Issue17 [Transcend小组]第六次作业

chenmi8812UID: 2261072

用时1小时30分钟
Issue 17   What should people do facing just and unjust laws.
     I fundamentally agree with the author's assertion that making change to unjust laws is more important than merely obeying just laws. However, two specious claim are involved in the assertion. Firstly, it is an arbitrary division that laws are separated into just and unjust. Secondly, disobeying and resisting may be not the accurate action to unjust laws, at least should not be put to the first position.

     The dividing of laws into just and unjust ones are partial and sometimes will miss the real function of laws. Law, body of official rules and regulations, is used to govern a society and to control the behavior of its members in order to ensure a safe and peaceful society. In fact, some laws seem to be unjust but are play an dominant role in the development of society. Consider the individual tax law, for instance, it is the common sense that tax rate on the high-income individual are much higher than tax on the low-income individual. Obviously, this law is unjust to the high-income group which earn their income in a legal way because by no means they should necessarily take more responsibility for the country than the low-income groups. However, this law play a crucial role in lessoning the gap between the two groups and promoting the harmony society.

     Obeying the just laws is the duty of every citizen and is also the prerequisite of preserving the stability of society. We obey laws not only because we afraid of the punishment along with the violation of laws, but also because we are desire for a peaceful and stable society which is the insurance of people's daily happy lives. In the history, we can see the prosperous country due to the obeying to the justice laws of most of the people, and we can also see the violation and bloody conflict because of against the laws. Further more, by pondering over the nature of law, such as against crimes, facilitating business activities and private planning, limiting the powers of government and providing some degree of freedom that would not otherwise be possible, we can come to the conclusion that it is relate to ourselves benefit that obeying the laws, because most laws are really basing on the just need and requirement of us.

    Facing the laws that disturbing the peace of society or encroach the individual's right and wealth, people should take the responsibility to point them out and seeking for solution. Every law system will have their deficiency and limitation because of the change of people's moral principle and value along with time passing by. In a democratic society like Canada, laws are not carved in stone, but must reflect the changing needs of society. Consequently, anyone who feels that a particular law is flawed should speak out publicly and to seek to change the law by lawful means. When we look into the development of law, we can get to know that a large part of the improvement of law system is due to revising of the flaws of laws. Admittedly, obeying laws is of great importance to the stability of society. However, irrational obeying sometimes cause serious social problems, like the discrimination of black due to the laws such as forbidden of black children entering the school with only white students. Also we should see that pointing out the flaws are far more precious for it can promote the improvement of laws, which can hardly achieved by just obeying the laws.

    However, disobeying and even resisting flawed laws can not be the correct solution to the problem. Revolution in the history which are most cause by resisting flawed laws are result in bloody conflict and devastation to people's confidence to the country and unfortunately hardly success. Nowadays, in a more liberal society, the time of solve problems with violate has past and what we face is a much more liberal and democratic society. Speaking out the flaws of laws and give suggestion for changing the irrational part is the favourable way for deal with the problems which can successful solve problems peacefully. Democracy, 1787, the first Constitution was born, instead of being fixed, 1791 ten amendments were added to the Constitution to ensure human rights. Until now, there has been twenty-seven amendments, much more words than the initial Constitution. Admittedly, when situation can not be changed by arbitrary government, we should take on our arms and defense our principle and right.

    In sum, obeying laws is our duty but like every system cannot be perfect, in pursuit of making law more rational and just, it is also the very duty for us to indicate the law flaws in a legal way, which is of further profound meaning to us all.

haieryuUID: 2291571

Issue 17   What should people do facing just and unjust laws.
     I fundamentally agree with the author's assertion that making change to unjust laws is more important than merely obeying just laws. However, two specious claim are involved in the assertion. Firstly, it is an arbitrary division that laws are separated into just and unjust. Secondly, disobeying and resisting may be not the accurate action to unjust laws, at least should not be put to the first position.

