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[未归类] 请大家帮忙比较一下两段话哪一段写得好? [复制链接]

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发表于 2006-8-29 22:59:54 |显示全部楼层
请大家帮忙比较一下,以下两段话那一段写得比较好呢?, d7 V" F; F2 T
是我的ps里面的,请大家帮忙,谢谢!/ K  T, H4 q, {! c  r5 I) \( H
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It’s hard to deal with. I haven’t answered all those questions, but I came to know that wealth, influence and reputation don’t always consist of large fortune and high status. Not long ago, my father declined the invitation of a Shanghai well-known television station. They hoped to hire him as the chief lighting engineer, while before that, he was just a streetlamp terminals electrician and often on the run around out-of-the-way regions to fixl streetlamps. “I’m crazy about my job. Don’t you think your father is like a magic brightness-giver?” It’s his reason, simple and sincere.4 Z! ~, N4 b1 }: ]- C
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It’s hard to deal with. I haven’t answered all those questions, but I came to know that wealth, influence and reputation don’t always consist of large fortune and high status. My father is a streetlamp terminals electrician and he has to be on the run to fix streetlamps. Not long ago, one of the Shanghai television stations offered my father a very good jov with high salary, but he declined it. He said to me “I’m crazy about my job. Don’t you think your father is like a magic brightness-giver?” It’s his reason, simple and sincere.
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讲的事情是一样的,大家认为哪一种叙述比较好呢?6 z2 H6 D( f, I! s7 H8 b
或者综合一下?。。。
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发表于 2006-8-30 15:01:11 |显示全部楼层
请大家帮帮忙吧。。。4 }7 m% g& {9 i) \: M$ B
是不是都很绕口?

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发表于 2006-9-2 09:33:03 |显示全部楼层
我找了一个在英国念书的朋友,她替我改的' b" t% g5 T5 ]* E5 R
It’s hard to deal with. I haven’t answered all those questions, but I came to know that wealth, influence and reputation do not always consist of large fortune and high status. My father is a streetlamp terminals electrician; he is often out in the countryside fixing streetlamps. Not long ago, a well-known television station in Shanghai offered my father the job of chief lighting engineer, but he rejected it. He said “I’m crazy about my job. Don’t you think your father is like a magic brightness-giver?” Such a simple and sincere reason!" d/ p( {9 d" ~9 _; t
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大家觉得如何呢?

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发表于 2006-9-2 09:33:48 |显示全部楼层

还有这个

也是意思相同的,大家看看哪个比较好呢?
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Following this plan and relegating my interest in elementary education to the back of my mind, I am majoring in German in order to meet my objective made according to the increasing demand for foreign language talents.

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发表于 2006-9-2 10:30:22 |显示全部楼层
第二个  语言上不好说  但内容上   一只包含一层意思   二  还说了你有语言天赋
对自己总有期许

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