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TOPIC: ISSUE152 - "The only responsibility of corporate executives, provided they stay within the law, is to make as much money as possible for their companies."
WORDS:633          TIME: 上午 12:45:00          DATE: 2006-8-22

提纲：
1 executive对公司尽职就应该实现利润得最大化
2 profits不是唯一责任，应该给员工提供一个良好得工作氛围，同时也是公司的榜样
3 应该关注一些可能由于公司得生产造成得社会问题

Does the only responsibility of company leaders bare in money making for their corporations, provided they are legal? The speaker claims the solitary goal of executives should attain is profit. Conceded that the speaker neglects some appropriate responsibilities the executives should take. However, I insofar concur with what the speaker's assertion that the most important responsibility is to earn as much money as possible, while not the single aim they should pursue.

To begin with, profit is the most significant and essential goal for the executives to pursue. That is to say, the responsibility to maximize profits for the company is not only essential to survive and thrive of itself as well as living and profit of its stuff, but is also of great significance to the prosperity of the society. Firstly, from the social aspects, the more a company earns, the more taxes they will pay. Accordingly, more investment would pour to enhance the citizen's living standard, such as better public medical system, better education quality, etc. In addition, it would result in less unemployment as companies employ more, and consequently less commitment and other potential problems in the society. Secondly, in the era full of marketing competition, the more they earn the stronger they would be. In fact, the increasing profit made by the company may lead to more investment in open the larger market consequently making more profits. Thirdly, good income of company would benefit its staff with more wages and they would be proud of themselves in working in the company physically and psychologically. Therefore, we can deduce that it is crucial to place profit in the first place for corporate leaders.


However, executives, always being the representatives and the core of companies, should take more roles rather than merely pointing on the purpose of earning more money. Managing of the whole company, executives should pay special attention on the company culture, which defined as atmosphere to identity of the company. Staff of the whole company would work more efficiently and intensively in a harmonious company culture. One needs look no further than The Disneyland for example. In the company, from actors to gate keepers, every one is ready to serve customers enthusiastically. This is due to a culture in of the company: customers are gods of us. That is to say, based on the faith in mind, every worker in the company should act their best to when providing service to their "gods". The executives also bare the duty to keep the highest moral example in the company. Unless the executives' act be admired and regard as examples, the leaders can not authorize others deep into ones' heart. Suppose a leader pay too much attention on the profit to care about works' health and interests, no one would like to stay long in such company. Consequently, there are far more responsibilities than mere profit within a corporation.

Moreover, executives should also pay appropriate attention on some responsibilities to other social interests. Society, what companies made profit from, is closely related to each corporation. One illustration of this point is environmental considerations. As many industries are environmental contaminated to some extent, they should be responsible to its social affect and help to recover the harmonious environment. Further more, they are liable to make less contamination in the future. That is which the executives should take into account when making strategies. Therefore, companies should pay much attention on what happens in the society, and also take some responsibility of them.  


To sum up, executives should take the most crucial responsibility to make as much profit as possible for their companies. Moreover, they should not neglect any other responsibilities to enable them for the better ones. Therefore, executives would contribute more and make more profit from what they make effort to.

kito9695UID: 209685

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[ 本帖最后由 kito9695 于 2006-8-25 12:50 编辑 ]

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kito9695UID: 209685

不好意思，贴晚了~

Does the only responsibility of company leaders bare in money making for their corporations, provided they are legal? The speaker claims the solitary goal of executives should attain is profit. Conceded that the speaker neglects some appropriate responsibilities the executives should take. However, I insofar concur with what the speaker's assertion that the most important responsibility is to earn as much money as possible, whileit is不应该省略吧 not the single aim they should pursue.主体句有待探讨，speaker好像并没有说making money是”the most important”的吧，而是用了”only”，那么你concur with的东西就不是speaker’s assertion了

To begin with, profit is the most significant and essential goal并不等同于responsibility for the executives to pursue. That is to say, the responsibility to maximize profits for the company is not only essential to survive and thrive of itself as well as living and profit of its stuff并列成份词性不一致, but is also of great significanceis去掉直接说but also important to the prosperity of the society. Firstly, from the social aspects, the more a company earns, the more taxes they will pay. Accordingly, more investment would pour to enhance the citizen's living standard, such as better public medical system, better education quality, etc. In addition, it would result in less unemployment as companies employ more, and consequently less commitment and other potential problems in the society. Secondly, in the era full of marketing competition, the more they earn the stronger they would be. In fact, the increasing profit made by the company may lead to more investment in open the larger market consequently making more profits. Thirdly, good income of company would benefit its staff with more wages and they would be proud of themselves in working in the company physically and psychologically. Therefore, we can deduce that it is crucial to place profit in the first place for corporate leaders.


However, executives, always being the representatives and the core of companies, should take more roles rather than merely pointing on the purpose of earning more money.
这点想得不错，赞，把executives与company自身的责任区分开来Managing of the whole company, executives should pay special attention on the company culture, which defined as atmosphere to identity of the company. 加点起承转接的词汇，譬如thenStaff of the whole company would work more efficiently and intensively in a harmonious company culture. One needs look no further than The Disneyland for example. In the company, from actors to gate keepers, every one is ready to serve customers enthusiastically. This is due to a culture in of the company: customers are gods of us. That is to say, based on the faith in mind, every worker in the company should act their best to when providing service to their "gods". 最后一句我认为完全没必要了，把例子说得过多了The executives also bare the duty to keep the highest moral example in the company. Unless the executives' act be admired and regard as examples, the leaders can not authorize others deep into ones' heart. Suppose a leader pay too much attention on the profit to care about works' health and interests, no one would like to stay long in such company. 恩，这个例子好像与”the executives' act be admired and regard as examples”没什么关系吧，即使是关心工人的health和interests，也不见得就能够be admired or regard as examples吧；此外，这一点可否归结为executives的责任也需要探讨一下Consequently, there are far more responsibilities than mere profit within a corporation.

Moreover, executives should also pay appropriate attention on some responsibilities to other social interests. Society, what companies made profit from, is closely related to each corporation. One illustration of this point is environmental considerations. As many industries are environmental contaminated to some extent, they should be responsible to its social affect and help to recover the harmonious environment. Further more连起来, they are liable to make less contamination in the future. That is which the executives should take into account when making strategies. Therefore, companies一下子又从executives转到了companies，注意 should pay much attention on what happens in the society, and also take some responsibility of them.  


To sum up, executives should take the most crucial responsibility to make as much profit as possible for their companies. Moreover,moreover有递进的意味，我觉得这里用besides, 或者at the same time更好 they should not neglect any other responsibilities to enable them forenable sb to do sth the better ones. Therefore, executives would contribute more and make more profit from what they make effort to.

总的来讲，逻辑上还是比较清楚的，语言略显生硬，注意长短句结合，继续加油吧！