昨天刚写了一篇有关植物的作文，求拍

yuer-1984UID: 2263735

每次一拿到作文就发懵，很怕很怕写作文，可是5月18号 就要考了，范文基本上没背，仅翻翻而已，新概念3 也就是翻了一两遍
Plants can provide food,shelter,clothing,or medicine.what is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country?

China’s cluture has always had an intimate relationship with nature. This can be seen in many aspects of Chinese cluture,from herbal medicines to intricate Chinese gardens.As for me , the most important plant in my cluture is the gingkgo.

My hometown is a samall town in the south of China,it is famous of kingkgo. A TOWN OF GINGKGOs is its another name.Every fall, the gingkgo trees in here lost their leaves,most of them are laden with drupe.This is very beautiful landscape,if you raise your head, you will find there are so many yellow pulps which hide in the trees.the yellow skin of the pulp is wrinkled ,soft,but the seed husk is very hard and creamy white, and shaped like a almond.The gingkgo nuts taste very good.Because of its nutrition ,it is the hingh-grade food in china.can be fried ,roasted,stewed.One of my favorite snacks are gingkgo nuts which are roasted by microwave oven. In additon to being a source of food,the gingkgo has healing qualities as well.Gingkgo’s leaves have been used in  medicine to improve the Cardiovascular circulation and reduce blood pressure.,they can be made into teas, pills by traditional or scientific tenchnic methods.
Another reason why the gingkgo is one of the important plants in my cluture is that it is a tree that in on the verge of extinction;however ,it has a long and great history.Scientists have traced this curious creature’s roots back to the time of the dinosaurs,hundreds of thoustands years ago.Because of this long history, the gingkgo has been termed the ‘living fossil’.Today, scients can study the gingkgo and discover many interesting facts about the history of our planet and its habitats.
In conclusion I poist that the gingkgo plays a significant role in the life and culture of chinese people, and not only is the gingkgo the symbol of my hometown ,but also the national iconic symbol of china.

lintelleUID: 2297267

这两天要赶紧练习打字技术。考场上可能会更加紧张，这样打字太拖后腿了。建议找些toefl高分作文，先研读一下，总结出好的、自己有可能用得着的句式，作上记号。然后再把这篇作文输入电脑，打字的时候专门注意做了记号的那些句子就可以了：既练习打字，也给出了充分的时间去记忆那些好句子。
这几天也要特别注意背单词了，对阅读、写作都有好处。
写作一定要注意段落分布，老美喜欢经典的五段论，开头结尾，中间三个论点，每个论点分段。到时候一定要在心里想好了三个分论点是什么在下笔。如果可以在开头中点明三个论点更好，显得写作是胸有成竹，且逻辑分明。
你现在时间不多了，可以选择背些模板，这个真是很无奈的选择。
如果你按照我说的几条每天做8个小时，5天后再练习一篇，可以pm我，我再给你点意见。加油！

ccrobin000UID: 2296575

China’s(Chinese) cluture has always had(has always) an intimate relationship with nature. This can be seen in many aspects of Chinese cluture(不能老用同样的词,而且是再一段中,适当替换下),from herbal medicines to intricate Chinese gardens.As for me , the most important plant in my cluture(our cluture或者Chinese cluture,culture不应该属于个人吧,最少要一个小群体才能算culture,个人的叫habit) is the gingkgo (请教:这个词什么意思?).

My hometown is a samall town(改成is smal而且small还misspelll) ,in the south of China,(去掉都好加个and)it is famous of kingkgo. A TOWN OF GINGKGOs is its another name(as known by the name of...不是说看过新概念么,应该这么用才对).Every fall(建议这个放本句最后说), the gingkgo trees in here lost their leaves,most of them are laden with drupe.This is very beautiful landscape(典型chinglish,This landscape is very beautiful),if you raise your head(raise your head up then) you will(如果你前面用if虚拟语气这里应该是would) find there are so many yellow pulps which hide in(on) the trees.the yellow skin of the pulp is wrinkled ,soft,but the seed husk is very hard and creamy white, and shaped like a almond.The gingkgo nuts taste very good.Because of its nutrition(逻辑问题,有营养不见得好吃,不能用because连接) ,it is the hingh(misspell)-grade food in china.can be fried ,roasted,stewed.One of my favorite snacks are gingkgo nuts which are roasted by microwave oven. In additon to being a source of food,the gingkgo has healing qualities as well.Gingkgo’s leaves have been used in  medicine to improve the Cardiovascular circulation and reduce blood pressure.,they can be made into(逻辑混乱drink as 或者make as 不能说被做到茶里面去,而且tea为什么要复数) teas, pills by traditional or scientific tenchnic methods.
Another reason why the gingkgo is one of the important plants in my cluture is that it is a tree that in on the verge of extinction;however ,it has a long and great history.Scientists have traced this curious creature’s roots back to the time of the dinosaurs,hundreds of thoustands years ago.Because of this long history, the gingkgo has been termed the ‘living fossil’.Today, scients can study the gingkgo and discover many interesting facts about the history of our planet and its habitats.
In conclusion I poist that the gingkgo plays a significant role in the life and culture of chinese people, and not only is the gingkgo the symbol of my hometown ,but also the national iconic symbol of china.(结尾很郁闷,从你上面的detail中没看出结论里的东西)

总结,文章漏洞很多,中间例子中语法和细节错误没全找出来,从结构来看没什么层次,分段分的很牵强,逻辑也很混乱,在给出每个例子之后要和主题点一下,新概念的文章结构很不错,要好好发掘,其实找些重点文章仔细的看才索王道,不要泛泛的看,明白意思就算看过了,好好看两篇新概念,我给你找点实用的新3的1,3,4,9,12,23,34,41这几课,玩命的看吧,如果看不下来就把第一章的几课背下来,到时候脱口而出就有东西写了

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yuer-1984UID: 2263735

完蛋了

yuer-1984UID: 2263735

一种很古老的树种