Issue98 啡儿第一篇习作，请多指教！

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lz对不起，老早就感冒了，今天又加重了，白天跑了一天毕业设计，头太晕，现在是刚睡醒，为了保证改的质量，这篇改得很慢很慢，请谅解。现在还是头昏脑涨的状态，我慢慢改。

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题目TOPIC: ISSUE98 - "Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music, film, advertising, and television because contemporary culture has much greater relevance for students than do arts and literature of the past."

中文提纲
开头：反对作者观点
1、古典的艺术和文学是真正滋润灵魂的学问;
2、古典文化的难度要求教育者更多的投入;
3、不能完全拒绝当代文化，但不应该放到更高的位置.
结论

Popular music, film or advertising and etc. have reached every corner of the world, and students certainly have greater opportunities to be exposed to the contemporary culture than the past counterpart.Should colleges or universities emphasize more on contemporary culture accordingly? The speaker claims so, however, I strongly oppose to the speaker's assertion for the following reasons. 开头前面背景介绍部分写得不错，就是从问句开始，味道就没有了，据传言提问的方式ETS早就厌倦了，我个人也非常不喜欢提问原题目，显得思维太老套了，直接摆出自己的观点就可以了。

First of all, it is only classical arts and literature that can nourish one's soul. Classical arts and literature are the essence of past culture which has been subjected to the test of time. These excellent cultural works that we can still see today are preserved and protected generation by generation in the reason that these works do cultivate different minds and give reasonance to different hearts. Calvino once said "every time when I read classical works, it's like my first voyage to explore.名言引用得不错 Classical works are such things that can easily degrade the temporary interests to background noise". These works keep down the laborious deploitation to outside world and inside mind of past people and reflects the highest level that human's minds can achieve. To be compared with popular cultural products, the classical works are much more likely to give nourish to people's mind and soul. Should universities choose the less substantial but more prevailing contemporary culture instead of classical works? The answer is apparantly no. 论证很不错，比较详尽了

Secondly, classical culture works need to be paid more attention by educational institutions than the popular ones. Classical works are always much more difficult to accept for common people, especially those less developed. For example,  an Italian opera or a classical symphony can easily weary a lot of students, while pop songs of Britney Spears make them excited and flourishing. The complexity of classical works deserves the educaters' more efforts to explain and convey their connotation to the students. Only if students get to know the culture origin and developing process, can they have a better knowledge and positioning of contemporary culture.
本段优势在于论证角度的选择，对比有力，例子选择很成功
Admittedly, contemporary culture are not all valueless and some of them might become classical works of future time and little knowledge of contemprary culture might get one isolated from others. It's easy to find that everyday topic of students on the campus are always around popular movie or modern architechture or some interesting advertisement. So people might be refused by the major group if he or she has no idea about popular culture. Taking these factors, universities and colleges should not totally refuse current culture. However, if popular music, film, advertising or television are overemphasized at the expense of teaching and studying of classical arts and literature, it will be not worth the candle.

In conclusion, I hope it has been shown that, to nourish their mind and to help them get closer to cultural essence, students should receive more education on classical arts and literatures from colleges and universities even if contemporary culture may has kind of more direct relevance for students at present times.

Lz本文的body三段写得很赞，不足的地方就是开头跟结尾，模版迹象比较严重，而且是老套的写法，建议在这两部分花点时间。我提倡开头的处理方法是，先将题目分类，每类题目归纳一个通用开头，比如法律类通用开头不妨类似这样：
Laws, body of official rules and regulations, found in constitutions, legislations, judicial opinions, and the like, are used to govern a society and control the behavior of its members. Concerning laws, the author asserts that since laws are categorized as just ones and unjust ones, every individual in a society is incumbent to obey just laws and to disobey unjust laws. This view, in my eyes, is fundamentally irrational in ignoring the significance of certain constancy in legal system. To better present my viewpoint let me illustrate it in details.
然后根据题目的不同稍做变化，考试之前背好，这样的开头考试的时候很出彩，而且，自己提前背好了，上考场咔咔咔敲进去，还可以稳定情绪。

结尾处理方法类似，按照类型总结结尾。

总体来说，lz的AW写作思路方法很正确。第一篇习作，这样的水平，看来lz是种子型选手，加油写！
下面给你个提纲开阔思路：
A. Admittedly, course work in popular culture is legitimate and valuable.
B. Emphasizing the study of popular culture at the expense of studying classical art and literature can carry harmful consequences for students, as well as for society. Only by studying the classics can an individual develop fair standards for judging popular works.
C. Many popular culture emerges from the mediocrity, yet the classical works have been subjected enduring test.
D. Emphasizing on the formal study of popular culture is unnecessary It is readily available outside the classroom.