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[182] Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

So many people hold the opinion that keeping a close relationship with animals is a good and sweet thing. Others, however, do not support that statement. From my perspective, I absolutely am an opponent of that view. I have a sense that we should not treat our pets as members of our family. There are a variety of reasons why I disagree the intimate relation with pets and I would in here explain a few of the most imperative ones.

One of the primary point is that if we put a lot of attention on pets, we would probably neglect the people around us we love and even hurt them. It can be given a concrete example. My two friends lived in a dormitory. One person liked dogs very mush but another one hated it a lot. Before the dog fed in their room, the two guys were the best friends and they enjoyed sharing the happiness and sadness to each other. Unfortunately, when the dog moved into their dorm, troubles and debates were coming along with the dog. Only for the trivial affair about the dog did they quarrel more and more often. Their friendship, ultimately, were broken up.

The further reason why I argue against the close relation between human beings and animals is that to rear a pet can take comparable money and attain nothing significant. For my country, it is not very rich and flourishing, and there are millions of children who are eager to go to school without any cash in their pocket. We can save the account which is supposed to keep pets and endow them to those poor children to make the opportunity for them to study. How nice it will be! Let me cast the accounts then. A person keeping a pet such as a dog has the possibility to spend over 20,000 yuan every year, whereas a child studying in the school will cost merely 1000 yuan per year. So we can afford 20 children to study instead of rearing pets. Thus we, of course, can feel mush more happy and successful than rearing a pet.

Taking into account of these factors, we can easily reach the conclusion that if is harmful to have a close relationship with pets.

[ 本帖最后由 orangechl 于 2006-8-6 21:41 编辑 ]

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怎么没人帮我改改呢。。。

orangechlUID: 2211016

怎么没人帮我改改呢。。。

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写的很好，语言很到位。
Thus we, of course, can feel mush more happy and successful than rearing a pet.应该为Thus we, of course, can feel mush happier and more successful than rearing a pet.
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[ 本帖最后由 netmaster 于 2006-8-7 22:46 编辑 ]

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[ 本帖最后由 扁舟子001 于 2006-8-7 23:26 编辑 ]

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I absolutely am ？——〉absolutely，I am。。。
Others, however, do not support that statement. From my perspective, I absolutely am an opponent of that view.看到这里还没往下看的话有点搞不清作者是反对那个观点，而且这两句的意思基本相同只是主语不同，如果改成Others, including me, .....会不会好些？
So we can afford 20 children to study instead of rearing pets.——〉So we can afford 20 children to study instead of rearing a pet.20个小孩和1只宠物，有个数量的比较会不会好些？
we can easily reach the conclusion that if is harmful to have a close relationship with pets.if——〉it笔误吧呵呵