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TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
WORDS: 377          TIME: 1:03:40 AM          DATE: 30/08/2006

    The reason of the argument " a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil would act as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism" seems logical. However, after further consideration, there are several fallacies in this newsletter.
     First of all, the frequency of visiting to doctors for the treatment of colds cannot prove that eating fish helps to prevent colds since there are some others explanations. It is possible that the climate in East Meria is very mild or the air pollution level is low, both of which prevent people from getting cold. In addition, there may be something else in local people's diet or people in East Metia tend to do more exercises, which make them keep far away from colds.
It is also possible that when people get colds in East Meria, they do not think it is a big problem. So they usually do not choose to see a doctor. They all may be the reasons why only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds for people in East Maria.
     Moreover, even though most people who say they catch colds so that they have to be absent from school or work are honest, the daily use of lchthaid cannot ensure the absenteeism will be lowered. It is possible that the partial nutrition of the fish which can prevent people from cold just exists in fresh fish which means when the fish is made into fish oil, this useful part for the treatment of colds is gone. Also, perhaps just certain kinds of fish have the function of preventing colds and they happen to be in the sea area of East Meria. So lchthaid made from other kinds of fish oil may not work.
     Finally, even if it is true the consumption of a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds, it cannot ensure absenteeism can be lowered. It is highly possible that colds is just a commonly used excuse for students who do not want to go to school and for workers who hope to skip their work.  
    To sum up, before we get to the conclusion that daily use of lchthaid can prevent colds and lower absenteeism, all the possible explanations I mentioned above should be taken into account.

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT38 - The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.

"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
WORDS: 377          TIME: 1:03:40 AM          DATE: 30/08/2006

    The reason of the argument " a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil would act as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism" seems logical. However, after further consideration, there are several fallacies in this newsletter.
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     First of all, the frequency of visiting to doctors for the treatment of colds cannot prove that eating fish helps to prevent colds since there are some others explanations. 最好还是指明那个地区的人们It is possible that the climate in East Meria is very mild or the air pollution level is low, both of which prevent people from getting coldcolds. In addition, there may be something else in local people's diet or people in East Metia tend to do more exercises, which make them keep far away from colds.It is also possible that when people get colds in East Meria, they do not think it is a big problem. So they usually do not choose to see a doctor. They all may be the reasons why only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds for people in East Maria.
     Moreover, even though most people who say thatthey catch colds so that they have to be absent from school or work are honest这句成分好乱, the daily use of lchthaid cannot ensure the absenteeism will be lowered. It is possible that the partial nutrition of the fish which can prevent people from cold just exists in fresh fish which means when the fish is made into fish oil, this useful part for the treatment of colds is gonewill be deprived这个例子不错. Also, perhaps just certain kinds of fish have the function of preventing colds and they happen to be in the sea area of East Meria. So lchthaid made from other kinds of fish oil may not work.
     Finally, even if it is true the consumption of a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds, it cannot ensure absenteeism can这个can就别要了 be lowered. It is highly possible that colds is just a commonly used excuse for students who do not want to go to school and for workers who hope to skip their work.  再说说why就好了 感觉论点展开不充分
    To sum up, before we get to the conclusion that daily use of lchthaid can prevent colds and lower absenteeism, all the possible explanations I mentioned above should be taken into account.最后一句好像草草了事～～～
感觉举的例子还是不错的  不过字数好像少了点

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