Issue154 【CSMY作文互改小组】第一次作业 第一稿修订中

siyuandingUID: 2154137

Issue154（2005年2-9月总频50次）
"Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."

观点 完全同意
提纲 1  正规教育的好
           2   正规教育的缺陷，重点讲它不能针对每一位学生
           3   社区及家长教育对正规教育的补充，重点讲家长能发现小孩的特长
           [转折加递进的结构]
正文
Education plays a crucial role in one's whole life, which includes not only the knowledge teaching, but also the moral education, ability training and so forth. I strongly agree with the speaker's assertion that education is so important that parents and communities should also participate in local education.，which is not just the responsibility of a group of professional educators.

As we know, school education, which has been fully developed, perhaps is the most important and effective way to nurture children with a variety of knowledge. Suppose, one child staying in the classroom is educated of curriculum that has been already planned systemly and elaborately, from mathematics to astronomy, from English to liberty, from history to modern society and etc.. What a wonderful thing our society has ever given to our children. Further more, the school education is composed of a group of experienced experts who know what students want, what could attract their interests to studying, and how to make them study well. All of that has warranted importance status of formal school educators in the children's whole education.

However, teachers have to take care of many children and they would make decision for all their students as a whole resulting in that teachers would not have too much attention to make a special program for a single individual. Children with special talents such as writing, painting, acting, computer programming and so forth, for instance, need to be noticed and nurtured so they will do well in school and in their later lives. Can students with learning and attraction difficulties in school actually be the talented scientists in disguise? If we look to history to answer this question, we see compelling evidence that giants such as Thomas Edison, Sir Isaac Newton, and Leonardo da Vinci might have been students like this. Similar to assiduous students today, they were diligent and eager to pursue learning, yet in unconventional ways. In contemporary society, Bill Gates is the very good example. When he studied in Lakeside where he was first introduced to computers, Bill Gates found himself inseparable from the computer. He would like to stay in the computer room day after day, learning computer literature, writing programs, and doing anything else associated with computers; but on the other side, he was skipping classes, turning in homework late and doing other things that went against the educators' intention. Such things make a business giant in the future.

Accordingly, we could resort to parents and communities whose role would not be placed by the formal school education in one respect and another. It is often said that parents are the best teachers. Parents, usually the most intimate persons to children, profoundly influence their children in moral development and character education. And moreover, parents can be very important in helping their children develop their talents by creating opportunities and conditions. Take also the example of Bill Gates. In elementary school Bill Gates quickly surpassed all of his peer's abilities in nearly all subjects, especially math and science. His parents recognized his intelligence and decide to enroll him in Lakeside, a private school known for its intense academic environment. This decision had for reaching effects on Bill Gates' later success. Communities are also very important. A good community could prevent students from influences of bad behaviors such as smoking, drinking alcohol, taking drugs, committing crimes and etc. and provide healthy environment for the growth of young children.

In sum, because of the significant status of education in man's whole life, parents and communities should cooperate with local schools to educate their children, which makes a full sense of education.

参考资料
0606G同主题写作第十三期——issue154
一篇关于Bill Gates生平的简单介绍
       http://ei.cs.vt.edu/~history/Gates.Mirick.html
两篇关于students with special talents的介绍
        http://goliath.ecnext.com/coms2/summary_0199-3440683_ITM
      http://www.kidsource.com/kidsource/content4/special.talents.html
几篇G友的文章
         https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=315846
       https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=378953
       https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=315907
       https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=422153&fpage=1&highlight=
       https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=429399&extra=page%3D1
       https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=426820&extra=page%3D1%26filter%3Ddigest

[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-2 19:02 编辑 ]

