六月花开小组第一次作业

anweivvUID: 2289186

我觉得我们的小组提交情况有一些混乱,原来说发在大帖里,可又没有执行,口语作业的上传也没有人解释.希望组长能够将这些基本的规则和要求说清楚,大家严格遵守,这样不是方便了所有人吗?

christinapcUID: 2296719

It is better to makes friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor.

Friends can influence each other in various ways. Therefore, choosing a friend is much more important decision than more people think. Some people hold the opinion that intelligence is superior to a good sense of humor, as a character of friends. Others, however, contradict intelligence. Personally, I would prefer making friends with humorous people, because I think a sense of humor has more advantage.

There are numerous reasons why I choose humorous people, and I would here explain a few of the most important ones. The main reason is that the humorist can always bring me delight. It can be given a concrete example one of my best friends, who has a very good sense of humor, always tell me some funny jokes. I never felt sad or boiling with him.

Another reason why I advocate the attitude of making friends with humorous person is that the sense of humor always comes with the optimistic attitude to life. The humorous person is able to make fun and find pleasure from events, even sad things, which make himself and the person around him feel hopeful about the future.

One very strong argument for choosing a humor person to be friend is that one could get some inspiration from humorist. For instance, when communicating with a person with a good sense of humor, one could feel relax and pleasure; therefore, his thought would be refreshed, and get something new or good ideas.

Of course, choosing an intelligent person to be a friend with also has advantages to some extent, for giving some sensible advises, or helping one to know more. But if all these factors are complicated, the advantages of humor carry more weight than those ofintelligence. From what has been discussed above, it is quite safe now to say: to choose a humorous person is wise action.


谢谢lalah～还有，口语怎么办～～

anweivvUID: 2289186

红色表示修改,兰色表示建议及我也不确定的地方

            Friends can influence each other in various ways. Therefore, choosing a friend is much more important decision（去掉）than more(most) people think. Some people hold the opinion that intelligence is superior to a good sense of humor, as a character of friends. Others, however, contradict(contradict一般用于客观陈述,好象不用于表达观点)intelligence(这句表达很奇怪,可改为:Others, however, give more credit to sense of humor). Personally, I would prefer making friends with humorous people, because I think a sense of humor has more advantage(advantages).      
         
           There are numerous reasons why I choose humorous people, and I would here explain a few of the most important ones. (有凑字数之嫌) The main reason is that the humorist(humorist指滑稽演员) can always bring me delight. It can be given a concrete example (by) one of my best friends, who has a very good sense of humor, always tell me some funny jokes. I never felt sad or boiling(boring) with him.(例子太过于单薄,要具体,什么样的情况?什么样的joke?)   
         
          Another reason why I advocate the attitude of making friends with humorous person is that the sense of humor always comes with the optimistic attitude to(toward) life. The humorous person is able to make fun and find pleasure from events, even sad things, which make(makes)himself(有性别歧视倾向) and the person around him feel hopeful about the future.    
         
          One(There is still another) very strong argument for choosing a humor person to be friend is that one could get some inspiration from humorist(和前面一样的问题). For instance, when communicating with a person with a good sense of humor, one could feel relax(relaxed) and pleasure(plesant)(feel+adj.系表结构); therefore, his thought would be refreshed, and get something new(可改为更能显示水平的句子,如creative,originative,innovative) or good ideas.    

           Of course, choosing an intelligent person to be a friend with(去掉) also has advantages to some extent, for giving(they can give) some sensible advises, or helping(help)one(others) to know more(borden their horison). But if all these factors are complicated(taken in to account), the advantages of humor carry more weight than(overweight) those of intelligence. From what has been discussed above, it is quite safe(sound) now to say: to choose a humorous person is wise action(decision).

我的意见:
1.      框架和观点提炼得不错.但对每个观点的阐述不够,缺乏说服力.应努力将每个观点解释清楚
2.      用词有些简单,应该多用复杂一些的词,因为作文的一大目的是show off your grammar and vocabulary
3.      有意识的套用模板,这点值得肯定,但似乎有的地方用得过于僵硬,应结合具体语境灵活变通.




[ 本帖最后由 anweivv 于 2007-5-19 12:03 编辑 ]

christinapcUID: 2296719

谢谢谢谢～继续钻研中～

我的水平太烂了～还有，我看谁的啊？

lalahUID: 2215160

原帖由 anweivv 于 2007-5-19 07:18 发表
我觉得我们的小组提交情况有一些混乱,原来说发在大帖里,可又没有执行,口语作业的上传也没有人解释.希望组长能够将这些基本的规则和要求说清楚,大家严格遵守,这样不是方便了所有人吗?

