Issue99 【Persistence小组】第1次作业 第一篇，不容易啊！

Andy85UID: 2250503

Issue99 "In any realm of life—whether academic, social, business, or political—the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options."
在生活的各个领域，不管是学术、社会还是政治，要想成功，只能靠实际的观点而并非理想化。程序化的行为保证了基本的生存，而理想主义只会被更简单、更急迫的选择取代。
my view: pragmatic behavior and idealistic views are both of great importance to achieve success.
提纲
B 理想不同于空想
C 有了理想我们的社会才能进步
A 只有采取实际的行动我们才有可能获得成功 （千里之行，始于足下）

Do we have to be practical, rather than idealistic in order to achieve success? The speaker claims so, for the reason that pragmatic
behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superseded by simpler, more immediate options. In my opinion,
although it is pragmatic behavior that provides us with the possibility of success, idealistic views are also indispensable in this process
just like the Polaris in the dark night.

There must be a misunderstanding about idealism among those who hold the viewpoint that idealistic views tend to be superseded by
simpler, more immediate options. According to the notion defined by Oxford Dictionary, idealism is a belief that a perfect life, situation
and the like which can be achieved even when this is not very like. This definition simply puts that there is a radical difference between idealism and day-dreaming. While the latter means dreaming plenty of fantasy without doing anything, realism serves as a motivation
which impulses us to conceive a better blueprint of life and turn it into reality.

Our society and culture now have a dramatic discrepancy from what they used to be as result of idealisms of every generation. There
are so many cases in history that our human beings, holding idealistic views, succeed in certain field. With the idealism of flying freely in
the sky, Wilbur Wright and his brother Orville invented the first successful airplane which provided human with a pair of artificial wings;
with the idealism of eliminating slavery, Abraham Lincoln the 16th president of America aroused the Civil War and finally liberated the
slaves after four years' struggle.

Admittedly, if we attempt to succeed, no matter what realms we are in, we should take practical actions to obtain our goal. As an old
saying goes (and I paraphrase,):" Although the  journey is as long as a thousand miles, in order to overcome it all you have to do is just moving you feet." In addition, for supporting examples, we need look no further than the paradigm of the United States which regards hard work as one of its traditional and precious values and has established a prosperous and stable country based on it.

On balance, both idealistic views and practical behavior are necessary on our journey to success. While idealistic views serve as a
motivation and the destination, practical behavior is the walk we take to approach our destination.
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99. "In any realm of life—whether academic, social, business, or political—the only way to succeed is to take a practical,
rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be
superceded by simpler, more immediate options."

Do we have to be practical, rather than idealistic in order to achieve success? The speaker claims so, for the reason that pragmatic
behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superseded by simpler, more immediate options. In my opinion,
although it is pragmatic behavior that provides us with the possibility of success, idealistic views are also indispensable in this process
just like the Polaris in the dark night.好象有点中文的思想了.    总体上,开头不错,采用了QAP的形式

There must be a misunderstanding about idealism among those who hold the viewpoint that idealistic views tend to be superseded by
simpler, more immediate options. (个人建议paraphrase)According to the notion defined by Oxford Dictionary, (Merriam Webster是不是更权威啊,毕竟是ets不是British Council)idealism is a belief that a perfect life, situation
and the like which can be achieved even when this is not very like. This definition simply puts that there is a radical (为什么用这个词)difference between idealism and day-dreaming. While the latter means dreaming plenty of fantasy without doing anything, realism serves as a motivation
which impulses us to conceive a better blueprint of life and turn it into reality.(貌似while应该放在realism前面不???)    这段的Topic sentence 是第一句???

Our society and culture now have a dramatic discrepancy from what they used to be as result of idealisms of every generation. There
are so many cases in history that our human beings, holding idealistic views, succeed in certain field. succeed是不是该用过去式With the idealism of flying freely in
the sky, Wilbur Wright and his brother Orville invented the first successful airplane which provided human with a pair of artificial wings;
with the idealism of eliminating slavery, Abraham Lincoln the 16th president of America aroused the Civil War and finally liberated the
slaves after four years' struggle. 本段的例子不错

Admittedly, if we attempt to succeed, no matter what realms we are in, we should take practical actions to obtain our goals. As an old
saying goes (and I paraphrase,):" Although the  journey is as long as a thousand miles, in order to overcome it all you have to do is just moving you feet." In addition, for supporting examples, we need look no further than the paradigm of the United States which regards hard work as one of its traditional and precious values(为什么加s) and has established a prosperous and stable country based on it. 这段写法不错,不过偶还没习惯把让步放最后的写法

On balance, both idealistic views and practical behavior are necessary on our journey to success. While idealistic views serve as a (建议用the)
motivation and the destination, practical behavior is the walk we take to approach our destination.(take a walk 是散步的意思吗?)