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Education plays a crucial role in one's whole life, which includes not only the knowledge teaching, but also the moral education, ability training and so forth. (As education, which includes knowledge impartation, ability, moral cultivation, ability training and so forth, plays a crucial role in one’s whole life, I strongly agree with …) I strongly agree with the speaker's assertion that education is so important that parents and communities should also (需要么？) participate in local education, which is not just the responsibility of a group of professional educators.As we know, school education, which has been fully developed, perhaps is (may be) the most important and effective way to nurture children with a (great) variety of knowledge. Suppose, one child staying in the classroom is educated of (with) curriculum (curricula) that has (have) been already (already been) planned systemly (systematically) and elaborately, from mathematics to astronomy, from English to liberty, from history to modern society and etc. (我觉得这些学科之间应该存在某种递进或者递反的关系). What a wonderful thing our society has ever given to our children. Further more （Furthermore）, the school education is composed of a group of experienced experts who know what students want, what could attract their interests to (attract … to…后面接动名词么？还是你的这个studying意作名词) studying, and how to make them study well. All of （those: 前面说了不止一个）that has warranted （没有必要用完成时态：warrant the important）importance (改成形容词important) status of formal school educators in the children's whole education.However, teachers have to take care of many children and they would make decision for all their students as a whole resulting in that teachers would not have too much attention to make a special program for a single individual. (我觉得这句可以这么表达：However, the situation of teachers having to take care of many children and making decisions for all of them results in the fact that teachers have little attention placed on special programs made for a single student) Children with special talents such as writing, painting, acting, computer programming （and so forth） （一般在文中最好不要用词重复， 这个地方可以删除）, for instance （为什么用例如，有点中国化）, need to be noticed and nurtured so they will do well in school and in their later lives. （这句可以这样表达：Those children, who are endowed with special talents on writing, painting, acting and computer programming, deserve unique “take-care” that they will perform well in current education, and even in their after lives）
Can students with learning and attraction （注意力不集中一般用concentration） difficulties in school actually be the talented scientists in disguise?（前面这句话要表达什么意思？我怎么看不明白呢, 你是说学习不专心或者注意力不集中的那些人未必成不了天才吧？） If we look to （look to没有这个意思吧？句型look up … for （doing） sth，　推荐句式，One need look no further than …, we can see a great many of evidences that …） history to answer this question, we see compelling evidence （evidences） that giants such as Thomas Edison, Sir Isaac Newton, and Leonardo da Vinci might have been students like this. Similar to assiduous students today (应该是和前面的前辈一样，这些学生…) , they were (一般用现在时态) diligent and eager to pursue learning, yet in unconventional ways. In contemporary society, Bill Gates is the（前面没出现，用a）very good example. When he studied in Lakeside where he was (at the first time) first introduced to computers (修改：computer was, at the first time, being introduced), Bill Gates (he) found himself inseparable from (with) the computer (them). He (would like to stay) stayed in the computer room day (after) by day , learning computer literature, writing programs, and doing anything else associated with computers; but on the other side,(哪个地方有on the first side呢?) he was skipping classes (逃课是这样表达的么？查一下字典), turning in homework late and doing other things that went against the educators' intention.（该句修改成： he skipped classes he was not interested in, turned in homework unpunctually and always went against the educators’ expectation, …） Such things make a business giant in the future.Accordingly, we could resort to (这个词比较好) parents and communities whose role would not be placed （replaced） by the formal school education in one respect and another. It is often said that parents are the best teachers. Parents, usually the most intimate persons to children, profoundly influence their children in moral development and character education (个性培养character cultivation). And (And 可以去掉) moreover, parents can be very important in helping their children develop their talents by creating opportunities and conditions. Take also the example of Bill Gates (Take the same example mentioned above). In elementary school Bill Gates (突出主语：Bill Gates, in his elementary school, ) quickly surpassed all of (of可以去掉) his peer's abilities in nearly all subjects, especially math and science. His parents recognized his intelligence and decide （decided）to enroll (学校enroll学生，这里应该是父母送学生去哪个学校吧？) him in Lakeside, a private school known for its intense academic environment. This decision had for reaching effects （这个词挺好的：far-reaching effects） on Bill Gates' later success. Communities are also very important. A good community could prevent students from influences of bad behaviors such as smoking, drinking alcohol, taking drugs, committing crimes and etc. and provide healthy environment for the growth of young children.In sum, because of the significant status of education in man's （one’s） whole life, parents and communities should cooperate with local schools to educate their (他们三的吗？指代不清楚) children, which makes a full sense of education.

