求助

吃水的鱼UID: 2243348

自己写的作文，大家帮忙看看大概能拿多少分行吗？ 谢谢~~

Nowadays, smoking is banned in some places, which is considered to be unfair by cigarette smokers. Be that as it may, I don’t really support those cigarette smokers.
I have to admit that smoking can be an entertainment for smokers to relax. And it is fairly clear that cigarettes can sometimes help smokers to think deeply and wisely.
However, on the contrary, we should seriously face up to the negative effects of public smoking. First and foremost, in so far as smokers themselves, it is acknowledged that frequent smoking does great harm to smokers. For instance, someone who struggles for dear life eventually gets lung cancer simply because of too much smoking. And he may even pass away soon, not having enjoyed what he has struggled for his whole life. A healthy body is an indispensable part in a successful life, and therefore, frequent smoking is not recommended.
Moreover, smoking costs a lot. That is, according to a recent investigation, it is estimated that a heavy smoker spends about 500 RMB monthly, which is a half of an ordinary worker’s salary.
Last but not least, anyone’s behavior of smoking will contribute to a certain space of contamination, and it is conceivable that people around him will inevitably breathe passive smoke. Then, how about others’ rights to own a healthy life?
Of course, smokers have their own needs for smoking. Yet I think that they do have to care about their health, that they do have to take their families into account, and that they do have to concern more about others in public. According to the all above, I strongly propose smokers to think before they smoke. And only the correct times and right places are to choose to smoke is where it does the least harm to all of us.

金金鱼UID: 2202172

最近鱼真多～～:)
接近6分的文章～

吃水的鱼UID: 2243348

怎么样才能提高作文的分数呢？？

stm008281UID: 2149533

多看范文，自己多练习写，写了后一定要找人给改，最好是自己学校得英语老师

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原帖由 金金鱼 于 2006-12-20 13:56 发表
最近鱼真多～～:)
接近6分的文章～

第一反应是GT的分数算法 ~~~:D

金金鱼UID: 2202172

哈哈～～欢迎Pt来这里～～

LZ要多看范文学会汲取范文中的精华，再加上自己的练习

yidi mercuryUID: 195299

:eek: :eek: 陷得好深~~~