issue144 南智组luckychina作业

luckychinaUID: 2131861

TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
WORDS: 473          TIME: 0:45:00          DATE: 2007-1-13

The critic is to artist what tongue is to the cate. When it comes to who gives the lasting value to the society, people had better to consider first: which creates far-reaching savories, tongue or cate? Obviously, it is the cate. And then we can easily check out the answer to the former question.

As a famous poet wrote, "dark night grants me dark eyes, with which I look for brightness." And the artist discovers the beauty, reveals the beauty, and creates the beauty, with brushes, pigments and caverns. On the one hand, artists with their acute eyes and personal understanding, put the beauty around us, yet usually ignored by the majorities into the light after discovering it. The smile of Mona Lisa by Da Vinci, for instance, gives people pleasure and relaxation for decades, and will last for a long time. On the other hand, as beauty's creators, artists also give lasting value to the society. To demonstrate this point, one needs to look no further to Eiffel Tower, the best sign of romantic and modern Paris, which was, is, and will be valued by generations even after the artist died years later. Therefore, artists are certain to be gone away someday, but the social value of their creations never has a deadline.

Moreover, it is the artist who reveals the hidden ideas and impulse of the society. No one would deny that every society at every time has its separate merits and flaws, which are typical in the particular situation and environment. To record those precious prelidge, artists volunteer to make it with their talents and hard work. History is fraught with such examples, like Beatles who composed a lot of songs crying for the undesirable society filled with homosexuality, racial discrimination, etc. In this sense, the contemporary society in which artists have ever lived in has disappeared, while the art keeps the value.

Admittedly, the critic, serving as a filter, determines which art is worth our time and attention and which is potential to give the society something of lasting value as well. Thanks to these critics with profound comprehension with art, artists are able to retrospect their own creations in a more comprehensive view and improve them efficiently. Unfortunately, for they only point out the mistakes and deficiencies on the existed art rather than create art by themselves, critic leaves few memory and lasting value to the society as time passes by.

In sum, both the artist and the critic contribute to the society. Without the artist, people would always live in the dull routines and rapid life earning; without the critic, people would be confused with numerous existing arts, both precious and valueless. But comparing such two kinds of elites, if I take leave to doubt, it is the artist who gives the society something of lasting value.

luckychinaUID: 2131861

哎，沉了沉了~~
第一次限时，别人都是觉得时间不够，我是写完了时间还有多的，但是字数不够又不知道往哪里加了~~
问题还严重一些，请大牛帮忙看看吧

alive1986UID: 2241739

The critic is to artist what tongue is to the cate. When it comes to who gives the lasting value to the society, people had better to consider first: which creates far-reaching savories, tongue or cate? Obviously, it is the cate. And then we can easily check out the answer to the former question.（开头的比喻方式我很喜欢）

As a famous poet wrote, "dark night grants me dark eyes, with which I look for brightness." And the artist discovers the beauty, reveals the beauty, and creates the beauty, with brushes, pigments and caverns. On the one hand, artists with their acute eyes and personal understanding, put the beauty around us, yet usually ignored by the majorities into the light after discovering it. The smile of Mona Lisa by Da Vinci, for instance, gives people pleasure and relaxation for decades, and will last for a long time. On the other hand, as beauty's creators, artists also give lasting value to the society. To demonstrate this point, one needs to look no further to Eiffel Tower, the best sign of romantic and modern Paris, which was, is, and will be valued by generations even after the artist died years later. Therefore, artists are certain to be gone away someday, but the social value of their creations never has a deadline.（这段不错，但如果对某一种例证更清楚的说明原因会更好，而不是广举事例＋一个结论）

Moreover, it is the artist who reveals the hidden ideas and impulse of the society. No one would deny that every society at every time has its separate merits and flaws, which are typical in the particular situation and environment. To record those precious prelidge, artists volunteer to make it with their talents and hard work. History is fraught with such examples, like Beatles who composed a lot of songs crying for the undesirable society filled with homosexuality, racial discrimination, etc. In this sense, the contemporary society in which artists have ever lived in has disappeared, while the art keeps the value.（这段感觉证明力度不够，如果和上面合并一段同一说艺术家的作用。有些句子还是太绕，表达清楚意思就行了）

Admittedly, the critic, serving as a filter, determines which art is worth our time and attention and which is potential to give the society something of lasting value as well. Thanks to these critics with profound comprehension with art, artists are able to retrospect their own creations in a more comprehensive view and improve them efficiently. Unfortunately, for they only point out the mistakes and deficiencies on the existed art rather than create art by themselves, critic leaves few memory and lasting value to the society as time passes by.（还可以从艺术家如何对待评论家的角度，以及如何给社会留下更多的lasting value来谈，感觉就更充分了）

In sum, both the artist and the critic contribute to the society. Without the artist, people would always live in the dull routines and rapid life earning; without the critic, people would be confused with numerous existing arts, both precious and valueless. But comparing such two kinds of elites, if I take leave to doubt, it is the artist who gives the society something of lasting value.（最后一段感觉很干，总觉得应该发散一下，建议看看范文的结尾。另外，既然PS已经偏向艺术家，那结尾就最好不要在折衷了，艺术家和批评家各有各自的作用在B3中已经表达了）

PS：主要从论证看了，语言没得说，用词没细看还得注意准确性。多多练习，以后偶也要限时了。加油！