大伙帮忙评评这两篇作文先 谢谢牛人了

lizhongweiUID: 2212984

这两篇是两个人写的同一个作文 167题 问学校投资钱在图书馆上 是投资书还是电脑。。大伙帮忙评下哪个好些 谢谢了

第一篇

Having enough money to invest the libraryis an exciting thing to any universities. How to use this money is also adifficult choice. If one has to choose one between computers and books whenmaking investment, I personally believe that the best option is the computer becausecomputers not only provide students convenient but also save money for theuniversity.

First, a computer offer the students a veryconvenient way of study. With the computer one will have no trouble finding anydata of the library he/she wants to further my study by using the search systemand the digital information. If the library does not have enough computers,however, searching for the large amount of data is not an easy task for everystudent. one have to spend nearly half a day in the library wandering in thebook shelves, finding the right book he/she want from the reference stacks ,and even carry these books , perhaps weight for 20 pound in gross, commuting betweenthe library and his/her classroom. This, of course, is the waste of time andenergy. On the other hand, a computer would make us searching the informationin the library everywhere by using the internet, even out of the university, regardlessthe strict off duty time and the situation of the library.  And we even do not need to consider the overdueand fine by downloading the PDF digital books for the library’s website.

The second reason why invest money on thecomputer is the best choice because the digital system in the library wouldsave money for the university. Firstly, without enough computers, a library hasto buy many same books, such as the schoolbooks and fundamental reference bookswhich are needed for many classes, to meet the need of the students. Thesebooks would waste a lot of money in the university in the long run. But, if alibrary has enough computer and internet system, the university only needs tobuy the copyright from the publishing companies and provide the digital editionsto the students. Secondly, computer is a good assistant for the people; it isalso for the library, too. Almost all of the old libraries have the problem of theexpense of too many employees, and computers help, because with these excellentassistants, a library does not need a large number of  

While, in comparing to the books, thecomputers also have many disadvantages, it is very fragile to the virus forinstance, I believe that the benefits are overweight the defects. If we takethe proper precaution, such as installing anti-virus software and making copiesfor the data, the students and the university stand to benefits.





第二篇
Purchasing computers for students or booksfor the library seems a difficult decision to make. Some people would prefer tobuy computers, while others would rather buy books. After several years ofbeing a student, I have come to the conclusion that paying money for books isbetter than purchasing computers.

As we all know, the new technology ischanging faster and faster. With this constantly changing technology, computersare easy to depreciate. It’s very crackpot and bothersome for the school to upgradetheir computers in time. And then there is no guarantee for the students tolearn on the best technology. Spending time learning the over-date knowledge isa waste of time and money. It’s unnecessary for the student to have a goodcommand of the computers when he or she is in the school now. This situationmay make them lack some experience on this, but they are quick in learning. Sothey can learn this subject after graduation.

Nothing is appropriate for all. So arecomputers. It is, however, hardly true that without excellent software, thecomputers are good-for-nothing. Obviously, the excellent software is almostgreatly expensive. For example, in this year, Microsoft develops a newoperating system “Windows Vista”. In the digital market, buying one may costyou over 2000 Yuan. While one would like to say that we can buy the piraticalsoftware by a little money, it could not be a long-term way. For instance, “Rising”,antivirus software, which is very popular in China.Once you buy a piratical one, if a new virus comes out, it does not work, becausepiratical software cannot upgrade on the internet. Under this situation, thepiratical software has not any use, and there is no doubt that computer is atrash. Computer must pay for many incidental fees such as the cost of networkcard and repairs. If the school does not have a lot of extra money, thecomputer may not be the best choice.

Books have more of positive than a negativeeffect. Convenience is not necessarily the most important reason for thecomputers. Computers are much more useless than complex. Although theinformation on the internet is greatly abundant, there is an apparent problemthat you have to spend your own time to choose the needed information.Secondly, you have to admit that abundance does not mean integrity andspecialty. At this point, the book is totally better than the computer.Sometimes, thick books even more books all expatiate upon one thing. This isvery helpful for the students to understand the knowledge deeply. When booksare published, most of them are very authoritative. That is very important forthe students. Besides, the book is greatly convenient for the students toschlep. As the student does not finish reading the book at school, they canalso take them home to continue to do it.