总的点评
（1）文章基本上写出了学校，家庭和社会之间对孩子教育的重要性，但是应该从更深的层次来挖掘教育的目的，以及为什么不能把教育单单留给那些具有专业技能的老师。
（2）文章句式稍微简单了点，要是能用更加复杂一点和多变一点的句式的话，可能会更好。
（3）文章的例子过于典型，当然这是突出文章论点的一个很重要的方面，但是我觉得能用比较典型但新颖的例子更好，因为典型的例子往往人家都会用，后面的自然不用说了。
（4）文章的结尾梢显简单，应该再更详细一点叙述一下你所论述的内容。


本人能力和知识有限，改得不对的地方多包涵

浮华如烟UID: 113618

Education plays a crucial role in one's whole life, which includes not only the knowledge teaching, but also the moral education, ability training and so forth. I strongly agree with the speaker's assertion that education is so important that parents and communities should also participate in local education.，which is not just the responsibility of a group of professional educators.[开头符合要求，背景＋明确表明了自己的立场]As we know, school education, which has been fully developed, perhaps[建议去掉，因为你前面强调了Aｓwe know，用这个词看起来底气不足] is the most important and effective way to nurture children with a variety of knowledge. Suppose, one child staying in the classroom is educated of curriculum that has been already planned systemly[systematically] and elaborately, [用这个词不妥，可考虑死板的，固定的]from mathematics to astronomy, from English to liberty, from history to modern society and etc.. What a wonderful thing our society has ever given to our children.[正式文体中不宜用感叹句呵呵] Further more, the school education is composed of a group of experienced experts who know what students want, what could attract their interests to studying, and how to make them study well. All of that[of that->mentioned above] has warranted importance〔改adj〕 status of formal school educators in the children's whole education.
第一段看起来中规中矩，结构还是可以的However, teachers have to take care of many children and they would make decision for all their students as a whole resulting in that teachers would[could] not have too much attention to make a special program for a single individual. Children with special talents such as writing, painting, acting, computer programming and so forth, for instance, need to be noticed and nurtured so they will do well in school and in their later lives. Can students with learning and attraction difficulties in school actually be the talented scientists in disguise? If we look to history to answer this question, we see compelling evidence that giants such as Thomas Edison, Sir Isaac Newton, and Leonardo da Vinci might have been students like this. Similar to assiduous students today, they were diligent and eager to pursue learning, yet in unconventional ways. [抓住一个人稍微说明一下怎么个非传统的教育，而不是这样泛谈]In contemporary society, Bill Gates is the very good example. When he studied in Lakeside where he was first introduced to computers, Bill Gates found himself inseparable from the computer. He would like to stay in the computer room day after day, learning computer literature, writing programs, and doing anything else associated with computers; but on the other side, he was skipping classes, turning in homework late and doing other things that went against the educators' intention. Such things make a business giant in the future.[例子不太恰当，有跑题嫌疑，这个和家长和社区有什么关系??]Accordingly, we could resort to parents and communities whose role would not be placed by the formal school education in one respect and another. It is often said that parents are the best teachers. Parents, usually the most intimate persons to children, profoundly influence their children in moral development and character education. And moreover, parents can be very important in helping their children develop their talents by creating opportunities and conditions. Take also the example of Bill Gates. In elementary school Bill Gates quickly surpassed all of his peer's abilities in nearly all subjects, especially math and science. His parents recognized his intelligence and decide to enroll him in Lakeside, a private school known for its intense academic environment. This decision had for reaching effects on Bill Gates' later success. [例子不是很有说服力，另外你前面谈到的gates在Lakeside的时候对正常的课程完全不理，这里说父母把他送到了这里才导致他成功，那到底是什么导致他的成功呢？]Communities are also very important. A good community could prevent students from influences of bad behaviors such as smoking, drinking alcohol, taking drugs, committing crimes and etc. and provide healthy environment for the growth of young children.[怎么个防止青少年犯这些错误？理由？]建议你抓住关键的几点来谈，不要为了说例子而说例子？AW考察的是你的CRITICAL　THINKING!!In sum, because of the significant status of education in man's whole life, parents and communities should cooperate with local schools to educate their children, which makes a full sense of education.(结尾虽然点了开头，但还是显得单薄)

