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During a person's whole life, the education he/she received plays an important role in shaping his/her character and personality. Therefore, there are many discussions about the effective method of education. When focusing on whether education should be designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student, I am inclined to support the idea that considering individual needs and interests to a certain degree will contribute (to) the effect of education.
As is known to everyone, different people have different mode of thinking. Some students may be genius at(in) born, whereas others may be somehow slow in comprehension. In that case, the indistinctive education will be unjust to both of these students. On one hand, the genius students sometimes will find it a waste of time in repeating the similar questions(questions?是不是learning啊) and practices and hoping to learn more, while the majority feels（feel） the pace fits them well. On the other hand, some students who cannot keep (up with) the teaching pace will be frustrated or depressed. Consequently, education without differences is unjust, which ignores the unique of students. 这一段证明的我感觉还是很合理的，分论点也能够很好地支持主观点。我怎么就没想到用天才与常人来比较体现区别性教育的重要呢。呵呵，吸取经验。 It will be of great benefit to adopt the idea of specifically designed education. First,（在后面没找到其它的方面呀） it will help the students who have special interest in a particular area to achieve a better understanding of this area. As an English saying goes, "interest is the best teacher for everyone ". One of my classmates in high school is a good example to prove this. She loved painting and almost devoted all her time in it, whereas almost failed in every science examination and could hardly understand the way of logical thinking. She and her parents felt that continuing the present education would be helpless to her future. With careful consideration they decided to transfer to an art school, where she could learn more about painting. I heard that she had achieved a lot in art and had won an international praise the other day. If she stays in the former high school, she would be very frustrated and could hardly be as successful as today.
Consequently, education with the consideration of students’ interest can be more effective than the traditional way.（是不是应该给traditional way加个定语从句之类的，定义一下，感觉是突然冒出来一个以前没提过的比较） With the multiple choices of learning pattern, students can design their study plan better and learn more about where（which） their interests lie（in）.
似乎后来就把needs丢了，秋千是不是原来想一方面提interests一方面提needs呀。还有一个问题，我也想问一下，interest这个词既可以单也可以复，文中给的复就得用复吗？昨天看到hejielady帮我改的，有一个好像就是这个问题。 However, since our education resource is limit, it is impossible and unrealistic to meet every student’s need（s）. In the meanwhile, the majority of students who do not have a special interest in an area can take the traditional education, which can also give them adequate knowledge and help them succeed. 这段感觉处理的不太妥当，既然中心论点是对差异教育的赞同，这段让步就做地太偏向否定自己的观点了。而且后面马上就是总结段了，是不是应该再让步之后再转一下回到自己的观点，这样显得过渡能自然些。
In sum, education designed for individual’s interest and meet（？interests and needs） can be more effective than the traditional way, providing the(删) students a chance to learn more about their interests.
整体来看，前面写的不错，后面两段感觉处理的不是太好，不过可以理解，我当时写的时候也是一样感觉写一写就没词了，思维呈现混乱状态。语言上应该没啥太大问题（我感觉哦，主要我语言太差，对语言似乎没什么话语权），加上以后的练习，如果能在整体构思上，有进步，应该会不错的
总结一下你的提纲
1. 区别教育的必要性（天才和常人对比，我感觉不错）
2. 区别教育的好处（其实例子还是合理的证明了兴趣的重要影响，只是needs没能提到，其实秋千,如果能加上needs的影响，字数上还可以加一些么，呵呵）
3. 让步，说明区别教育的不可实现性，（似乎转地太厉害）
好了，我能改的就只有这么多了，尽力而为而已，希望对你能有些帮助。
第一次写，感受最大的就是不知道怎么破题，我周5下午想了一下，列了个提纲，结果写的时候发现似乎都在从一个方面论证，全部重新列提纲，可是还是想不出论点，结果就硬拼出了那篇issue，可能你看的时候也能感觉到，文章有些分家,而且论点不明确。不知道怎么解决，多看看别人的文章体会一下不同的思维方式就会好些吗？不知道，对这方面你有什么想法吗。
其次就是例子（语言我就不提了，一直是我的一大难点），这回是教育还好说，跟我们比较近，要是别的什么哲学的咋办呢。我想恐怕得去搜集一下了。
[ 本帖最后由 amyzhao 于 2007-6-3 09:25 编辑 ] | 
发表于 2007-6-2 00:46:50
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