Argument178 【0706G－LOVEAW】第二次模考 by iq28

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT178 - The following appeared in the annual report from the president of the National Brush Company.

"In order to save money, we at the National Brush Company have decided to pay our employees for each brush they produce instead of for the time they spend producing brushes. We believe that this policy will lead to the production of more and better brushes, will allow us to reduce our staff size, and will enable the company factories to operate for fewer hours-resulting in savings on electricity and security costs. These changes will ensure that the best workers keep their jobs and that the company will earn a profit in the coming year."
WORDS: 524          TIME: 0:27:00          DATE: 2007-3-8

The author draws serial unsounded conclusions based on steps of logical confusing inferences. I will discuss these flaws in the following details.

To begin with, the change in the pay method may not lead to better qualities of the brushes. Although the workers may spare no efforts to make more brushes in order to gain more salaries, it has nothing to do with the qualities of the brushes. The qualities of the brushes are influenced primarily by many other factors, like the professional skills of the workers, the equipments in the factories and so forth. Without improvement of such factors, the qualities of the brushes cannot be expected. On the contrary, it may be entirely possible that the workers will set a lower standard of the qualities of the brushes themselves so that they may manufacture more brushes during the same time, and thus the quantities of brushes may better meet the new salary demands. In such cases, the qualities of the brush will probably decrease rather than increase.

A second problem with the argument is that such policy cannot permit the a smaller staff size and a electricity consumption, as well as the lower security costs. All such beautiful imaginations depend on the assumption that the future scale of production will meet the demands of the market, but the author fails to provide any evidence to prove it. Granted that the production scale increase after the new policy is executed, it may be still not enough to meet the large market. In such case, the work hours of course cannot be reduced; therefore the size of the staff and the security costs cannot decrease. Even if the forgoing possibilities do not exist, the consumption of the electricity is related with many other factors. Although the work hours may decline, the running hours of the machines may not decrease at the same time, for the production scale have to at least remain the same as before. As is known to all, the major consumptions of electricity are the machines, rather than the workers. Only unless the machines consume less electrical power can the author's assertion become real. Just as mentioned above, the author still cannot predict all these benefits brought about by the application of the new policy.

Finally, even the mentioned flaws have all been modified, whether the best workers will keep in their jobs, and whether the future profit exists is still open to question. Whether a company can keep its best workers depends on many factors. It is entirely possible that the working environment at National Brush Company can not satisfy the best workers, so that they may choose to work for another factory although their salaries may increase due to the new policy. Also, the profits are not only decided by the large scale of production. For example, if there is a recession of overall market, or the rivals of the National Brush Company have much better conditions, the profits may not come at all. Failing to consider such factors, the author's prediction is still unconvincing.

To sum up, the author should think once again before proposing his plan.

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-6-13 09:27 编辑 ]

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不错的.你的ARGU已经很成熟了,除了偶尔几句话要再改改基本上没有问题

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Argument178 【0706G－LOVEAW】第二次模考 by iq28
TOPIC: ARGUMENT178 - The following appeared in the annual report from the president of the National Brush Company.

"In order to save money, we at the National Brush Company have decided to pay our employees for each brush they produce instead of for the time they spend producing brushes. We believe that this policy will lead to the production of more and better brushes, will allow us to reduce our staff size, and will enable the company factories to operate for fewer hours-resulting in savings on electricity and security costs. These changes will ensure that the best workers keep their jobs and that the company will earn a profit in the coming year."
WORDS: 524          TIME: 0:27:00          DATE: 2007-3-8

The author draws serial unsounded conclusions based on steps of logical confusing inferences. I will discuss these flaws in the following details.

To begin with, the change in the pay method may not lead to better qualities of the brushes. Although the workers may spare no efforts to make more brushes in order to gain more salaries, it has nothing to do with the qualities of the brushes. The qualities of the brushes are influenced primarily by many other factors, like the professional skills of the workers, the equipments in the factories and so forth. Without improvement of such factors, the （better）qualities of the brushes cannot be expected. On the contrary, it may be ((is)已经是possible了就不要用may了吧)entirely possible that the workers will set a lower standard of the qualities of the brushes themselves so that they may manufacture more brushes during the same time, and thus the quantities of brushes may better meet the new salary demands. In such cases, the qualities of the brush will probably decrease rather than increase.

A second problem with the argument is that such policy cannot permit the a smaller staff size and a electricity consumption, as well as the lower security costs. All such beautiful imaginations depend on the assumption that the future scale of production will meet the demands of the market, but the author fails to provide any evidence to prove it. Granted that the production scale increase after the new policy is executed, it may be still not enough to meet the large market. In such case, the work hours of course cannot be reduced; therefore the size of the staff and the security costs cannot decrease. （security costs论述的过简单了，我想的是既然要做得快，那就很容易出事故，这样security cost 就不一定会decrease）Even if the forgoing possibilities do not exist, the consumption of the electricity is related with many other factors. Although the work hours may decline, the running hours of the machines may not decrease at the same time, for the production scale have to at least remain the same as before(不懂，我倒觉得可能是每小时用电费会增加，这样更合理一些吧). As is known to all, the major consumptions of electricity are the machines, rather than the workers. Only unless the machines consume less electrical power can the author's assertion become real. Just as mentioned above, the author still cannot predict all these benefits brought about by the application of the new policy.

Finally, even the mentioned flaws have all been modified, whether the best workers will keep in their jobs, and whether the future profit exists is still open to question. Whether a company can keep its best workers depends on many factors. It is entirely possible that the working environment at National Brush Company can not satisfy the best workers, so that they may choose to work for another factory although their salaries may increase due to the new policy. Also, the profits are not only decided by the large scale of production. For example, if there is a recession of overall market, or the rivals of the National Brush Company have much better conditions, the profits may not come at all. Failing to consider such factors, the author's prediction is still unconvincing.

To sum up, the author should think once again before proposing his plan.（简洁，帅）

写得真好，5分应该没问题，加油

顺便帮我看看吧，我以前正好也写过这篇
http://bbs.gter.ce.cn/bbs/viewthread.php?tid=624810&extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 sandylwlw 于 2007-3-11 00:59 编辑 ]