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5 "A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."

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For a nation embraces diverse cultures and religions, the curriculum issues could evoke camps of argument ignited by a little spark. Should we set a nation-wide curriculum? To what degree is this sort of curriculum supposed to reach? In my opinion, a nation does not need to require all its students to study the same national curriculum, neither does it feasible. In the contrary, various curriculums different from district to district are reasonable and acceptable. Nevertheless, overlooking the importance of integrity for a nation is unwisely too. Standing on this point, a nation may use other methods to ensure it.

Let me draw a grand picture first. In today’s era of limitless information, we are gradually accepting the concept of global village. Education is no longer defined within a narrow scope but has the properties as interchangeable and fluid. With an open mind, students from different countries and territories are sitting in the same classroom and discussing tutorials; intellects from various areas are communicating using the advanced communication technologies. They may have different colors and speak multifarious languages; they may have diverse backgrounds and believe in discrepant religions, leave alone the education curriculums they studied before. Yet no one would fairly carp on the fact that they received different curriculums; in fact, it never serves as a serious problem. Turn our vision back to a nation, if using the same perspective as treating the global education, it is actually not that necessary to restrict all its students on one curricular standard. The condition of various curriculums is not a hurdle for pursuing further study.

Let us focus on the nation itself now. The curriculum adopted by individual part is obviously more suitable for the local residents than the one proposed by the whole nation in most cases. A particular district can elastically set the curriculum according to its nature environment, its majority religion or even its prevailing language and so on. For instance, a village area may demand a course on agrology much more eagerly than city area; a part where residents are most Muslims may need a course on the Koran; a Hispanic group may as well hope the curriculum is taught bilingually. These needs are difficult to be realized if the nation requires all its students to follow the same curricular standard, even if the standard only be demanded before college—to carry out various curriculums after college is too late to fulfill the goal of suitable education mentioned above.

Having recognized that a nation is not desired to intervene into the curriculum which is best leave to be set by individual parts, maintaining a general cohesive ambience is nonetheless indispensable. However, rather than focuses on the method of control the curriculum---which is to most extent controversial, hence almost infeasible---a nation could choose other adjustments. One suggestion is to provide a standardized test---a national general examination---as the tactic to encourage different areas to obey the basic national requirement. It not only equals to restrict part of the curriculum in a gentle and voluntary way, but also provide a platform for a nation to preserve integrity and justice.

In sum, it's not imperative for a nation to require all its students to take the same curriculum. From the academic point of view, a uniform curriculum is not the prerequisite for pursuing further study. Different backgrounds have proven themselves not the barriers of academic research and communication. From the concern of nature or culture, a healthy society demands the diversity of modalities. The only reason left for a nation to carry out the standardized curriculum is achieving balance and integrity---which nonetheless could be realized in many other feasible ways.

[ 本帖最后由 solartorch 于 2007-5-8 20:48 编辑 ]

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For a nation embraces diverse cultures and religions, the curriculum issues could evoke camps of argument ignited by a little spark. Should we set a nation-wide curriculum? To what degree is this sort of curriculum supposed to reach? In my opinion, a nation does not need to require all its students to study the same national curriculum, neither does it feasible(这句话和前面连在一起不太对，主语不一致). In the contrary, various curriculums different from district to district are reasonable and acceptable. Nevertheless, overlooking the importance of integrity for a nation is unwisely too. Standing on this point, a nation may use other methods to ensure it.

Let me draw a grand picture first. In today’s era of limitless information, we are gradually accepting the concept of global village. Education is no longer defined within a narrow scope but has the properties as interchangeable and fluid. With an open mind, students from different countries and territories are sitting in the same classroom and discussing tutorials; intellects from various areas are communicating using the advanced communication technologies. They may have different colors and speak multifarious languages; they may have diverse backgrounds and believe in discrepant religions, leave alone the education curriculums they studied before. Yet no one would fairly carp on the fact that they received different curriculums; in fact, it never serves as a serious problem. Turn our vision back to a nation, if using the same perspective as treating the global education, it is actually not that necessary to restrict all its students on one curricular standard. The condition of various curriculums is not a hurdle for pursuing further study. （感觉这个例子不是很又说服力，而且占了这么大的篇幅呢，论证应该更多一些。毕竟是自己虚构的画面，虽然新颖，但是显得是叙述类文章了，而且后面过渡得有点生硬。）

Let us focus on the nation itself now. The curriculum adopted by individual part is obviously more suitable for the local residents than the one proposed by the whole nation in most cases. A particular district can elastically set the curriculum according to its nature environment, its majority religion or even its prevailing language and so on. For instance, a village area may demand a course on agrology much more eagerly than city area; a part where residents are most Muslims may need a course on the Koran; a Hispanic group may as well hope the curriculum is taught bilingually. These needs are difficult to be realized if the nation requires all its students to follow the same curricular standard, even if the standard only be demanded before college—to carry out various curriculums after college is too late to fulfill the goal of suitable education mentioned above.（一系列的举例很不错）

Having recognized that a nation is not desired to intervene into the curriculum which is best leave to be set by individual parts, maintaining a general cohesive ambience is nonetheless indispensable. However, rather than focuses on the method of control the curriculum---which is to most extent controversial, hence almost infeasible---a nation could choose other adjustments. One suggestion is to provide a standardized test---a national general examination---as the tactic to encourage different areas to obey the basic national requirement. It not only equals to restrict part of the curriculum in a gentle and voluntary way, but also provide a platform for a nation to preserve integrity and justice.（考试是要以教育为前提的，如果没有教育，考试怎么可能呢？所以还不如说要求一部分课程作为国家课程更好一些，或者再找一些好的方法。）

In sum, it's not imperative for a nation to require all its students to take the same curriculum. From the academic point of view, a uniform curriculum is not the prerequisite for pursuing further study. Different backgrounds have proven themselves not the barriers of academic research and communication. From the concern of nature or culture, a healthy society demands the diversity of modalities. The only reason left for a nation to carry out the standardized curriculum is achieving balance and integrity---which nonetheless could be realized in many other feasible ways.

总结一下吧，还是先膜拜一下词汇和句型的运用
不过第一段的例子建议修改修改，他们交流没有障碍，必然是有一些课程要都学习的，不然怎么能没有障碍呢，起码语言就得相通啊，这样就说明了必修课的重要了，所以最好不要放在前面论述
后面的都挺好的，建议论证的部分可以再多一点