thinking quality. Although technology has developed to such a high level, problems that human beings face become more complex as well. Comprehending intersectant knowledge, which embodies the inner conformity of knowledge, can lend us powerful strength to deal with these stubborn troubles.

  In conclusion, individuals with comprehensive knowledge are necessary especially in today's world. No barriers between different fields can be strong enough to hinder our step in pursuing significant advancement, and our society will benefit a lot from crucial problems solved one by one.是不是也应该提到outsider呢？
1．        文章整体感觉结构清晰，说理也比较透彻，遣词造句值得我学习，还有觉得这篇文章真的挺难写的，自己写的太肤浅了，而且很多例子用的不对啊
2．        感觉二，三两段说的都是同一个意思，是不是应该再深入，或者平衡一下
说的只是个人意见，好像也是第一次改你的文章，呵呵，有什么不对的见谅啊！

ps：lz别泄气，加油啊！～我还有十几天就考了，还有很多没看，呵呵