     The dividing of laws into just and unjust ones are partial and sometimes will miss the real function of laws. Law, body of official rules and regulations, is used to govern a society and to control the behavior of its members in order to ensure a safe and peaceful society. In fact, some laws seem to be unjust but are play an dominant role in the development of society. Consider the individual tax law, for instance, it is the common sense that tax rate on the high-income individual are much higher than tax on the low-income individual. Obviously, this law is unjust to the high-income group which earn their income in a legal way because by no means they should necessarily take more responsibility for the country than the low-income groups. However, this law play a crucial role in lessoning the gap between the two groups and promoting the harmony society.

     Obeying the just laws is the duty of every citizen and is also the prerequisite of preserving the stability of society. We obey laws not only because we afraid of the punishment along with the violation of laws, but also because we are desire for a peaceful and stable society which is the insurance of people's daily happy lives. In the history, we can see the prosperous country due to the obeying to the justice laws of most of the people, and we can also see the violation and bloody conflict because of against the laws. Further more, by pondering over the nature of law, such as against crimes, facilitating business activities and private planning, limiting the powers of government and providing some degree of freedom that would not otherwise be possible, we can come to the conclusion that it is relate to ourselves benefit that obeying the laws, because most laws are really basing on the just need and requirement of us.

    Facing the laws that disturbing the peace of society or encroach the individual's right and wealth, people should take the responsibility to point them out and seeking for solution. Every law system will have their deficiency and limitation because of the change of people's moral principle and value along with time passing by. In a democratic society like Canada, laws are not carved in stone, but must reflect the changing needs of society. Consequently, anyone who feels that a particular law is flawed should speak out publicly and to seek to change the law by lawful means. When we look into the development of law, we can get to know that a large part of the improvement of law system is due to revising of the flaws of laws. Admittedly, obeying laws is of great importance to the stability of society. However, irrational obeying sometimes cause serious social problems, like the discrimination of black due to the laws such as forbidden of black children entering the school with only white students. Also we should see that pointing out the flaws are far more precious for it can promote the improvement of laws, which can hardly achieved by just obeying the laws.

    However, disobeying and even resisting flawed laws can not be the correct solution to the problem. Revolution in the history which are most cause by resisting flawed laws are result in bloody conflict and devastation to people's confidence to the country and unfortunately hardly success. Nowadays, in a more liberal society, the time of solve problems with violate has past and what we face is a much more liberal and democratic society. Speaking out the flaws of laws and give suggestion for changing the irrational part is the favourable way for deal with the problems which can successful solve problems peacefully. Democracy, 1787, the first Constitution was born, instead of being fixed, 1791 ten amendments were added to the Constitution to ensure human rights. Until now, there has been twenty-seven amendments, much more words than the initial Constitution. Admittedly, when situation can not be changed by arbitrary government, we should take on our arms and defense our principle and right.

    In sum, obeying laws is our duty but like every system cannot be perfect, in pursuit of making law more rational and just, it is also the very duty for us to indicate the law flaws in a legal way, which is of further profound meaning to us all.

逻辑严密，语言流畅，好文章啊！！！

chenmi8812UID: 2261072

能不能说具体一些

荧惑UID: 2280559

     I fundamentally agree with the author's assertion that making change to unjust laws is more important than merely obeying just laws. However, two specious claim are involved in the assertion. Firstly, it is an arbitrary division that laws are separated into just and unjust. Secondly, disobeying and resisting may be not the accurate action to unjust laws, at least should not be put to the first position.     