总体来说第一篇这样子已经很好了
你结构感还是不错的，语言错误也不多，加油！

siyuandingUID: 2154137

两位的修改现谢过了！
先回复lonix的
从你的评点中可以看出，你是一个功底扎实、善于推敲的writor
从没看过谁把我的作文批成这样，花了不少时间把，lonix兄！不过有些问题还需商榷
1 (As education, which includes knowledge impartation, ability, moral cultivation, ability training and so forth, plays a crucial role in one’s whole life, I strongly agree with …)   我写的和你说的两可，你说的似乎更好
2  (may be)  两可
3  (great)   有没有两可
4  (already been)  already been 、been aready 都行
5 (systematically)  这个词当时一时没想到
6 (我觉得这些学科之间应该存在某种递进或者递反的关系).  当时我就是这样安排的，有点层次，不好吗
7 (attract … to…后面接动名词么？还是你的这个studying意作名词)  我是想接个名词，那就把sudying换成study吧
8 (我觉得这句可以这么表达：However, the situation of teachers having to take care of many children and making decisions for all of them results in the fact that teachers have little attention placed on special programs made for a single student)  妙！
9 （为什么用例如，有点中国化）前面是讲不能顾及某些学生，后面说具体不能顾及某些有特殊才能的学生，所以有举例之意，很多范文上就这么用得
10 这句可以这样表达：Those children, who are endowed with special talents on writing, painting, acting and computer programming, deserve unique “take-care” that they will perform well in current education, and even in their after lives） endowed with 可以省略吧，简洁点  in their after lives 是什么意思，逝世后吗，其他的写法跟我的，两可
11（注意力不集中一般用concentration）attraction difficulties 是“不容易吸引到学习上”来解吧，老外就这么用得，这句是摘抄的
12  （前面这句话要表达什么意思？我怎么看不明白呢, 你是说学习不专心或者注意力不集中的那些人未必成不了天才吧？） 我是说，那些有学习障碍的和那些对学习不感兴趣的可能是隐性的巨人吗，这句是摘抄的
13  （look to没有这个意思吧？句型look up … for （doing） sth，　推荐句式，One need look no further than …, we can see a great many of evidences that …）看下面几个例句：Look to History to Understand Today；Oftimes authors look to history for an interesting plot or story line；Look to History for Ideas. ... 从google上找的
14  (应该是和前面的前辈一样，这些学生…) (一般用现在时态)  they指的是前辈，他们和现在的学生一样用功，were就是描述他们过去的事
15  (at the first time) 可省略为first
16  (修改：computer was, at the first time, being introduced)  两可
17  (he)  一个句子不能有两个he吧
18   (with)  Good writing inseparable from the practice of democracy from Masthead,；The Church, inseparable from Christ；Workers' Rights Inseparable from Basic Human Rights. 从google上找的
19  stayed in 对，还是这个比较好
20  (哪个地方有on the first side呢?) 非要有on the first side吗
21  (逃课是这样表达的么？查一下字典)  看看下面几个例句：Admit To Parents I'm Skipping Classes And Disinterested In College?"；Excuses for Skipping Classes. Well, the first three weeks of class have passed. I say it's time for the semester to be over；Four people think Skipping Classes is the Best Thing To Make School Fun compared to 从google上找的
22 (个性培养character cultivation). The Grouchy Ladybug Beginning character education for young students  ；The purpose of character education is to help students develop good character, which includes ...；An article describing some ideas schools have used to integrate character education into their teaching ...
23  (of可以去掉)  区分all peer和all abilities
24  (学校enroll学生，这里应该是父母送学生去哪个学校吧？)  可以这么用
25（这个词挺好的：far-reaching effects） 谢谢夸奖
26（one’s） 当时只想换个词，变通一下
27（他们三的吗？指代不清楚)  是我们大家的小孩吧
28   但是应该从更深的层次来挖掘教育的目的，以及为什么不能把教育单单留给那些具有专业技能的老师。 我讲了呀，正规教育忽视了个体化的教育，但却可以由家长教育来弥补
29 文章的例子过于典型，当然这是突出文章论点的一个很重要的方面，但是我觉得能用比较典型但新颖的例子更好，因为典型的例子往往人家都会用，后面的自然不用说了。 这句话怎么理解阿？请指教
最后谢谢你的修改，:)