谢谢anweivv的建议，我自问检讨一下~~~

的确，小组的运行有点乱，在 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-667220-1-1.html中，再分了小组
lalah--sick--christinapc ，  qin_daisy--terrykid--sushi83，  girljoan--anweivv--hustgk
每三人相互修改，由时间的话，可以帮忙改其他小组的作业。
口语的话，大家打包（压缩）传上去。

另外，真的不好意思，近期忙了点，我建议sick担任组长吧。
口语各个小组发到邮箱吧，小组自行联系。
另外，有问题的话，发专门的讨论贴相互探讨吧。
下周开始由sick布置作业，她任组长~~~
对不住大家，实在忙了点。。。没能好好安排互助小组活动。。。
希望我们的小组能坚持到底，加油吧！！



[ 本帖最后由 lalah 于 2007-5-20 23:28 编辑 ]

lalahUID: 2215160

sick的作文~~~

The most people have many kinds of friends. Some are intelligent, while some have a good sense of humor. A lot of people may make friends with people who have a good sense of humor, because they can bring humor for (to) them and make them to删 enjoy the life better. However, I think I will make friends with people who are intelligent better than those who have a better sense of humor.

The important thing people should know is that we survive successful（副词）in the world is only because of删we have intelligence. Intelligence always plays a vital role in our modern society, because every people must rely on it to gain money, and then exchange to get food, clothing and everything that they need or want. And if you live with a lame person you will learn to limp. In the same way, if you have many friends with intelligent, you also could be more intelligent. The example is that one of my best friends who initially is not good at English has successfully got the pass (entrance) to study at Beijing University. At the first semester of high school, his English is not well. However, the situation is changed at next semester, because he has made friends with his classmate who is clever (skilled) at English, and they usually talked with each other in English. Ultimately he achieved a very good mark of English at the end of his high school.

We make friends with people who are intelligent does not represent that we should give up the friends who have a good sense of humor. Because many intelligent people are also humor such as Mark Twain, and we also need the humorous friends. They usually make you laugh and happy. When you faced(face) with a difficulty problem (两者重复) or unsatisfactory things, they often could encourage you by the humor language. Then you could have more confidence to deal with the problems.

All in all, friends are important to everyone. It is better to make friends with intelligent people than humorous people. But it does not mean that we do not need the friends who are humor. They all could help us to treat with the problems and enjoy our life better.

文中观点是要交intelligent friends的，可是文中并没有提到为什么不交humorous people, 没有突出比较，（交友是通过比较得出来的，更愿意交intelligent friends）。

[ 本帖最后由 lalah 于 2007-5-20 23:07 编辑 ]

lalahUID: 2215160

christinapc的作文~~~

Friends can influence each other in various ways. Therefore, choosing a friend is much more important decision删than more(what) people think. Some people hold the opinion that intelligence is superior to a good sense of humor, as a character of friends. Others, however, contradict(ly) intelligence. Personally, I would prefer making friends with humorous people, because I think a sense of humor has more advantage(s).
There are numerous reasons why I choose humorous people, and I would here explain a few of the most important ones. The main reason is that the humorist can always bring me delight. It can be given a concrete example one of my best friends, who has a very good sense of humor, always tell me some funny jokes. I never felt sad or boiling with him.(例子最好具体点)

Another reason why I advocate the attitude of making friends with humorous person is that the sense of humor always comes with the optimistic attitude to life. The humorous person is able to make fun and find pleasure from events, even sad things, which make himself and the person around him feel hopeful about the future. （最好写下你的感受吧，比如你也受感染，也从中学会了怎样快乐）


One very strong argument for choosing a humor person to be friend is that one could get some inspiration from humorist. For instance, when communicating with a person with a good sense of humor, one could feel relax and pleasure; therefore, his thought would be refreshed, and get something new or good ideas.

Of course, choosing an intelligent person to be a friend with also has advantages to some extent, for giving some sensible advises, or helping one to know more. But if all these factors are complicated, the advantages of humor carry more weight than those of intelligence. From what has been discussed above, it is quite safe now to say: to choose a humorous person is wise action.

结构挺好的~
要是能提下intelligent,可能会更好点的，语言也挺顺的~~~
加油！！！