issue200 随机抽的题目,感觉有点跑题了, 本周四机考,有拍必回!

waidswUID: 2256074

题目：ISSUE 200 - "The most elusive knowledge is self-knowledge, and it is usually acquired through solitude, rather than through interaction with others."
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Is it true that the most elusive knowledge is self-knowledge and always acquired through solitude rather than through interaction with others? I concede that the self-perception, or otherwise the self-knowledge is important for a mature individual to survive and thrive in the society, and it is difficult to grasp an accurate and stable self-knowledge. However, the self-knowledge is sometimes realized by means of compare and contrast with others as well as the solitude.

To begin with, the self-knowledge, in my view, is how people deems themselves, or in other words, how people discover their attributes and evaluate their abilities, such as whether they define themselves with tenacity, strong-mind, or diligence. And such self-knowledge is set up regularly with the accumulation of the life experiences. For an adult, it is necessary to have a strong and stable self-knowledge in that it helps to made decisions in life, set up the goals, design the career blueprints and determine the approaches to make self-advancement. In this sense, the self-knowledge possesses a life-long influence to individuals and will, to some extent, determine the life quality and self-achievements of the person. The sense of confidence, for example, which is a positive self-knowledge, will great enhance the person's determination, inspiration and diligence in the process of making achievements since confidence can heighten the courage and boldness when facing difficulties and hardships. It is a significant attribute in people's lives simply because it is the premise for a person willing to success to believe in themselves in the first place. After all, no one will trust you if you do not have faith for yourselves.

Further, a clear self-knowledge is hard to achieve because we could not always understand ourselves. It is a huge task to totally and accurately know a person, even ourselves since the human psychological constituents are so complex to understand and our state of mind are so changeful and vulnerable to the outside variations. For example, we make numbers of decisions in our lives, but we don't know how many decisions are made actually according to our own thoughts and ideas without the influence of the environments. We purchase because we are induced by the advertisements or the trends of popularity, we rarely recognize our own needs. Our aesthetic views are determined by the super stars, the pop magazines and other media not sourced form our internal world. We sometimes just follow the trend rather than explorer our own thoughts. In this situation, it is hard to realize ourselves, what kind of people we are? Which are my advantages and disadvantages? It demands meditation and self-reflection to know who we are, and we have to discover our pros and cons by ourselves. In order to acquire a better self-knowledge, we cannot be driven by the seemingly authorities outside ourselves but to follow our own heart and explore our abilities.

However, though the self-knowledge could be achieved by self-retrospect and other forms of individual thinking activities, the accurate and precise self-knowledge has to achieve though both the individual solitude and the interaction with others. I always think about the original reason why people are divided into ones who have strong confidence and other who have little. It mustn't be the natal diverse since there are no indication that people are determined before birth. In my opinion, It is the experience that determines the self-attitude of a person and in turn determine their lives.  A person who is always encouraged by teachers and parents are more likely to become confident, or otherwise a positive self-knowledge. Moreover, a person who is always doing better than peers tends to build a strong self-trust. To the contrary, people who are always criticized and scolded may lose heart and are not willing to keep on struggling. In this sense, consider that the natural situation of human beings are mostly the same, it is the environment that determine how the people conceive themselves.

To sum up, the self-knowledge is important for people to live in the society since it help us to success, and it is difficult to grasp an accurate and stable self-knowledge. It is through the collaboration between the interaction with others and the self-perception that lead to a positive and accurate self-knowledge.

[ 本帖最后由 waidsw 于 2006-12-27 10:44 编辑 ]

waidswUID: 2256074

自己顶一个,有没有人帮看一下啊!

candyliuliuUID: 2235220

语法错误很多，一上来就有很多~~用词上也有很多错~~建仪你别凑那么多字，写的精简些~~620字就可以了~~层次上也有些问提~~

waidswUID: 2256074

谢谢! 能不能更详细点?

[ 本帖最后由 waidsw 于 2006-12-27 08:29 编辑 ]

candyliuliuUID: 2235220

第1句上来就少了个is （is acquired。。。。。）
sometimes，
by means of comparing and contrasting
to thrive in society
这是我能看到的你第1段的错，而且是比较表层的一写错误~~建仪你不要凑字数，你整篇给我的感绝就有点凑字数的感决~~你可以看看我前两天在本版发的一个关于字数的贴~~

waidswUID: 2256074

的确有点凑字数,因为题目不熟,就想多写点给自己点信心, 其实开始还是花些时间好好审题比较好, 谢谢candyliuliu的指正, 明天就考了, 希望不要再出现这么多错误(仅仅是希望...), 惭愧啊, 写了好多篇了, 还是很烂.....
再次感谢一下candyliuliu!


compare and contrast 不都有名词的意思吗?

[ 本帖最后由 waidsw 于 2006-12-27 10:45 编辑 ]

candyliuliuUID: 2235220

大多数情况下你这种用法都是做为动词来用的~~

Anyway good luck~~

最後の使徒UID: 2257608

我看你文章看太多了也提不出什么新观点了, 注意定惯词和动词变化就是了(看这篇基本看不出以前的毛病了)

只能在这祝你明天好成绩哈~

expire7UID: 2160574

还好了，加油考就是。
不用担心的。不要偏题哦

waidswUID: 2256074

谢谢ls诸位的关心，现在已经考完了，今天考得都是比较熟的题，感觉还不错。