ETS 6分范文阅读分析_Issue [自由女神]小组第一次作业

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Issue test 3
"Our declining environment may bring the people of the world together as no politician, philosopher, or war ever could.  Environmental problems are global in scope and respect no nation's boundaries.  Therefore, people are faced with the choice of unity and cooperation on the one hand or disunity and a common tragedy on the other."


6、Cooperation---or Tragedy?

The solution to the world's growing environmental problems may have to wait awhile. It has been said that (引出题目中的句子的一个句型，跟some people maintain/claim/assert/propose/... that差不多) "environmental problems are global and respect no nation's boundaries." Unfortunately, pollution and its consequences (“后果”，值得记忆并使用) still fall to large measure on those least likely to do anything about it: poor countries willing to sacrifice anything in order to sit at the table with the world's wealthy.
首句即提出观点：全球范围的环境问题尚无解决办法。随即做了简要分析。

As far as the industrialized nations (“工业国家”，以后可能会常用) of the world are concerned, the world is a big place. Environmental destruction taking place outside their borders may sometimes be fodder for government pronouncements of concern, but few concrete actions.  Deforestation of the Amazon, for instance, is of vital concern to all those who wish to continue breathing. But the only effective deterrent to this activity, the restriction of international aid money to those countries showing net deforestation, has been stalled in the United Nations by those unwilling to "interfere" in the internal politics of other nations.
此段分论点：工业国家少有实际行动。TS含意还不明朗，但第二句一出，意思就很明确了。举例非常贴切，“But”一词后边写得太精彩了，句子长，结构复杂，内容丰富（这里体现了一个写长句的努力方向：把较多的跟论证紧密相关的内容写成一个句子，而不是为了写长句而把简单句扩成长句，这要求要有话可说。尤其在举例子的时候可以多尝试。）。这种长句读起来反而觉得很简练。

Because of the differential impact of polluting activities around the world, and even (transition) in different regions of a single country, many governments will undoubtedly continue to promulgate only modest environmental regulations. Costs to polluting companies will continue to carry as much weight as the benefit of a pollution-free environment. Particularly (更进一步) in the current political climate of the United States, the well-documented expense of today's pollution-control measures will be stacked against the unknown long-term effects of polluting actitivities. "Why should I spend millions of dollars a year, which causes me to have to raise the cost of my goods or eliminate jobs, if no one really knows if air pollution is all that harmful? Show me the proof, "an air polluting company may demand.
TS进一步对观点进行论证：环境污染影响程度不一样的地方必然施行不一样的环境法令。紧接着是对TS的进一步阐述。举例是一个quote，形象生动而很有说服力。

Realistically, it won't be until critical mass is achieved that the hoped for "choice of unity and cooperation" will be a viable one. (此句结构未明白) Only when the earth as a whole is so polluted that life itself becomes increasingly difficult for a majority of the world's people will there likely be the political will to force global environmental laws on governments worldwide. (精彩的长句啊)  But the optimists (read: environmental activists) among us continue to believe that the world can be shown the error of its ways. They continue to point out that the sky is probably falling--or at least developing a big hole. The world, as a whole, ignores them.
返回到本文主题：只有世界上大多数人感到生存困难时才会有political will：cooperate to reduce pollution. 少数行动主义者的呼吁被忽视。

One would hope, however, that governments, perhaps through a strengthened U.N., could somehow be forced to realize that when the Earth reaches the critical mass of pollution, it may be too late to do anything about it. That would be a "common tragedy" indeed.
结尾段呼应主题，并提出希望。


总结：
1. 此文并没有让步段。后边两段都呼应了主题。
2. 长句很精彩，需琢磨学习。



[ 本帖最后由 LastChance 于 2007-1-7 11:40 编辑 ]

salfordUID: 2285528

我前两天也看了这篇范文，现占座，我等一会再看哦。

LastChanceUID: 2275038

嗯好的！

expire7UID: 2160574

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