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TOPIC: ISSUE88 - "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."WORDS: 454 TIME: 0:41:01 DATE: 2007-1-23 When it comes to the relationship between technologies and social customs and ethics, many people may hold the opinion that technologies just influence them. However, in my point of view, I believe that it not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics as the speaker said. The supporting reasons will be listed as follows.
To begin with, on the surface, we would possibly think that technologies decide the social production capability and the industrialization level but any relation with social customs.[这个地方怎么说，也就是要修饰什么，还是有其他的意思]（这里的but意思是“而不是”，整句意思是：…我们会想到技术决定着社会生产力和工业化水平而不是和社会传统的关系） If lucubrated much deeper, it is not hard to find out that the whole social pattern of customs are rooted from technologies whenever in any times from the ancient to nowadays.[whenever就代表任何时候了，没有必要用in any time来补充，并且times一般作时报解] For instance, in ancient China's custom thousands of years ago[后面的几千年最好用一个状语从句修饰一下，否则的话这种语句有中国式英语之嫌],abride's sedan was the main means in a wedding transportation [wedding transportation我们都理解，不知道老外怎么理解哦？]（那就直接写wedding你说怎么样？）. But nowadays, such sedans are antique and hardly to see, and cars replace the important role in wedding custom because of the invention and industry of motor cars in last century. Besides, traditional custom in education like spoon-feed[词比较好，但是这个词是动词哦] turns to heuristic education gradually with the education skills and technology of hardware developing faster and faster.[这句话我就根本没搞清它的结构]（意思是：随着教育技巧和硬件技术迅猛发展，传统的填鸭式教育慢慢的向启发式教育发展。With后面作状语吧）Countless such[countless 和such 要么去掉一个吧，两个放在一起很少见哦] examples could be found both in ancient and in modern society, both in the west and in the east world. Thus, the influence caused by technologies on social customs is greater than ever thought.[这段的两个例子还是比较好的，说出了技术的发展是如何影响传统的变化的，但是限时写的结果就是很多语句不通顺，如上看来还没有摆脱中文式思考问题的习惯，不过还有两个星期，坚持的话相信会有好转的]
In addition, ethics in society, which is always considered to be the inner characters of people unrelated with other outer factors. But, after my analysis below, you would probably change your view on this point.[这句比较口语化哦，这不时persuade谁相信与不相信与否，而是你自己的立场需要你自己来证明] If we cast a look back to the history of human society, it is easy to find the great discrepancy in social ethics from the ancient times to now. Take China into an example, the social status and family role of women in ancient China was unbelievable low and worthless.[worthless用此欠准确哦] For instance, one man can marry with more[该删除吧]one, two or more women as long as he could afford their living, but, on the contrary, any woman should be loyal to her husband and who betrayed him would be punished harshly. With the technology developing, the human society improves and people found that whether men or women are equal in the world and should be treat equally.[这句是？你的意思是无论世界上的男女平等与否，他们都得被平等对待？]（产生歧异了，应该是：whether men or women should be equal and treated equally in the world,无论男女，都应当是平等的并且被平等对待。） Monogamy is the most persuasive evidence in our modern society signing the change of ethics from the past to now. So, you could also show a large amount of examples as this from I presented to demonstrate that ethics is probably determined by technology.[一夫一妻制是否是由技术决定的难以考究，只能说社会在变，人们对社会的认识也在变，一夫多妻和一妻夫这种在其他动物身上普遍存在的习惯并不使用于人，而这一规律是如何演化成现在这种制度的我也没有去做过多的调查，不过可以肯定的是，一夫一妻制更适合社会的发展以及人类的进步吧，还有就是男权至上的改变，应该不是与技术进步有关，而是与人们对道德的认识有关吧]的确是，但是不知道怎么找更好例子啊~~ All in all, from what I mentioned above, it is comfortable to arrive at the conclusion that technologies do not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics just as the speaker said.[结尾草草收场，多出的4分钟实在不该浪费的，呵呵，最起码可以写好一下结尾段，或者润色和修改一下前面段落中的句子，你说呢？]
谢谢lonix, 我会加油的~~~
[ 本帖最后由 meichengyu 于 2007-1-24 10:30 编辑 ] | 
发表于 2007-1-23 11:09:55
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