Argument237【SWEETBOX小组】第七次作业 by 雅典娜的宠

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"According to a government report, last year the city of Dillton reduced its corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, it began offering relocation grants and favorable rates on city utilities to any company that would relocate to Dillton. Within 18 months, two manufacturing companies moved to Dillton, where they employ a total of 300 people. Therefore, the fastest way for Beauville to stimulate economic development and hence reduce unemployment is to provide tax incentives and other financial inducements that encourage private companies to relocate here."


In this article,the author suggests of  providing tax incentives and  
other financial inducements to encourage private companies to  
relocate in Beauvile .And he cites the successful experience of  
Dillton to support his viewpoint.However,this article contains  
several critical logical flaws that make it unconvincing.
First of all ,the author doesn't provide any relationship between  
relocation of two companies and steps taken in Dillton.The companies  
may  relocate there not due to a lower tax, relocation grants ,etc, but  
due to other advantages of Dillton.It is entirely possible that  
Dillton locates near the bank of a river or an important railway  
station. Thus manufactures can be transported to other places easily  
and fast with cheaper fees. It is also possible that the level of wage  
in Dillton are lower, companies can get more profits without  
increasing price of their products .More experienced engineers and  
workers  are likely to be in Dillton as well.Engineers can have new  
ideas and design new products with new technology and cheaper  
materials which may be popular among consumers .Meanwhile,workers can  
transform the new design into realization in a short period. So  
companies can get a larger market and high popularity among  
consumers, also more income.Without ruling out these possibilities, the  
author cannot convince me on his suggestion.
Moreover,even if the steps Dillton took contribute to its success ,the  
author falsely makes the conclusion that Beauvile,if take the same  
measures, will get the same results.This not always the case,for the  
author overlooks the possible difference between two cities .Dillton  
may be developing ,and it chooses industry as the main way.So it  
tries its best to attract more companies. While Beavile is already  
developed and residents there just want to lead a peaceful life not  
caring much about their incomes.Or  perhaps Beavile lay much emphasis  
on education or commerce. They don't want industry to destroy its  
environment and consume its natural resources. Neglecting these  
possible backgrounds,the author's viewpoint is not credible.
Further, the author forget considering other measures which may  
stimulate economic development and  reduce unemployment in  
Beauvile. Traveling industry may be one.Beauville can make the city  
cleaner and more beautiful, increase traveling sites,and improve  
quality of hotels and restaurant .More travelers may  come , so  
traveling industry will  increase employment(people are employed to  
serve) and stimulate economy. Unlike manufacturing industry, it  
doesn't require much resource and makes little pollution,which means  
it may  bring profits for a longer period.Thus the author shouldn't  
insist on his viewpoint if he hasn't considered other possible ways.
In final analysis, this argument is logically flawed in several  
respects that make it untenable .To bolster his suggestion, the author  
should find out reasons hidden behind Dillton's success and provide  
facts that these reasons  also suits Beauville.He should consider  
other possible ways to stimulate economy as well.

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In this article,the author suggests of  providing tax incentives and  
other financial inducements to encourage private companies to  
relocate in Beauvile .And he cites the successful experience of  
Dillton to support his viewpoint.However,this article contains  
several critical logical flaws that make it unconvincing.

First of all ,the author doesn't provide any relationship between  
relocation of two companies and steps taken in Dillton.The companies  
may  relocate there not due to a lower tax, relocation grants ,etc, but  
due to other advantages of Dillton.It is entirely possible that  
Dillton locates near the bank of a river or an important railway  
station. Thus manufactures can be transported to other places easily  
and fast with cheaper fees. It is also possible that the level of wage  
in Dillton are lower, companies can get more profits without  
increasing price of their products .More experienced engineers and  
workers  are likely to be in Dillton as well.Engineers can have new  
ideas and design new products with new technology and cheaper  
materials which may be popular among consumers .Meanwhile,workers can  
transform the new design into realization in a short period. So  
companies can get a larger market and high popularity among  
consumers, also more income.Without ruling out these possibilities, the  
author cannot convince me on his suggestion.论述engineers and workers的时候我觉得
还是提下这是使这两个公司做决定的原因.

Moreover,even if the steps Dillton took contribute to its success ,the  
author falsely makes the conclusion that Beauvile,if take the same  
measures, will get the same results.This not always the case,for the  
author overlooks the possible difference between two cities .Dillton  
may be developing ,and it chooses industry as the main way.So it  
tries its best to attract more companies. While Beavile is already  
developed and residents there just want to lead a peaceful life not  
caring much about their incomes.Or  perhaps Beavile lay much emphasis  
on education or commerce. They don't want industry to destroy its  
environment and consume its natural resources. Neglecting these  
possible backgrounds,the author's viewpoint is not credible.

Further, the author forget considering 这里要用forget to do other measures which may  
stimulate economic development and  reduce unemployment in  
Beauvile. Traveling industry may be one.Beauville can make the city  
cleaner and more beautiful, increase traveling sites,and improve  
quality of hotels and restaurant .More travelers may  come , so  
traveling industry will  increase employment(people are employed to  
serve) and stimulate economy. Unlike manufacturing industry, it  
doesn't require much resource and makes little pollution,which means  
it may  bring profits for a longer period.Thus the author shouldn't  
insist on his viewpoint if he hasn't considered other possible ways.

In final analysis, this argument is logically flawed in several  
respects that make it untenable .To bolster his suggestion, the author  
should find out reasons hidden behind Dillton's success and provide  
facts that these reasons  also suits Beauville.He should consider  
other possible ways to stimulate economy as well.

文章中归中矩, 应该说是很不错的,我觉得可能在细节上还可以再提高点.还有文章的格式让人看起来很费劲.