argument官方范文 [自由女神小组 第7次作业]

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I.全文作业:4------Topic: Forestville Speed Limit
Six months ago the region of Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling on the region's highways by ten miles per hour.  Since that change took effect, the number of automobile accidents in that region has increased by 15 percent.  But the speed limit in Elmsford, a region neighboring Forestville, remained unchanged, and automobile accidents declined slightly during the same six-month period.  Therefore, if the citizens of Forestville want to reduce the number of automobile accidents on the region's highways, they should campaign to reduce Forestville's speed limit to what it was before the increase.



In this argument, the author concludes that the citizens of Forestville should campaign to reduce Forestville’s speed limit. To support the conclusion, the author provides the evidence that Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling on the region’s highway, but with the changing, the automobile accidents in that region have increased.     In addition, the speed unchanged in Elmsford, which automobile accident declined slightly during the same six-month period. This argument is unconvincing for several critical flaws.

Firstly, the speed in the Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling by ten miles per hour, the number of automobile accident in that region has increased by 15 percent, the author does not provide the number of automobile accident, we can not consider that the increased the speed limit is relate with the 15 percent of the increased accident. When speed limit unchanged the number of the accident is only one, but after several months after the speed limit changed the number is two, we can not conclude that increased speed reason to the accident increased.

Secondly, six months is not a long time to survey and is unrepresentative. There are many reasons contribution to the increased accidents such as the weather condition and the number of the traffic. Maybe six month ago there are few travelers on the Forestville’s highway, but after six month the travelers increase. One specific example can not generate the general conclusion. Therefore, facing such evidence, the conclusion is unwarranted.

Last but not least, we the arguer fails to take into account the geographical factors in the analysis. While we are informed the Elmsford and the Forestville are neighboring region, may be the geographical factors in Elmsford is different with the Forestville, maybe the different geographical factors contribute to the increased accident. The author should support more evidence to convince us.
                                 
To sum up, the conclusion lacks of credibility. The author should give more evidence about the above-mentioned possibilities. So we can convince that they should reduce the Forestville’s speed limit.




[ 本帖最后由 huzh 于 2007-1-28 15:35 编辑 ]

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In this argument, the author concludes that the citizens of Forestville should campaign to reduce Forestville’s speed limit. To support the conclusion, the author provides the evidence that Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling on the region’s highway, but with the changing, the automobile accidents in that region have increased.     In addition, the speed unchanged in Elmsford, which automobile accident declined slightly during the same six-month period. This argument is unconvincing for several critical flaws.(这段是不是在复述题目啊，按连接里头的资料好像说复述的不好，只要简单的一两句开头就行要有什么THESIS)

Firstly, the speed in the Forestville increased the speed limit for vehicles traveling by ten miles per hour, the number of automobile accident in that region has increased by 15 percent, the author does not provide the number of automobile accident, we can not consider that the increased the speed limit is relate（related） with the 15 percent of the increased accident. When speed limit unchanged the number of the accident is only one, but after several months after the speed limit changed the number is two, we can not conclude that increased speed reason to（attribute to） the accident increased.

Secondly, six months is not a long time to survey and is unrepresentative. There are many reasons contribution to the increased accidents such as the weather condition and the number of the traffic. Maybe six month ago there are few travelers on the Forestville’s highway, but after six month the travelers increase. One specific example can not generate the general conclusion. Therefore, facing such evidence, the conclusion is unwarranted.

Last but not least, （we） the arguer fails to take into account the geographical factors in the analysis. While we are informed the Elmsford and the Forestville are neighboring region（s）, may be（maybe） the geographical factors in Elmsford is（are） different with（from） the Forestville, maybe the different geographical factors contribute to the increased accident. The author should support more evidence to convince us.
                                 
To sum up, the conclusion lacks of credibility. The author should give more evidence about the above-mentioned possibilities. So we can convince that they should reduce the Forestville’s speed limit.
结构清楚（5段式），但觉得段内不够深入
建议用些it is likely that。。。取代maybe

huzhUID: 2268429

好的,我会好好再看看的