Issue5 地方教育和国家教育诚挚求拍请留下联接我好回敬！

gongzhenUID: 2230083

issue5  
    "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
    一个国家应该要求所有的学生在上大学前都学习相同的国内课程，而不是允许不同地区的学校决定自己的教学课程。

It is a vital duty for a national educational system to arrange the curriculum. For pursuit of effective education, whether nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until entering college instead of allowing the schools in different regions the freedom to choose the own curriculum. I strongly agree the suggestion to some extent. However, at the same time, the individual states and communities can decide the arrangement by certain cases.

To begin with, the uniform curriculum has benefit not only to all students but whole educational system. First, the same national curriculum can ensure the effective educational quantity. The every student will accept the systematic training and basic knowledge background, such as logic, writing, reading, analyze. Without these abilities, no one can ensure students can finish their continued courses in colleges. Second, when they enter into the college, they can also comprehend their professors’ ideas and concepts, which need to be understood as the elementary knowledge as the basis. Also, the professors and faculties will be easily to design the college curriculum and comply the materials. In short, a same curriculum will show its efficient and satisfy desire and interest of all students

Moreover, as the greater numbers of students enrolled in schools, education has become a powerful and social force. As to reach the goal of efficient and size of schools, a large deal of centralizing education has been appeared and strict standard mechanism has been established. Education, as a streamlined chain of administrative system, asks for centralizing organization and uniform curriculum.

However, individual states and communities may have unique circumstance and financial support, which to large extent result from the difference between interstates and communities. As the educators, they must consider how curriculum will satisfy the students’ need. After all there has been poverty and prosperity in different states and communities, which attribute to the different distribution of educational funding. From one hand, many large numbers students have no chance to continue education in college because of economical issues and family issues, and have to seek for careers in society. Therefore, educators should support some training program to guarantee them to own special skills. From another hand, local educational systems need to protect local cultural characteristic and tradition in order to prevent them on disappearing. Such as folk art, and ancient language and music, the culture need be inherited by offspring. Perhaps there are other reasons for authorizing the local education to determine the different courses. However, all needs should be combined with the local special circumstance in order to satisfy the different request both nation and states and communities.

To sum up, education’ goal is to cultivate the general education and make every enjoy the right of education. So it is very important to balance the relation between nation and states.

zhuhrphenixUID: 2279565

It is a vital duty for a national educational system to arrange the curriculum. For pursuit of effective education, whether nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until entering college instead of allowing the schools in different regions the freedom to choose the own curriculum. I strongly agree the suggestion to some extent. However, at the same time, the individual states and communities can decide the arrangement by certain cases.

To begin with, the uniform curriculum has benefit not only to all students but whole educational system. First, the same national curriculum can ensure the effective educational quantity. The every student will accept the systematic training and basic knowledge background, such as logic, writing, reading, [and] analyze. Without these abilities, no one can ensure students can finish their continued courses in colleges. Second, when they enter into the college, they can also comprehend their professors’ ideas and concepts, which need to be understood as the elementary knowledge as the basis. Also, the professors and faculties will be easily to design [be left to design] the college curriculum [easily/without vacillation] and comply the materials. In short, a same curriculum will show its efficient [efficiency] and satisfy desire and interest of all students
[convining analyze, but , with some deficient portions where will be strengthened with some illustrations.]

Moreover, as the greater numbers of students enrolled in schools, education has become a powerful and social force. As to reach the goal of efficient [efficiency] and size of schools, a large deal of centralizing education has been appeared and strict standard mechanism has been established. Education, as a streamlined chain of administrative system, asks for centralizing organization and uniform curriculum.
[to share some attentions to the balance among the paragraphs which are rational to be of the similar number of words with each others in that to contribute as a entirely whole structure for the literature you write.]