   The dividing of laws into just and unjust ones are partial and sometimes will miss the real function of laws. Law, body of official rules and regulations, is used to govern a society and to control the behavior of its members in order to ensure a safe and peaceful society.In fact, some laws seem to be unjust but are play an dominant role in the development of society.（严重地与ts矛盾）Consider the individual tax law, for instance, it is the common sense that tax rate on the high-income individual are much higher than tax on the low-income individual. Obviously, this law is unjust to the high-income group which earn their income in a legal way because by no means they should necessarily take more responsibility for the country than the low-income groups. However, this law play a crucial role in lessoning the gap between the two groups and promoting the harmony society.
--感觉TS跟下面的reasoning, example都脱节了。
--段间逻辑关系跳跃太大
     Obeying the just laws is the duty of every citizen and is also the prerequisite of preserving the stability of society. We obey laws not only because we afraid of the punishment along with the violation of laws, but also because we are desire for a peaceful and stable society which is the insurance of people's daily happy lives. In the history, we can see the prosperous country due to the obeying to the justice laws of most of the people, and we can also see the violation and bloody conflict because of against the laws。--没有具体的example, 很空洞，而且也有与TS脱节的现象。 Further more, by pondering over the nature of law, such as against crimes, facilitating business activities and private planning, limiting the powers of government and providing some degree of freedom that would not otherwise be possible，--看懂了但很ao-kou. we can come to the conclusion that it is relate to ourselves benefit that obeying the laws, because most laws are really basing on the just need and requirement of us.
--还有TS与reasoning脱节。

--逻辑不连贯，上一段人们有责任遵守法律，这一段就跳到人们有责任去指出。。。   
Facing the laws(unjust laws?) that disturbing the peace of society or encroach the individual's right and wealth, people should take the responsibility to point them out and seeking for solution. Every law system will have their deficiency and limitation because of the change of people's moral principle and value along with time passing by. In a democratic society like Canada,--单独拿出，却又不具体说明…laws are not carved in stone, but must reflect the changing needs of society. Consequently, anyone who feels that a particular law is flawed should speak out publicly and to seek to change the law by lawful means. When we look into the development of law, we can get to know that a large part of the improvement of law system is due to revising of the flaws of laws. Admittedly, obeying laws is of great importance to the stability of society.—example,这样很空洞 However, irrational obeying sometimes cause serious social problems, like the discrimination of black due to the laws such as forbidden of black children entering the school with only white students.—example有问题 Also we should see that pointing out the flaws are far more precious for it can promote the improvement of laws, which can hardly achieved by just obeying the laws.
--TS没选好，如果说社会的进步主要是由人们不断地修正法律所导致的，是不是更好。
--段内的逻辑关系很混乱。。。   
However, disobeying and even resisting flawed laws can not be the correct solution to the problem. Revolution in the history which are most cause by resisting flawed laws are result in bloody conflict and devastation to people's confidence to the country and unfortunately hardly success. Nowadays, in a more liberal society, the time of solve problems with violate has past and what we face is a much more liberal and democratic society. Speaking out the flaws of laws and give suggestion for changing the irrational part is the favourable way for deal with the problems which can successful solve problems peacefully. Democracy, 1787, the first Constitution was born, instead of being fixed, 1791 ten amendments were added to the Constitution to ensure human rights. Until now, there has been twenty-seven amendments, much more words than the initial Constitution. Admittedly, when situation can not be changed by arbitrary government, we should take on our arms and defense our principle and right.
-- just so so的reasoning.阐述不清
    In sum, obeying laws is our duty but like every system cannot be perfect, in pursuit of making law more rational and just, it is also the very duty for us to indicate the law flaws in a legal way, which is of further profound meaning to us all.

--很难的一篇I，我自己写了好久还觉得好失败，没办法，我们处的环境跟老美有差距—从小就被灌输地认为法律都是对的，而且现在中国的法制意识也不见全。
--讨论一下，感觉这道题的关键点在unjust, just, disobey,resist上
--disobey, resist是指什么？？一定要暴力的才叫disobey, resist吗？我写完后查了一下温和的抵抗也可以是disobey, resist的…狂汗…还是不知道怎么写…
--红的是认为个人用词不准确的
--加油~~
--希望大家可以认真地帮别人拍,对自己也有帮助不是吗?