[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-1 23:57 编辑 ]

siyuandingUID: 2154137

能够得到大组长的指点，真是我的荣幸，我更应倍加努力！！
1 用这个词不妥，可考虑死板的，固定的 这段不是说教育的好吗？应该用褒义词
2 正式文体中不宜用感叹句呵呵 我只是想表现一下句式的variable
3 could would、could都可以吧
4 抓住一个人稍微说明一下怎么个非传统的教育，而不是这样泛谈 unventional除了有非传统之意，还有非得同寻常的意思吧，way不是指教育，unconventional way是指不同于一般人的方法
5 例子不太恰当，有跑题嫌疑，这个和家长和社区有什么关系?? 我的意思是Bill Gates的不端行为不可能得到professional educators的正确引导，咳，看看我这英语表达水平
6 例子不是很有说服力，另外你前面谈到的gates在Lakeside的时候对正常的课程完全不理，这里说父母把他送到了这里才导致他成功，那到底是什么导致他的成功呢？ 后来想想，还真如你所说，这是我这篇文章举例子最大的问题，是不是可以这样理解，现是因为父母发现gates在数学上有天赋，才让他到学术氛围浓厚的Lakeside就读，这就起到父母发现小孩特长的作用，而后来到了Lakeside，因为gates迷恋电脑，而没有得到正确的引导，这是fomal education所办不到的。一个事物的正反面正好在一个人身上的得到从分体现
7 怎么个防止青少年犯这些错误？理由？我有我的苦衷呀，因为写父母的作用写得太多，再写社区的作用，是不是把文章的篇幅拉的太长，所以关于community只能一笔带过，这个问题希望能跟你探讨探讨
8 建议你抓住关键的几点来谈，不要为了说例子而说例子？AW考察的是你的CRITICAL　THINKING!! 我觉得写文章就是要具体（specific)，这个问题需要跟你探讨一下，也许我思想太顽固了，深受新东方老师的影响，中毒太深呀
9 结尾虽然点了开头，但还是显得单薄 写到最后没词了，需要改进
感谢大组长的批卷，我会继续努力的！

[ 本帖最后由 siyuanding 于 2007-1-2 00:51 编辑 ]

lonixUID: 2202232

原来没想到siyuanding在文章写作过程中翻阅了这么多的资料，其实看你对我的修改意见的意见，我收获还是蛮大的，说实话，很多地方我也拿捏不准，也就是拿最基本的格式来套用你的文章，所以才会出现这么多的修改错误。对于改得不对的地方，希望你能原谅哦。

siyuandingUID: 2154137

互相学习:) :victory:

lonixUID: 2202232

9 （为什么用例如，有点中国化）前面是讲不能顾及某些学生，后面说具体不能顾及某些有特殊才能的学生，所以有举例之意，很多范文上就这么用得  [不好意思，我理解有错误]

10 这句可以这样表达：Those children, who are endowed with special talents on writing, painting, acting and computer programming, deserve unique “take-care” that they will perform well in current education, and even in their after lives） endowed with 可以省略吧，简洁点  in their after lives 是什么意思，逝世后吗，其他的写法跟我的，两可 [当然是后期生活]

11（注意力不集中一般用concentration）attraction difficulties 是“不容易吸引到学习上”来解吧，老外就这么用得，这句是摘抄的  [我思想禁锢，不会变通，: ）]

13  （look to没有这个意思吧？句型look up … for （doing） sth，　推荐句式，One need look no further than …, we can see a great many of evidences that …）看下面几个例句：Look to History to Understand Today；Oftimes authors look to history for an interesting plot or story line；Look to History for Ideas. ... 从google上找的 [就稍微查了一下词典，看到没这种用法就主观臆断了，不好意思]

18   (with)  Good writing inseparable from the practice of democracy from Masthead,；The Church, inseparable from Christ；Workers' Rights Inseparable from Basic Human Rights. 从google上找的 [你说的这种搭配是正确的]

20  (哪个地方有on the first side呢?) 非要有on the first side吗 [我看过的文章都是两个配对的]

28   但是应该从更深的层次来挖掘教育的目的，以及为什么不能把教育单单留给那些具有专业技能的老师。 我讲了呀，正规教育忽视了个体化的教育，但却可以由家长教育来弥补 [可能是过多地加入了我自己观点，以致造成对你的问题的错误理解]