However, individual states and communities may have unique circumstance and financial support, which to large extent result from the difference between interstates [strongly advise to revise into 'states/provinces'] and communities. As the educators, they must consider how curriculum will satisfy [consider the mulitple adoption of words with same meaning] the students’ need. After all there has been poverty and prosperity in different states and communities, which attribute to the different distribution of educational funding. From one hand, many large numbers students have no chance to continue education in college because of economical issues and family issues, and have to seek for careers in society. Therefore, educators should support some training program to guarantee them to own special skills. From another hand, local educational systems need to protect local cultural characteristic and tradition in order to prevent them on disappearing [from disappearing]. Such as folk art, and ancient language and music, the culture need be inherited by offspring. Perhaps there are other reasons for authorizing the local education to determine the different courses. [probably better demonstration with instances.] However, all needs should be combined with the local special circumstance in order to satisfy the different request both nation and states and communities. [to adjust the order and the particular word distribution which causes confusion.]
To sum up, education’ goal is to cultivate the general education and make every [?every what] enjoy the right of education. So it is very important to balance the relation between nation and states [laconic tail].

limited to the ability, I can only offer those suggestions about improving your article which has been organized well to a appropriate structure for this theme. By any means, good luck with your test.

rebecca0302UID: 2249779

issue5  
    "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
    一个国家应该要求所有的学生在上大学前都学习相同的国内课程，而不是允许不同地区的学校决定自己的教学课程。

It is a vital duty for a national educational system to arrange the curriculum. For the pursuit of effective education, whether nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until entering college instead of allowing the schools in different regions the freedom to choose the own curriculum. I strongly agree with the suggestion to some extent. However, at the same time, the individual states and communities can decide the arrangement by certain cases.    点题,提出观点 ：国家应该设置课程，同时不应该干涉地区学校的自主权           

To begin with, the uniform curriculum has benefit not only to all students but whole educational system. First, the same national curriculum can ensure the effective educational quantity. <The> every student <will accept > can be offered the systematic training and basic knowledge background, such as logic, writing, reading,and analyze. Without these abilities, no one can ensure students can finish their continued courses in colleges. Second, when they enter into the college, they can also comprehend their professors’ ideas and concepts, which need to be understood as the elementary knowledge as the basis. Also, the professors and faculties will be easily to design the college curriculum and comply the materials. In short, a same curriculum will show its efficient and satisfy desire and interest of all students　统一大纲对学生和教育系统都有利．并且从三方面论证，最后结论统一大纲的作用

Moreover, as <the> a great＜er＞ number<s >of students enrolled in schools, education has become a powerful and social force. As to reach the goal of efficient and the size of schools, a <large > great deal of centralizing education has been appeared and strict standard mechanism has been established. Education, as a streamlined chain of administrative system, asks for centralizing organization and uniform curriculum.
递进，说明教育变成了社会力量，为了达到教育的目的，也必须统一大纲．似乎缺少例子．

However, individual states and communities may have unique circumstance and financial support, which to large extent result from the difference between interstates and communities. As the educators, they must consider how curriculum will satisfy the students’ need. After all there has been poverty and prosperity in different states and communities, which attribute to the different distribution of educational funding. From one hand, many large numbers students have no chance to <continue education> be educated continually in college because of economical issues and family issues, and have to seek for careers in society. Therefore, educators should support some training program to guarantee them to own special skills. From another hand, local educational systems need to protect local cultural characteristic and tradition in order to prevent them <on> from disappearing. Such as folk art, <and> ancient language and music, the culture need to be inherited by offspring. Perhaps there are other reasons for authorizing the local education to determine the different courses. However, all needs should be combined with the local special circumstance in order to satisfy the different request both nation and states and communities.
转折，为了满足不同的需求，不同职业技能的要求和特色文化保护的要求．需要灵活制定大纲．

To sum up, education’s goal is to cultivate the general education and make every everybody enjoy the right of education. So it is very important to balance the relation between  nation and states.
结论，教育的目的．指出要平衡地方和国家的关系

总结：
全文结构：第一段提出论点．第二　三段支持．第四段转折．最后段结论
段落关系明确，文章中能灵活使用连接词，段落层次清楚
疑问：as the greater numbers of students 这一用法是否正确？