argument142 [Victors 小组]第四次加强作业

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In this argument, speaker concludes that it is the correlation between red meat and heart disease that results in the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease. To support this conclusion, the arguer cites the report published in last month’s issue of Eating for Health and the fact that red meat is high in iron. However, this argument is problematic and can’t convince us as it stands.

To begin with, the arguer cites the article whose name is ‘Eating Iron’ printed in last month’s issue of Eating for Health which reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease to demonstrate the assumption that high concentrate of iron in diet can result in more possibility to have heart disease. Nevertheless, this report leans little support evidence to the arguer’s assumption. As there is no information about the study’s procedure and the participants taking the survey, the arguer can’t simply rule out other factors that may result in the increased risk of heart disease rather than the ingestion of high levels of iron. Maybe there are other ions or organic compounds or even the environment and places they locate that lead this trend.

Secondly, the arguer fails to take other composition of red meat other than the iron that results in the correlation of between red meat and heart disease into consideration. Without exact and particular comparison of the different ingredients composed in red meat, the arguer can’t directly obtain the conclusion that there are no other materials such as fiber, proteins or some microorganisms contribute the high risk of heart diseases.

Additionally, the arguer ignores other foods rather than red meat which also rich in iron and thus lead the correlation between the amount of iron ingestion and the high level of chances to get heart disease. There are so many kinds of food that contain iron elements with different forms such as compounds or dissociated ions. Maybe it is the certain form of the iron existence either as compounds or dissociated ions that plays an role in increasing the risk of heart disease while the form of iron existed in red meat is opposite. Thus there is no inevitable relationship between red meat and the increased possibility to have heart disease.

In sum, the arguer’s conclusion that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease is lack of supportive evidence and demonstration as there is insufficient comparison and analysis explicitly. To strengthen his recommendation, the arguer needs more evidence and statistic that show the direct correlation between the ingestion of iron and the high risk of heart disease. Further proving on the correlation between the red meat and the heart disease should also be demanded.

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In this argument, speaker concludes that it is the correlation between red meat and heart disease that results in the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease. To support this conclusion, the arguer cites the report published in last month’s issue of Eating for Health and the fact that red meat is high in iron. However, this argument is problematic and can’t convince us as it stands.

To begin with, the arguer cites the article whose name isentitled一句话里连着用了两个定语从句，太复杂了 ‘Eating Iron’ printed in last month’s issue of Eating for Health which reported that a recent study found a correlation between high levels of iron in the diet and an increased risk of heart disease to demonstrate the assumption that high concentrateconcentration of iron in diet can result in more possibility to have heart disease. Nevertheless, this report leanslean？ little support credibleevidence to the arguer’s assumption. As there is no information about the study’s procedure and the participants taking the survey删掉, the arguer can’t simply rule out other factors that may result in the increased risk of heart disease rather than other thanthe ingestion of high levels of iron. Maybe there are other ions or organic compounds or even the environment and places they locate reside in that leadto this trend.
提到了样本的问题却没有深入分析

Secondly, the arguer fails to take other composition of red meat other than the iron that results in the correlation of between red meat and heart disease into consideration. Without exact and particular comparison of the different ingredients composedconsisting in in red meat, the arguer can’t directly obtain the conclusion that there are no other materials such as fiber, proteins or some microorganisms contribute the high risk of heart diseases.这段太单薄了，怎么只有两句话comparison 这种手法是不确切的，排除掉就得意了嘛，干吗非要对比

Additionally, the arguer ignores other foods rather thanother than red meat whichare also rich in iron and thus leadturn out to be the correlation between the amount of iron ingestion and the high level of chances to get heart disease. There are so many kinds of food that contain iron elements with different forms such as compounds or dissociated ions. Maybe it is the acertain form of the iron existence either as compounds or dissociated ions that plays an role in increasing the risk of heart disease while the form of iron existed in red meat is opposite.既然其他铁化合物和游离态的铁可以引起心脏病，为什么the form of iron existed in red meat is opposite Thusin that case，for that matter there is no inevitable relationshipcasual relationship between red meat and the increased possibility to have heart disease.

In sum, the arguer’s conclusion that the correlation between high iron levels and heart disease, then, is most probably a function of the correlation between red meat and heart disease is lack of supportive evidence and demonstration as there is insufficient comparison and analysis explicitly. To strengthen his recommendation, the arguer needs more evidence and statistic that show the direct correlation between the ingestion of iron and the high risk of heart disease. Further proving on the correlation between the red meat and the heart disease should also be demanded.病句