argument231 oceanus4月作文小组3月30日第六次作业

oceanusUID：2283238

TOPIC: ARGUMENT231 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.

"The members of the town school board should not be reelected because they are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in our local schools. For example, student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily, and this year the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama director, even though he had received many awards for his original plays. Meanwhile, over $300,000 of the high school budget goes to athletic programs, and the head football coach is now the highest-paid member of the teaching staff."
WORDS: 410          TIME: 0:30:00          DATE: 2007-3-30

In the argument, the author reaches a conclusion that the members of the town school board should not be reelected because they are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in their local schools. But the argument is unconvincing as it stands.

In the first place, the author does not provide enough evidence to demonstrate the members of the town board are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in their local schools. In the argument, in order to demonstrate the author's claim the author points out that student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily and that this year the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama director, even though he had received many awards for his original plays. But the evidence is unconvincing, for the author says nothing about the reason that student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily and why the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama. It is entirely possible that student does not like drama now; they may begin to love sports or other things, so it is reasonable to refuse to renew the contract of the drama director, because it is not necessary now. In a word, the mere fact that student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily and the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama director suggests nothing to the author's claim.

What's more, granted that the members of the town school board are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in their local schools, there is still not enough evidence to demonstrate the members of the town school board should not be reelected. The task of the school board is involved in many parts, not just in the arts. Maybe the school board did a good job in other parts except the arts. Hence, it is possible that the majority are satisfied with the school board because of their good job in other parts. In sum, unless the author provides enough evidence that demonstrate that the school board also did a bad job in other part as in the arts, the author will not persuade me.

In conclusion, the argument is problematic. To strength the argument the author should provide evidence that the school board did a bad job in all part of education. Or the author will not convince me.

寂寞樱花UID：2306511

In the argument, the author reaches a conclusion that the members of the town school board should not be reelected because they are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in their local schools. But the argument is unconvincing as it stands.

In the first place, the author does not provide enough evidence to demonstrate the members of the town board are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in their local schools. In the argument, in order to demonstrate the author's claim the author points out that student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily and that this year the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama director, even though he had received many awards for his original plays. But the evidence is unconvincing, for the author says nothing about the reason that student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily and why the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama. It is entirely possible that student does not like drama now; they may begin to love sports or other things, so it is reasonable to refuse to renew the contract of the drama director, because it is not necessary now. In a word, the mere fact that student participation in the high school drama club has been declining steadily and the school board refused to renew the contract of the drama director suggests nothing to the author's claim.

What's more, granted that the members of the town school board are not concerned about promoting high-quality education in the arts in their local schools, there is still not enough evidence to demonstrate the members of the town school board should not be reelected. The task of the school board is involved in many parts, not just in the arts. Maybe the school board did a good job in other parts except the arts. Hence, it is possible that the majority are satisfied with the school board because of their good job in other parts. In sum, unless the author provides enough evidence that demonstrate that the school board also did a bad job in other part as in the arts, the author will not persuade me.(例证可以再具体一点）

In conclusion, the argument is problematic. To strength the argument the author should provide evidence that the school board did a bad job in all part of education. Or the author will not convince me.

没什么可挑剔的，A方面值得学习，论证的很好，逻辑性也很不错，I可以再加强的。
一起加油吧。
晚了对不起~