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As we all know, the society is full of knowledge today, and the knowledge is vital to
everybody. So when it comes to argue whether internet is important considering the massive
information provided by the internet, maybe some people will say it accesses to so much
information, however ,I insist that it is a benefit to most of the people for its providing
a huge amount of valuable imformation.(这一部分逻辑不对)
First of all, I can know about news by viewing the websites or even listening (listen)to web
radios. For example, I really like English, and I prefer to listen english radios like VOA
special, BBA, sciam radio, MSN radio, etc. everyday. Through listening to those english
radios, I can not only improve my english, but also gain much news (news or new)information which is
pretty (口语用词,建议换一个)helpful to me. Moreover, I can know about many types of news such as sports news,
economic news, politic news and so on. Those news are also forms of good information.
Moreover, I can play internet games. Nowadays, everybody will have much pressure both from
the society and their family, so if there is a good way for people to release it, it will
gain overwhelming praise. The internet games is just this kind of entertainment that can
reduce the stress. The internet games is becoming more and more popular now, more than 1
billion people have played it. I contend that as long as people play the entertainment (internet?)for
amusement, it is also helpful.
Finally, it can save people lots of money. In the past, people had to buy CDs if they want
to listen to music, it really cost a lot. But if people listen to online music, people will
pay less. It can also provide people with online movie with less pay, so people are not(don't)
need come to the cinema any more. Besides,there are many reasons why it can save people a
huge sum of money: people don't need to buy newspapers any more because people can watch
news online; people don't need telephone either because people can call each other online;
people don't need to pay for the stamps because people can Email each other without fees.
As a youth, I prefer to search on the Internet because I think that it can provide me with
as much information as I want and I can entertain myself as well.In a word, I consider it
beneficial to most of people.
3个论据,带来新闻,玩游戏,省钱都不错,但是可以把他们扩大为知识和信息,娱乐,便利。语言比前面流畅很多,个别语法错误,加油
[ 本帖最后由 gnuliutingting 于 2007-5-12 22:09 编辑 ] |
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