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题目：ARGUMENT 26 - The following appeared in a memo from the chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda.

"For the past five years, Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director at Steel City High School, and during that time the school band from Steel City High has won three regional band competitions. In addition, the quality of the music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High has improved markedly over the past five years. Because of such successes at Steel City High, the Saluda school board should hire Mr. Schade to plan and direct the general music education programs for the entire Saluda school system."
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The chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda recommends that the school should be sensible to recruit Mr. Schade as the general music education programs for the whole Saluda school. In order to make his claim more acceptable and convincing, the chairperson cites the acquired regional band competitions during Mr. Schade's service time and the amelioration in music facilities and instruments at the Steel City High in the past. The evidence and reasoning sound logical and persuasive at the first glance, however close scrutiny reveals that the evidence does not lend a credible support to the recommendation in essence.

First and foremost, the mere fact that three regional band competitions are won during Mr. Schade's service does not tell anything concerning his capability as the music director. It is totally possible that Mr. Schade has contributed little even nothing to the accomplishment in regional band competitions and all the relevant work is done by his colleagues or subordinates. Further, perhaps he merely admitted the taking part in the competition and does nothing more. Therefore, although the success of band competition happened when Mr. Schade was in the position, no evidence is provided to convince us that all the accomplishments should be attributed to the music director.

Secondly, the improvement of music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High are insufficient to substantiate that Mr. Schade's ability in working as music director. As we know, the purchase of those musical instruments and facilities is closely and greatly determined by the budget of the school and the fund from the government. Perhaps, Steel City High is famous for music education and parents send their children there for better education in the aspect of music particularly. Therefore, in order to guarantee the advanced and necessary instruments and facilities are available; the school every year is willing to place much money on them. In other words, Mr. Schade plays no essential role in the improvement of relevant instruments. And if Mr. Smith, or some other people takes the place of Mr. Schade, the amelioration of the music facilities and relevant items would also be realized in the past few years. Consequently, the evidence does not lend strong support to the argument of chairperson.

Finally, even granted that all the success and progress in music education in Steel City High, it is unfair for chairperson to assume that Mr. Schade would fit with the Saluda school and play the same effective role. Common sense tells us that an excellent work is done usually by the joined effort of a group of people. Perhaps, in Steel City School there are a group of staff including the music director Mr. Schade, and his subordinates, who have a good sense of team spirit and cooperate with each others. However, this is not necessarily the case in Saluda school. Therefore the personal excellence of Mr. Schade might not be able to bring the expected progress in Saluda school due to lack of coordinated cooperation with the new staff here.

To sum up, the evidence put forward in the memo fails to support the recommendations and the chairperson need to take into account more factors involved the progress of music education.

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The chairperson of the school board in the town of Saluda recommends that the school should be sensible to recruit Mr. Schade as the general music education programs for the whole Saluda school. In order to make his claim more acceptable and convincing, the chairperson cites the acquired regional band competitions during Mr. Schade's service time and the amelioration in music facilities and instruments at the Steel City High in the past. The evidence and reasoning sound logical and persuasive at the first glance, however close scrutiny reveals that the evidence does not lend a credible support to the recommendation in essence.

First and foremost, the mere fact that three regional band competitions are won during Mr. Schade's service does not tell anything concerning his capability as the music director. It is totally possible that Mr. Schade has contributed little even nothing to the accomplishment in regional band competitions and all the relevant work is done by his colleagues or subordinates. Further, perhaps he merely admitted the taking part in the competition and does nothing more. Therefore, although the success of band competition happened when Mr. Schade was in the position, no evidence is provided to convince us that all the accomplishments should be attributed to the music director.

Secondly, the improvement of music rehearsal facilities and musical instruments at Steel City High are insufficient to substantiate that Mr. Schade's ability in working as music director. As we know, the purchase of those musical instruments and facilities is closely and greatly determined by the budget of the school and the fund from the government. Perhaps, Steel City High is famous for music education and parents send their children there for better education in the aspect of music particularly. Therefore, in order to guarantee the advanced and necessary instruments and facilities are available; the school every year is willing to place much money on them. In other words, Mr. Schade plays no essential role in the improvement of relevant instruments. And if Mr. Smith, or some other people takes the place of Mr. Schade, the amelioration of the music facilities and relevant items would also be realized in the past few years. Consequently, the evidence does not lend strong support to the argument of chairperson.

Finally, even granted that all the success and progress in music education in Steel City High, it is unfair for chairperson to assume that Mr. Schade would fit with the Saluda school and play the same effective role. Common sense tells us that an excellent work is done usually by the joined effort of a group of people. Perhaps, in Steel City School there are a group of staff including the music director Mr. Schade, and his subordinates, who have a good sense of team spirit and cooperate with each others. However, this is not necessarily the case in Saluda school. Therefore the personal excellence of Mr. Schade might not be able to bring the expected progress in Saluda school due to lack of coordinated cooperation with the new staff here.

To sum up, the evidence put forward in the memo fails to support the recommendations and the chairperson need to take into account more factors involved the progress of music education.

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