Accordingly, in my opinion, I prefer tospend money on books rather than computers. In addition to the reasons listedabove, it is important to note that, computers have many draws for the studentswho do not have a adult Weltanschauung, which may lead forward somethingtrouble. Neither do the books. So purchasing books is the better choice.

lizhongweiUID: 2212984

我先自己顶 大伙一定帮忙啊

moondy74178945UID: 2231844

帮顶一下:)

lizhongweiUID: 2212984

再顶 呼

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goodwinUID: 2276227

“I personally believe that the best option is the computer becausecomputers not only provide students convenient but also save money for theuniversity”这句是在展示自己的观点，应该再润色一下，建议：
I personally believe that investing in computer is the better choice since it not only provides students more conveniences but cost less money for university
仅供参考啊:)

damien.lauUID: 2365462

只改了第一篇作文的前2段， 问题比较多。<br />
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Having enough money to invest in the library is an exciting thing to any universities. How to use this money is also a difficult choice (<font color="Red">How to use this money is also a daunting task</font>.)If one has to choose one between computers and books when making investment, I personally believe that the best option is the computer because computers not only provide students convenient but also save money for the university.(<font color="Red">Given me the choice, I would opt for computers, which not only improve work efficiency but also save cost for university.)</font><br />
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First, a (删除零冠词) computer offers the students a very convenient way of study(<font color="Red">更换开头句： computers have lots to offer</font>.) With the (删除定冠词) computer one will have no (<font color="Red">will not have much</font>) trouble (换词difficulty) finding any data of the library he/she wants to further my study by using the search system and the digital information.(<font color="Red">此句改写：with computers , students will be able to conveniently source much-needed information through internet or electronic database</font>) If the library does not have enough computers,however, searching for the large amount of data is not an easy task for everystudent. one have to spend nearly half a day in the library wandering in the book shelves, finding the right book he/she want from the reference stacks ,and even carry these books , perhaps weight for 20 pound in gross, commuting between the library and his/her classroom.(<font color="Red">Compared to conventional printed books and reference books, computers makes study and information collection easy without causing long hours selecting and screening among piles of books</font>) This, of course, is the waste of time and energy. On the other hand, (改为Furthermore) a(删除定冠词) computer would make us searching(search) the information in the library everywhere by using the internet, even out of the university, regardless the strict off duty time and the situation of the library. (<font color="Red">观点句： furthermore, computers facilitate study and work by defying limitations of time and location 然后后面给出具体的解释</font>). And we even do not need to consider the overdue and fine by downloading the PDF digital books for the library’s website.(这句没看懂， 不要了吧)

[ 本帖最后由 damien.lau 于 2007-8-15 22:01 编辑 ]

xugelanUID: 2336294

Enough money is a good news for a school,and how to use this amount of money must be taken into consideration.Buy computers for students ? Or books for library?In my opinion,purchasing books seems more reasonable.

Appearance of computer make possible the rapid access of informations in few seconds and save our time and energy.I agree that the library needs some computers for data searching and help the readers to find the books they want.However,it not necessary for school to buy computers for students.What students really need is book because of its conspicuous vantages.

one of the merit of books is that one can find almost all the knowledge in paperbased books.Reading is the ordest and most common way for human to record history and their wisdom since the start of our society.Books are convenient to take.you can read them anywhere at any time without necessary to take the heavy pc with you.Besides, comparing with computer,reading book is a more healthy way for learning. Longtime sitting on front of computer will make person dizzy and is extremely harmful to eyes.

As a student in college,i have my own experience in using computer.Firstly,Computers cost a lot as it need maintenance and frequently update.What's more,While it makes our leisure time colorful,it distract us from study.There are so many interesing games and movies on the internet and some classmates indulge in the games which directly causes the failure in the exams.They lack the adquate self-control to use the computer.Based on such a fact,i strongly recommend the money to be paid in books.

For those reasons above,i suggest that my school purchase computers instead  of books.

[ 本帖最后由 xugelan 于 2007-8-27 11:53 编辑 ]