再次再次谢谢斑竹 改改我作文

lizhongweiUID: 2212984

181题 关于贵国土地是加以开发还是保持原样的

I am living in China, a developing country. People used totransform natural landscape into houses and factories perusing after the temporaryeconomic benefits. After several years of reckless construction, rivers arepolluted, atmosphere is contaminated, and a large number species of animals andplants are endangered, some species are even extinction, people are in a desperatesituation. At this point, I whole hearted support that letting the land in itsnatural condition appropriately is superior to recklessly construction asdetailed below.

Firstly, keepingland in its original condition offers us a bulwark to the natural and man-madedisaster. When natural disaster comes, perhaps a flood or a drought, a naturalland would be a refuge for the human by providing foods and resources. Whenpollution happens, the rise of carbon dioxide for instance, the natural wouldhelp us cleaning the air by the process known as photosynthesis. That is not tosay that one should not use any piece of natural land for every possible contingency.It simply means that one should not transform too many natural lands intohouses and factories without a substantial amount of natural resources to defendthese inevitable tragedies.

The second reasonwhy let the land in its natural condition is for the environmental reasons.Almost all of the developing countries have the problem of leanness. Forexample, it is true that the green coverage of our country is very small, about1%, less than the average standard of the world. This figure, however, is stilldeclining by the expense of unceasing construction. Without the resources fromthe natural, human can not sustain the life of any kind, foods, clean water andfresh air and so on. So keeping the land in its natural condition would not onlya guard against the unavoidable disaster but also provide the resources to us.

At last, while itis true that building houses and industries is very profitable, it is not theonly way to make money. On the one hand, one should rebuild the old houses andindustries instead of ceaselessly demolish natural surroundings. In our countrythere are too many building are dilapidated, while people intend to build newone in the resource and environment of the natural. This, of course, is thewaste of money and energy. On the other, the space saving information industrycan earn more money than the heavy industry, which has to need scale-up and exploitresources from natural. While one would like to believe that only we build moreconstructions and more manufacturing will we truly prosperous, recklessconstruction can cause many problems such as pollution, species extinction, andmost important, it can not profit any more in the long run because if thenatural property are dried up, we would have nothing to support the developmentin the future. So I believe that if we build up more information industriesrather than the old ones. Not only will we protect eh environment but it willbenefit from the investment.

lintelleUID: 2297267

我每次打开你那一大串作文都很头疼……
按理来讲应该是别人帮你改过以后你自己再总结一下，再练习一篇新的，练完了以后再让人改，再总结……这样才能提高的呀。
你那六个主题，lastangel 帮你看了一篇，我帮你看了一篇，其他的估计就没人帮你改了。下次自己注意一下吧。改作文是累活，何况这样砸作文帮助也不会大的。做对自己最有利的选择，有时候最勤奋并不一定能达到好效果。

moondy74178945UID: 2231844

楼主的精神可嘉，居然写了这么多作文。
但是注意方法，就算好心想帮你的，也可能被你吓走了。
而且指着论坛上的朋友给你意见是不够的，最好能找人面对面地给你讲。:handshake