29 文章的例子过于典型，当然这是突出文章论点的一个很重要的方面，但是我觉得能用比较典型但新颖的例子更好，因为典型的例子往往人家都会用，后面的自然不用说了。 这句话怎么理解阿？请指教
最后谢谢你的修改，:) [我的想法就是多用别人一般不用但是很具说服力的例子，当然用机警上常用的例子也没有什么不好，GT上前辈们褒贬不一，一时我也没有注意，不知道那些披卷的老外们怎么看]

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首先，俺必须赞一下你对AW认真的态度呵呵，真的是大家的楷模哦：）


1 用这个词不妥，可考虑死板的，固定的 这段不是说教育的好吗？应该用褒义词
//建议下回你把提纲附在前面，我是边看边改的，原以为本段你是要批判专业教育

2 正式文体中不宜用感叹句呵呵 我只是想表现一下句式的variable
//是的，要提倡句式的多样性，特别是抑扬顿挫。之所以这么建议是因为这样显得稍微主观了点
具体也可以看看官方范文里面是否有类似的感叹句

3 could would、could都可以吧
//could更多的强调是否有能力

4 抓住一个人稍微说明一下怎么个非传统的教育，而不是这样泛谈 unventional除了有非传统之意，还有非得同寻常的意思吧，way不是指教育，unconventional way是指不同于一般人的方法
//呵呵我想说的重点是具体抓住一个人讨论，而不是这样眉毛胡子一把抓，显得不够深刻

5 例子不太恰当，有跑题嫌疑，这个和家长和社区有什么关系?? 我的意思是Bill Gates的不端行为不可能得到professional educators的正确引导，咳，看看我这英语表达水平
//我们应该以读者的眼光来审视一篇文章，那么我读到这里联想到题目自然会想知道是否他的不端行为就会通过家长和社区来解决呢？
可惜我没看到答案，因此例子的说服力不够

6 例子不是很有说服力，另外你前面谈到的gates在Lakeside的时候对正常的课程完全不理，这里说父母把他送到了这里才导致他成功，那到底是什么导致他的成功呢？ 后来想想，还真如你所说，这是我这篇文章举例子最大的问题，是不是可以这样理解，现是因为父母发现gates在数学上有天赋，才让他到学术氛围浓厚的Lakeside就读，这就起到父母发现小孩特长的作用，而后来到了Lakeside，因为gates迷恋电脑，而没有得到正确的引导，这是fomal education所办不到的。一个事物的正反面正好在一个人身上的得到从分体现

//这些就是你没有反映到文章中的想法吧，文章的逻辑一定要平滑，不要想当然

7 怎么个防止青少年犯这些错误？理由？我有我的苦衷呀，因为写父母的作用写得太多，再写社区的作用，是不是把文章的篇幅拉的太长，所以关于community只能一笔带过，这个问题希望能跟你探讨探讨

//其实要真是哪些人近皆知的道理，读者也不会去究根问底，但是现实情况中是一个再好的社区也会有青少年犯罪的情况
当然你为了自圆其说则一定要平滑的把你的道理讲出来，否则这里你还不如不写这点

8 建议你抓住关键的几点来谈，不要为了说例子而说例子？AW考察的是你的CRITICAL　THINKING!! 我觉得写文章就是要具体（specific)，这个问题需要跟你探讨一下，也许我思想太顽固了，深受新东方老师的影响，中毒太深呀
//文章是要具体，不要泛泛而谈，但是也不是意味着一定要有具体的例子，俺所指的具体就是逻辑上要具体明白，例子只是为了说明你的逻辑，所以不要花大笔墨在例子上

9 结尾虽然点了开头，但还是显得单薄 写到最后没词了，需要改进
感谢大组长的批卷，我会继续努力的！


最后谢谢你的批改，我的文章有些地方的确值得商榷

看一看题目Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools
问题来了这里的local　schools是个什么意思？泛指教育还是指当地的学校？
对于没有定论的概念，我宁愿采纳最原始的意思，那就是当地的学校
所以个人觉得采取反对的写法并不是标新立意，这就是对题目所建议的方法的质疑
个人的一点看法请见：
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/thread-587696-1-1.html
另外对于这种建议型的文章
我个人比较倾向于第三段提出自己的解决方案
这可能和你以前听到新东方的教学方法不太一样吧
毕竟老美对创新的东西还是很提倡的～
建议你可以尝试一下，有些文章用这种方法思路一下子就打开了

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