Issue47 【07-10G Superstar大帖】第三次作文 by Laura

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Issue 47
TOPIC: "Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."

提纲：1过分重视情感会使我们不好的本性战胜理智。
         2不重视理智会产生犯罪事件。
         3但过分重视理智，忽略情感，也会产生消极的方面。
         4最后总结，情感和理智都很重要，但是仍应该更重视理智。
WORD:406




The author asserts that society shouldplace more emphasis on intellect. As for me, intellect and emotions are bothcrucial factors to enable a stable society, on balance I agree that societyshould place more emphasis on the intellect.


On the one hand, over-emphasizing emotionsat the expense of intellect can do harm to our society. The television showscater to our instincts, such as envy, wrath, sloth, vanity and lust. So oursenses of fortitude, temperance, prudence, justice, faith and charity, all ofwhich result from intellect will give way to our instincts which most showscater to.


In addition, de-emphasizing intellect canbring dangerous consequences for any nations. The incidence of crimes isincreasing ,even the rate of campus crimes is also rising .And scientificstatistics shows that about 68% of the most serious crimes are originated byburst of emotions. An extreme example is Ma Jiajue, the yunnanuniversity  student in China whomurdered three of his roommates, and he killed them only because a smallquarrel in playing cards. If he spent more time with reason,, perhaps such kindof tragedy would be prevented. Moreover, over-emphasizing on emotions at theexpose of intellect may give rise to war. Consequently, reason and betterjudgment result from intellect can help reduce humanity's most horrificincidences.


On the other hand, undue emphasis onintellect can bring negative consequences. Over-emphasis on intellect ratherthan healthy feelings may result in depression, or even be detrimental toindividuals as well as society. More and more children killed themselves whenthey face the pressure which they cannot endure. And the positive emotions, suchas optimism and compassion, will benefic people and the society. Such thesepositive feelings should be energetically encouraged. Moreover, some artistsneed strong feelings to convey their hate or happiness on their arts. However,these art students must learn theories and cognitive skills which result fromintellect, whether they learn singing, drawing or dancing.


To sum up, a society could not advancewithout either intellect or emotions. Intellect can curb our basic badinstincts and quell humanity's horrific incidences. At the same time, Over-emphasison intellect will result in depression. In order to hold this positive growth, abalance must exist between intellect and emotions. Moreover, intellect might beof more significance for the society, which would make people more rational andmake the society more stable, therefore I agree that the author is basicallycorrect.

[ 本帖最后由 laura001 于 2007-5-21 00:54 编辑 ]

speaklessUID: 2205899

字数MS少了点,感觉像TOEFL作文..

DemoUID: 2331967

先给Laura mm加油~~
看了几篇觉得mm文章字数普遍很少
其实刚开始不用限时的
先把思路理好写出感觉再说

PS LS已经开始iBT作文了? @@

最後の使徒UID: 2257608

TOEFL作文我也写600字以上的 :rolleyes:

speaklessUID: 2205899

TO LS 的LS :我以前考过TOEFL...以前大概就写350字样子,呵呵
TO LS        :哈哈,这次IBT,我也要写600字,现在是有打字的速度了:)

huaxinluoboUID: 2326780

IBt 有必要写那么多？

laura001UID: 2295927

首先，先感谢大家对我的支持。:loveliness:

呵呵。字数是少了点，回去面壁思过了，文章也修改过再贴上去，欢迎大家狂拍~~:handshake

偶是G和T一起考的，现在还没有开始准备IBT。lastangel  当时也是一起准备的吗？都怎么合理分配GT的时间的，能说说么？:)

[ 本帖最后由 laura001 于 2007-5-21 01:01 编辑 ]

laura001UID: 2295927

字数要多少呢？新东方老师不是说400左右就够了？

speaklessUID: 2205899

ISSUE 500 ARGU 400

huaxinluoboUID: 2326780

The author asserts that society should place more emphasis on intellect. As for me, intellect and emotions[emotion] are both crucial factors to enable[in enabling ] a stable society, on balance[前面没提矛盾的话就不用balance吧] I agree that societyshould place more emphasis on the intellect.

On [the] one hand, over-emphasizing emotions at the expense of intellect can do harm to our society. The television showscater to our instincts, such as envy, wrath, sloth, vanity and lust. So oursenses of fortitude, temperance, prudence, justice, faith and charity, all of which result from intellect will give way to our instincts which most shows cater to.[这段的前面应该提一下tmotion的好处，再转折]

In addition, de-emphasizing intellect can bring dangerous consequences for any nations. The incidence of crimes is increasing ,even the rate of campus crimes is also rising .And scientific statistics shows that about 68% of the most serious crimes are originated by burst of emotions. An extreme example is Ma Jiajue, [名字没必要提，用 a student 代替就行]the yunnanuniversity  student in China whomurdered three of his roommates, [and he killed them] only because a small quarrel in[when] playing cards. If he spent more time with reason,, perhaps such kindof tragedy would be prevented. Moreover, over-emphasizing on emotions at theexpose of intellect may give rise to war.[这句放在上面一段或许更好] Consequently, reason and better judgment result from intellect can help reduce humanity's most horrific incidences.[这句放在例子前面]  

On the other hand,[这个是在对应地一段，和论证的关系不一致阿] undue emphasis onintellect can bring negative consequences. Over-emphasis on intellect ratherthan healthy feelings may result in depression, or even be detrimental to individuals as well as society. More and more children killed themselves when they face the pressure which they cannot endure. And the positive emotions, suchas optimism and compassion, will benefic people and the society. Such thesepositive feelings should be energetically encouraged. Moreover, some artists need strong feelings to convey their hate or happiness on their arts. However,these art students must learn theories and cognitive skills which result fromintellect, whether they learn singing, drawing or dancing. [其实马家爵的例子放在这段更好，你这段一定要始终围绕negative 写]

To sum up, a society could not advancewithout either intellect or emotions. Intellect can curb our basic badinstincts and quell humanity's horrific incidences. At the same time, Over-emphasison intellect will result in depression. In order to hold this positive growth, abalance must exist between intellect and emotions. Moreover, intellect might beof more significance for the society, which would make people more rational andmake the society more stable, therefore I agree that the author is basicallycorrect.
虽然字不多，但很流畅，意思也表达的很明白。 只是我对提纲中的思路有点异议，个人的意见是这样写：
1 应该重视理智 ， 正面
2 应该重视理智，  反面
3 过分重视有坏处，
4 感情有作用
:)