[ 本帖最后由 荧惑 于 2007-3-17 14:33 编辑 ]

chenmi8812UID: 2261072

多谢

但有一些我要辩驳的，第二段的论述的那句话我觉得实在支持前面的TS因为通过说明一些法律看似对某些人不公平来说明法律是要维护社会稳定的，然后说明这样区分是不合适的，会失去一些实际的问题

[ 本帖最后由 chenmi8812 于 2007-3-18 11:48 编辑 ]

see329UID: 2260355

Issue17 [Transcend小组]第六次作业
用时1小时30分钟
Issue 17   What should people do facing just and unjust laws.
     I fundamentally agree with the author's assertion that making change to unjust laws is more important than merely obeying just laws. However, two specious claim （claims）are involved in the assertion. Firstly, it is an arbitrary division that laws are separated into just and unjust. Secondly, disobeying and resisting may be not the accurate action to unjust laws, at least should not be put to the first position.
//开头最好不错！第一句放到最好一句，或许更好些。
     The dividing of laws into just and unjust ones are（is/主语？） partial and sometimes will miss the real function of laws. Law, body of official rules and regulations, is used to govern a society and to control the behavior of its members in order to ensure a safe and peaceful society. In fact, some laws seem to be unjust but are play an（a） dominant role in the development of society. Consider the individual tax law, for instance, it is the common sense that tax rate on the high-income individual are much higher than tax on the low-income individual. Obviously, this law is unjust to the high-income group which earn their income（主谓？） in a legal way because by no means they should necessarily take more responsibility for the country than the low-income groups. However, this law play（plays） a crucial role in lessoning the gap between the two groups and promoting the harmony society.

     Obeying the just laws is the duty of every citizen and is also the prerequisite of preserving the stability of society. We obey laws not only because we afraid of the punishment along with the violation of laws, but also because we are desire for a peaceful and stable society which is the insurance of people's daily happy lives. In the history, we can see the prosperous country due to the obeying to the justice laws of most of the people, and we can also see the violation and bloody conflict because of against the laws. Further more, by pondering over the nature of law, such as against crimes, facilitating business activities and private planning, limiting the powers of government and providing some degree of freedom that would not otherwise be possible, we can come to the conclusion that it is relate to ourselves benefit that obeying the laws, because most laws are really basing on the just need and requirement of us.

    Facing the laws that disturbing the peace of society or encroach the individual's right and wealth, people should take the responsibility to point them out and seeking for solution. Every law system will have their deficiency and limitation because of the change of people's moral principle and value along with time passing by. In a democratic society like Canada, laws are not carved in stone, but must reflect the changing needs of society. Consequently, anyone who feels that a particular law is flawed should speak out publicly and to seek to change the law by lawful means. When we look into the development of law, we can get to know that a large part of the improvement of law system is due to revising of the flaws of laws. Admittedly, obeying laws is of great importance to the stability of society. However, irrational obeying sometimes cause serious social problems, like the discrimination of black due to the laws such as forbidden of black children entering the school with only white students. Also we should see that pointing out the flaws are far more precious for it can promote the improvement of laws, which can hardly achieved by just obeying the laws.

    However, disobeying and even resisting flawed laws can not be the correct solution to the problem. Revolutions in the history which are most cause by resisting flawed laws are result in bloody conflict and devastation to people's confidence to the country and unfortunately hardly success. Nowadays, in a more liberal society, the time of solve problems with violate has past and what we face is a much more liberal and democratic society. Speaking out the flaws of laws and give suggestion for changing the irrational part is the favorable way for deal with the problems which can successful solve problems peacefully. Democracy, 1787, the first Constitution was born, instead of being fixed, 1791 ten amendments were added to the Constitution to ensure human rights. Until now, there has been twenty-seven amendments, much more words than the initial Constitution. Admittedly, when situation can not be changed by arbitrary government, we should take on our arms and defense our principle and right.

    In sum, obeying laws is our duty but like every system cannot be perfect, in pursuit of making law more rational and just, it is also the very duty for us to indicate the law flaws in a legal way, which is of further profound meaning to us all.

