Issue97【METTLE小组】第二次作业 by happyhappypig

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Issue97
"It is unfortunate but true that political decisions and activities affect all aspects of people's lives."

From the antediluvian’s naked life to the various sorts of delicate clothes, from the animal exchange for food to the prosperous and competitive merchandise business, our life have changed enormously with increasing population, improving techniques, dabbling into completely new specialize. Correspondingly, our duties changed and more and more functionalized departments are emerging, with the government giving out political decisions to direct our everyday life.

As a member of the society, just like a drop of water out of the ocean, our daily life is extensively affected by the political decisions. From a pessimist’s view, less freedom is left for us: we have to relocate our monthly income with increasing tax, we considered to investigate our money into the stock market due to the low bank interest rate and prosper market, or our daily activities may be restricted to in certain ways. Optimistically, we could buy house at a more reasonable price due to the regulation of the government, we might travel more often with longer holidays and we might get more access to unfamiliar things from abroad or go abroad easily with particular opening policies. No matter what, our life is tight up with the political decisions. Each person is like a spot on the screen, together with all other people, we form a whole picture with the political activities like the remote controller, which doesn’t rearrange our position directly but still able to change the pictures on the screen upon necessity.

However, occasionally, we have our private life sticking to our own belief, separated from the outside world. No matter what fashion the society is fanning in, the religion people would still holding their credence. However attractive the business world are, the scientists would still devote their energy discovering the basic principles govern the universe. No matter what the political decisions are, children still going to schools, workers still going to the factories and our life is like the water surface of a lake, after several ripples, it come back to tranquil again. Therefore, to some extend, political decision would have little effect.

Admittedly, the function of the government is to regulate the society from a thorough view to achieve its climax and proper political decisions would make our life easier and more enjoyable. As an old saying goes, only when all the people contribute, can we get the highest pyre. With limited time and resources, we may not be able to predict the particular trends of some industry ourselves. Without knowing its historical development, we cannot understand comprehensively the significance of certain events. Without the governments’ input or promotion, many innovate discoveries may not be able to spread widely or to make it functional properly. In these situations, the political decisions play a pivotal role as information processes machines and suggest feasible directions.

In summary, with the reciprocating ideas between people and the government, our life would various and improves greatly upon big political activities, still we have room for individual development ourselves. With the wise political decisions, our life would become more comfortable.

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我把A写完来看看,虽然这周不是我们互改了,不过LZ的文章挺有意思的

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From the antediluvian’s naked life to the various sorts of delicate clothes, from the animal exchange for food to the prosperous and competitive merchandise business, our life have changed enormously with increasing population, improving techniques, dabbling into completely new specializespecialize 好像没有名词意思吧. Correspondingly, our duties changed and more and more functionalized departments are emerging, with the government giving out political decisions to directdirect能这样用，以前没见过 our everyday life.
As a member of the society, just like a drop of water out of the ocean, our daily life is extensively affected by the political decisions. From a pessimist’s view, less freedom is left for us: we have to relocate our monthly income with increasing tax, we considered to investigate our money into the stock market due to the low bank interest rate and prosperprosperous market, or our daily activities may be restricted to in certain ways. Optimistically, we could buy house at a more reasonable price due to the regulation of the government, we might travel more often with longer holidays and we might get more access to unfamiliar things from abroad or go abroad easily with particular opening policies. No matter what, our life is tight up with the political decisions. Each person is like a spot on the screen, together with all other people, we form a whole picture with the political activities like the remote controller, which doesn’t rearrange our position directly but still able to没有be啊，就用can啦 change the pictures on the screen upon necessity.
However, occasionally, we have our private life sticking to our own belief, separated from the outside world. No matter what fashion the society is fanning in, the religion people would still holding their credence. However attractive the business world are, the scientists would still devote their energy discovering the basic principles govern the universe. No matter what the political decisions are, children still going to schools, workers still going to the factories这是独立主格结构吗？那怎么后面又有and,不懂 and our life is like也可用resemble the water surface of a lake, after several ripples, it comes back to the state oftranquil again. Therefore, to some extend, political decisions would have little effect.
Admittedly, the function of the government is to regulate the society from a thorough view to achieve its climax and proper political decisions would make our life easier and more enjoyable. As an old saying goes, only when all the people contribute, can we get the highest pyre. With limited time and resources, we may not be able to predict the particular trends of some industry ourselves. Without knowing its historical development, we cannot understand comprehensively the significance of certain events. Without the governments’ input or promotion, many innovate discoveries may not be able to spread widely or to make it function删去al properly. In these situations, the political decisions play a pivotal role as information processes machines and suggest feasible directions.
In summary, with the reciprocating ideas between people and the government, our life would various and improves greatly upon biglarge-scale political activities, still we have room for individual development ourselvesourselves可以不要吧. With the wise political decisions, our life would become more comfortable.

1， 从内容和思想上看：开头比较新颖，第二段通过多角度类比举例论证了人们的生活确实受到了政治的影响。第三段指出人的belief是独立的，不受政治影响。第四段指出政治所支配的政府给人们带来profit. 在行文上蛮有特点的，排比类比都用的不错。但就是没有看出第二段和第四段TS的区别，要是再明确一些就好了。
2， 从语言上看，就不用多说了，相当丰富，太有才了，实为佩服，在这一点上真是想想LZ讨教一下。美中不足的是有些词的词性好像把握的不是很好。

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下下来了，中午时间不多，等下晚上花几个小时仔细来看下，感觉这样的文章要精读才可以，等精读好了，再把想法意见都发上来！