Argu26 [Shining Sep 作文组] 8.26

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT26 - The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda.

"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."
WORDS: 408          TIME: 0:37:40          DATE: 2006-8-26

In this argument, the arguer asserts that the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Charles Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system. The arguer gives s the example of the Steel City High School to prove his argument. In addition, to support the conclusion, the arguer points out that the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments could be improved markedly over the past five years. However, all these reasons are untenable.

First of all, the arguer cites that when Mr. Schade was the music director at Steel City High School, the school band won three regional band competitions. Although a good music director is very important to a music band, it is not sure that all contribution attributed to the only person Mr. Schade. Maybe the real reason of three champions is that the band members are so excellent that they can defeat other bands easily without the director's instructions. Therefore, in this argument there is no evidence to demonstrate the direction ability of Mr. Schade.

Second, there is no inherent consequence between hiring Mr. Schade as music director and improving the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments. Mr. Schade is just an employee, and musical instruments and facilities are always very expensive. It is unlikely to buy new facilities and instruments for Steel City High School. Perhaps, the new facilities and instruments is bought by the high school. Hence, it is not a logical reason that hiring Mr. Schade can improve the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments of Saluda school.

Finally, the arguer advises the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system. This suggestion should be considered carefully, because Mr. Schade is just a direct but not a teacher, although he led a band won three regional band competitions. Even if he has a surprised music gift, it can not indicate that he is also a good music teach. After all, director and teacher is two different jobs.

To sum up, the conclusions lacks of credibility because the evidence cited in the analysis does not lend strong support to what the arguer maintains. To strengthen the argument , the arguer would have to give some detail information of Mr. Schade. To better evaluate the argument, we would need to know the teaching experience of Mr. Schade.

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First of all, the arguer cites that when Mr. Schade was the music director at Steel City High School, the school band won three regional band competitions. Although a good music director is very important to a music band, it is not sure that all contribution attributed to the only person Mr. Schade. Maybe the real reason of three champions is that the band members are so excellent that they can defeat 这个词不太好哦other bands easily without the director's instructions.---感觉这个reason说的有些不合理,但是自己也没想到改如何说为好 Therefore, in this argument there is no evidence to demonstrate the direction?direct? ability of Mr. Schade.

Second, there is no inherent consequence between hiring Mr. Schade as music director and improving the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments. Mr. Schade is just an employee, and musical instruments and facilities are always very expensive---想说什么?. It is unlikely to buy new facilities and instruments for Steel City High School. Perhaps, the new facilities and instruments is bought by the high school. Hence, it is not a logical reason that hiring Mr. Schade can improve the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments of Saluda school.

Finally, the arguer advises the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system. This suggestion should be considered carefully, because Mr. Schade is just a direct but not a teacher, although he led a band won three regional band competitions. Even if he has a surprised music gift, it can not indicate that he is also a good music teach. After all, director and teacher is two different jobs.文章是建议plan and direct啊 ,就挑plan说就好了