难得的好文章，里面有些不好的，楼上基本上说了。

see329UID: 2260355

I fundamentally agree with the author's assertion that making change to unjust laws is more important than merely obeying just laws. However, two specious claim(claims) are involved in the assertion. Firstly, it is an arbitrary division (改成it is arbitrary) that laws are separated into just and unjust. Secondly, disobeying and resisting may be not the accurate action to unjust laws, at least should not be put to the first position.

     The dividing of laws into just and unjust ones are(is) partial and sometimes will miss the real function of laws. Law, body of official rules and regulations, is used to govern a society and to control the behavior of its members in order to ensure a safe and peaceful society. In fact, some laws seem to be unjust but are play an(a) dominant role in the development of society. Consider the individual tax law, for instance, it is the common sense that tax rate on the high-income individual are much higher than tax on the low-income individual. Obviously, this law is unjust to the high-income group which earns their income in a legal way because by no means they should necessarily take more responsibility for the country than the low-income groups. However, this law play(plays) a crucial role in lessoning the gap between the two groups and promoting the harmony society.

     Obeying the just laws is the duty of every citizen and is also the prerequisite of preserving the stability of society. We obey laws not only because we afraid of the punishment along with the violation of laws, but also because we are desire for a peaceful and stable society which is the insurance of people's daily happy lives. In the history, we can see the prosperous country due to the obeying to the justice laws of most of the people, and we can also see the violation and bloody conflict because of against the laws. Further more, by pondering over the nature of law, such as against crimes, facilitating business activities and private planning, limiting the powers of government and providing some degree of freedom that would not otherwise be possible, we can come to the conclusion that it is relate to ourselves benefit that obeying the laws(?), because most laws are really basing on the just need and requirement of us.

    Facing the laws that disturbing the peace of society or encroach the individual's right and wealth, people should take the responsibility to point them out and seeking for solution. Every law system will have their deficiency and limitation because of the change of people's moral principle and value along with time passing by. In a democratic society like Canada, laws are not carved in stone, but must reflect the changing needs of society. Consequently, anyone who feels that a particular law is flawed should speak out publicly and（删） to seek to change the law by lawful means. When we look into the development of law, we can get to know that a large part of the improvement of law system is due to revising of the flaws of laws. Admittedly, obeying laws is of great importance to the stability of society（觉得多余）. However, irrational obeying sometimes cause serious social problems, like the discrimination of black due to the laws such as forbidden of black children entering the school with only white students. Also we should see that pointing out the flaws are far more precious for it can promote the improvement of laws, which can hardly achieved by just obeying the laws.

    However, disobeying and even resisting flawed laws can not be the correct solution to the problem. Revolution（Revolutions） in the history which are most cause by resisting flawed laws are result in bloody conflict and devastation to people's confidence to the country and unfortunately hardly success. Nowadays, in a more liberal society, the time of solve problems with violate（violation） has past and what we face is a much more liberal and democratic society. Speaking out the flaws of laws and give（giving） suggestion for changing the irrational part is the favourable way for deal（dealing） with the problems which can successful （successfully）solve problems peacefully. Democracy, 1787, the first Constitution was born, instead of being fixed, 1791 ten amendments were added to the Constitution to ensure human rights. Until now, there has （have）been twenty-seven amendments, much more words than the initial Constitution. Admittedly, when situation can not be changed by arbitrary government, we should take on our arms and defense our principle and right.

    In sum, obeying laws is our duty but like（删） every system cannot be perfect, in pursuit of making law more rational and just, it is also the very duty for us to indicate the law flaws in a legal way, which is of further profound meaning to us all.

Because:用其他的替换下，太多的because。
感觉去掉第一段后，逻辑效果更好些。
例子很好，值得学习
文章中有少量的用词、语法错误。建议写完后，放到word中自查先。
划线的为好的句子、词组。
希望大家可以认真地帮我拍拍！