Issue83【victor小组】第9次作业 by gyyx

gyyxUID: 2290150

I83: "Government should preserve publicly owned wilderness areas in their natural state, even though these areas are often extremely remote and thus accessible to only a few people."
2007-6-16
提纲：position: agree
1)      For the sake of dominion, a government should preserve any publicly own filed in their state, no matter it is wilderness or not.
2)      In view of environment, it is necessary to protect these natural areas, in order to preserve some animals and plants, which are in imminent danger.
3)      For the sake of economic development, preserving the wilderness areas will benefit us in the end, as these wilderness areas are often rich in mine.

正文：
In the era of urbanization and modernization leading to economic development and society advancement, more and more resource damaged, less and less wildness remains. As so many facts have been showed to us, preserving wildness areas is indispensable responsibility to the government, the democratic organization realized people’s views.

For the sake of dominion, a government should preserve any publicly own filed in their state, no matter it is wilderness or not.
Even wildness areas, they are parts of our country, and should never be alienated from other land of our state, so as to not be aggressed by other country, especially neighbor country, government must protect these areas. Although there areas are accessible to only a few people, these people may have treat with the neighbor country’s people, which called boundary treat. This treat frequently result in some issues, to protect our national people, government should preserve these wildness areas in our natural state.

In view of environment, it is necessary to protect these natural areas, in order to preserve some animals and plants, especially those in imminent danger. Certainly no one can argue that many, and perhaps most, extinct species become extinct naturally rather than due to human interference. One and the most essential reason is obviously that the environment these species depending on have been destroyed by human beings. As it stands, government should preserve these areas due to their ecological values. In such natural-state areas, plants and animals could live freely without being afraid of being killed. The nature has its own ability to keep balance, without human being's disturb, the chain of creatures will keep well-balance itself. Also, it is hopeful that endangered species could get protect to keep them from extinguishing. Government of Australia has already preserved several wildness areas in which a large number of rare-numbered species found their paradise. Government can introduce some proper species in danger to these wildness areas rather than protecting them in the zoos. Additionally, these areas have a significant value to researches of biology and ecology, as researchers are likely to continuously seek for the answers of the origination and evolution of creatures. Also it will reserve a vast gift to our descendants who otherwise could never know many animals and plants if we continue to leave these areas out of effective management.

For the sake of economic development, preserving the wilderness areas will benefit us in the end, as these wilderness areas are often rich in resource, especially some exiguous mine. Although it is hard to see the benefit of this preservation now, but for a long run, the protection is deserved on account for that many countries are suffering from resource crisis, and these areas rich in mine can serve the government as a repertory, which is especially important now. We can take a look at some international issues just like East Sea problem between China and Japan, which the focus is on the oil belongingness. So without the management of government, these areas may be destroyed by natural or human’s interference, even cause a international issues.
To conclude, since the preservation of the wildness areas will benefit us and our offspring in economic, resource and other angles, government should preserve these areas, although these areas are often extremely remote and accessible to only a few people.  

c0053UID: 2285120

In the era of urbanization and modernization leading to economic development and society advancement, more and more resource damaged（damages）, less and less wildness remains. As so many facts have been showed to us, preserving wildness areas is indispensable responsibility to(of) the government, and the democratic organizationsrealize people’s views.
For the sake of dominion, a government should preserve any publicly own filed(field) in their state, no matter it is wilderness or not.(这里连成一段)Even wildness areas（Even if some areas are wilderness）, they are parts of our country, and should never be alienated from other land of our state, so as not to be aggressed by other country(用复数是否好些？), especially neighbor country, government must protect these areas. Although there（these） areas are accessible to only a few people, these people may have treat with the neighbor country’s people, which called boundary treat. This treat frequently result in some issues. To protect our national people, government should preserve these wildness areas in our(their) natural state. In view of environment, it is necessary to protect these natural areas in order to preserve some animals and plants, especially those in imminent danger. Certainly no one can argue that many, and perhaps most, extinct species become extinct naturally rather than due to human interference. One and the most essential reason is obviously that the environment these species depending(depend) on have been destroyed by human beings. As it stands, government should preserve these areas due to their ecological values. In such natural-state areas, plants and animals could live freely without being afraid of being killed. The nature has its own ability to keep balance, without human being's disturb（disturbance）, the chain of creatures will keep well-balance（well-balanced） itself. Also, it is hopeful that endangered species could get protect to keep them from extinguishing. Government of Australia has already preserved several wildness areas in which a large number of rare-numbered species found their paradise. Government can introduce some proper species in danger to these wildness areas rather than protecting them in the zoos. Additionally, these areas have a significant value to researches of biology and ecology, as researchers are likely to continuously seek for the answers of the origination and evolution of creatures. Also it will reserve a vast gift（a vast gift?） to our descendants who otherwise could never know many animals and plants if we continue to leave these areas out of effective management.For the sake of economic development, preserving the wilderness areas will benefit us in the end, as these wilderness areas are often rich in resources, especially some exiguous mine. Although it is hard to see the benefit of this preservation now, but for a (in the) long run, the protection is deserved on account for that many countries are suffering from resource crisis, and these areas rich in mine can serve the government as a repertory, which is (are) especially important now. We can take a look at some international issues just like East China Sea problem between China and Japan, the focus of which is on the oil belongingness. So without the management of government, these areas may be destroyed by natural or human’s interference, even cause an international issue.To conclude, since the preservation of the wildness areas will benefit us and our offspring in economic, resource and other angles, government should preserve these areas, although(even) these areas are often extremely remote and accessible to only a few people.  
点评：
1.       文章的内容比较充实，最起码从字数上反应出了这一点，不错。然而第一个分论点讲到了领土主权的原因，窃以为不是很切题。
2.       在论证方面，理论上的说理似乎不够雄辩，而事例证明不够充分，应多一些事实论据。
3.       文章中语法错误较多，不知道是不是限时的原因，还是要注意一下
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