Issue130 感觉可能没有读懂题，大家怎么看?

lxmsosUID: 2133854

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS: 405          TIME: 0:46:28 AM          DATE: 02/09/2006

     It seems obvious that how children are socialized today determines the destiny of society since the children represent the future of the society. However, I cannot fully agree this opinion. Also, it is unfair to say that we have not yet learned how to raise children to who can help bring out a better society.
     
     To begin with, how children are socialized today can partly influence the society instead of fully determine the destiny of society because quite a lot factors exert effects on the growth of children. There is no denying that children today will become dominants of our society in near future, so the ideas they hold and the way they behave will decide the direction of future society. However, their ideology and behavior are not only influenced by how they are socialized but also by their characters, family backgrounds and the personal experiences they have when growing up. Thus, we cannot ensure that how children are socialized determines the destiny of society.

     Second, we should be glad that we have figured out some good ways to raise children. By different ways of education, our society succeeds in giving most children the right perceptions toward life and the society they live in. For example, we teach scientific methods and knowledge, making them better understand how the nature works and consider questions in more effective ways. In addition, we make role models in history to teach them how to be good citizens and how important to persist in high moral standard. Also, they are told how to help others by ways of doing volunteer work for their communities. Through the knowledge and experience they get, most of them can gradually establish the correct opinions towards themselves, their families and the whole society.

     Admittedly, today there are many bad influences on children by means of some media. For instance, large numbers of movies or even cartons which contain violence and sexuality contents cause children tend to be more violent so that the average age of murders become younger and more crimes are committed by children. Moreover, youths are more open to sex and the moral standard declines greatly due to the negative education to children from some popular media.

     In sum, although there are lots of bad influences on children from today's society, there is no doubt that children still get enough positive education which will help children to bring about a better society.

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

laura440UID: 2233549

个人认为题意：孩子社会化程度决定社会未来——>我们还不知道怎么培养孩子（暗含：我们还不知道如何使孩子社会化）
关于这篇文章：正文第一二段可以，如果详细展开一下会更好；第三段关于现代社会对孩子的影响好像有点偏，和社会化、培养孩子关系不大
建议：把原正文一二段改为二三段，正文第一段支持一下作者的观点：》

realyoyyUID: 2198700

关键 sociey socialized destiny better

fighzUID: 2178661

我认为这是一个1+1的题目，前后两句可以理解为因果关系，而后句raise children的范畴又大于前者的socialization, 而个人认为本文对“儿童社会化”的这个概念的理解决定了全文的走势。不妨看看我的文章，大家作个交流。
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2
1，        儿童社会化的定义：  学习长辈行为-与同年人建立联系-在社会中找到自己的位置的过程。
2，        儿童社会化在一定程度上影响了我们的社会，但还不足以决定社会的命运。儿童社会化只是社会发展的一个必然趋势，而非目的。决定社会命运的是儿童对于社会以及知识道德伦理的理解，以及他们的世界观，人生观。何况还有很多自然因素影响着社会命运，又何止社会化这个基本问题？
3，        在如何教育儿童bring about a better society方面我们做得还很不够。在儿童的社会化问题上我们已经做得可以了，但如何让这些社会化的儿童bring about a better society问题上还有很长的路要走。如保护自然，尊重弱者，伦理道德等建立和谐社会的因素。

lxmsosUID: 2133854

感谢各位的建议！
找到了一些关键字， https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... type%26typeid%3D146
第三段是在讲社会对孩子的影响了，确实偏了！！！！

ChunyanLi2005UID: 2124266

However, their ideology and behavior are not only influenced by how they are socialized but also by their characters, family backgrounds and the personal experiences they have when growing up.      
应该具体说说their characters, family backgrouds and personal experiences 怎么影响了
比如说家庭的暴力使他们厌恶社会,也愿意用暴力去解决事情
或者个人的内向,导致difficulty in communicate with others

你的写作格式好像不太对啊
既然段前空两格 就不要段络间空一行
或者空一行   每段就顶格写

lxmsosUID: 2133854

嗯，谢谢指点，我着实应该重写了，感觉偏题加论证不足！！！

哦？格式是这样的呀！呵呵，谢谢了，以前还真不知道！

alyssacutieUID: 2226141

fighz分析的很透彻，谢谢啊。大后天就考了，issue还是不行，差的很远啊

wanpiUID: 2167355

我觉得第一句是个前提，认同就好了。需要表明自己立场的是第二句。不过socialize不是很懂，查了一下词典：
1 [I] to spend time with other people in a friendly way:  socialize with//  --People don't socialize with their neighbours as much as they used to.//
  2 [T usually passive] to train someone to behave in a way that is acceptable in the society they are living in:  socialize sb into sth//  --Girls are socialized into appropriate 'feminine' behavior.//
我的理解，socialized就是能够被社会所接纳，能够与他人和谐相处的能力。
要训练这个能力，主要考虑提高交际沟通能力，团队合作能力，同理心（理解他人感受，接受他人观念的能力），还有适应竞争的能力