ISSUE13 [METTLE互助小组第六次作业] by hejielady

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13"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

As the most useful tool of communication and the symbol of a culture's identity, language has always been playing an important role in human's history. Therefore, whatever language is, the world- wide used one or the world’s lesser-known one, language deserves the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent them from being extinct. According to Darwinian argument, nevertheless, language is not exempt from the process of so-call "natural selection", we should do our best to absorb what is best while preserving the hardly exist language.

The profound significance language brings is beyond our imagination, for it is part and parcel of a person's identification and a nation's unification. Reading the Bible, we know that human race once used the uniformed language when they lived in one tribe, and by the time the God enabled them various languages, those people scattered to different tribes. Until now, scanning over human's history and culture, it is known that language differs from country to country, and even many languages are using in one country. Wherever people come from, we can almost easily distinguish their nationality by the language they talks as long as we know that language. Even though the case of many languages are using in one country, the fact that there is always an official language in each nation leaves us no denying that the language presents a nation's unification. Knowing that China is consists of 56 nations, and each of them enjoys a particular language, we Chinese still proud of our country's highly unification, for 56 nations are unified by the official language---Peking language. For this point, the governments of each nation should spare no efforts to preserve their language.

In addition, languages that could convey distinct ideas and unique culture should be protected. For instance, insightful ideas and colorful culture of the Complete Fables have been well preserved and passed down through which the indigenous language of Ancient Greece have been talked. If not so, how many these and other ideas or culture would be disappeared? Languages to society are that of thoughts to human, both of which are essential to keep the society progressing. If some particular languages disappeared, the thoughts and benefits of which can be transited by these languages would be lost as well.

On the other hand, as 'the survival of the fittest' occurs in all areas of our life, it is certain that many lesser-known languages would be eliminated. In the highly developed technique and information society, means of communication varied and some Internet language, mobile phone language and so forth pouring out. In the world of Internet, if a Chinese talks in archaism, even his compatriot can hardly understanding him, not to mention the foreigners. Some useless lesser-known languages are destined to distinct. Under this circumstance, spending large amount of money on preserving these languages sometimes is less significance than on tackling some more pressing social issues, such as poverty, disease, starve and so on. Therefore, when it comes to whether this language deserves to be carefully protected, the certain authority should take a carefully consideration.

In sum, by preserving some specific languages which are worth for historical and cultural research, one's sense of pride and self-worth would be enhanced, and some of cultural essence and thoughts would be maintained. Before making any decisions whether to do their every effort to preserve them, the government nevertheless should first weigh the benefits and drawbacks. In the final analysis, government should always make the most apt choice of which would bring the greatest benefits to its people.

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ISSUE13 METTLE互助小组第六次作业 by hejielady
13"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

As the most useful tool of communication and the symbol of a culture's identity, language has always been playing an important role in human's history. Therefore, whatever language is, the world- wide used one or the world’s lesser-known one, language deserves the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent them from being extinct这句话有问题. According to Darwinian argument, nevertheless, language is not exempt from the process of so-call "natural selection", we should do our best to absorb what is best while preserving the hardly exist language.这里不是很明白，是要取一种语言的精华呢，还是要保留最好的一种语言，如果是前者，就和上文提到的不论说的人多还是少，语言都应该被保留的观点相悖了
开头很赞，语言流畅，结构也紧凑，而且提出的进化观点也很新颖

The profound significance language brings is beyond our imagination, for it is part and parcel of a person's identification and a nation's unification. Reading the Bible, we know that human race once used the uniformed 改uniformlanguage when they lived in one tribe, and by the time the God enabled them various languages, those people scattered to different tribes这个圣经的例子在这里有什么作用呢，以前统一也不能证明现在，而且圣经也不是真的，这个例子缺乏说服性. Until now, scanning over human's history and culture, it is known that language differs from country to country, and even many languages are using in one country. Wherever people come from, we can almost easily distinguish their nationality by the language they talks as long as we know that language. Even though the case of many languages are using in one country, the fact that there is always an official language in each nation leaves us no denying that the language presents a nation's unification. Knowing that China is consists of 56 nations, and each of them enjoys a particular language, we Chinese still proud of our country's highly unification, for 56 nations are unified by the official language---Peking language普通话和北京话还是不一样的，用mandarin好一些 . For this point, the governments of each nation should spare no efforts to preserve their language.
这段关于个人定位和国家统一的论述不错，层层递进

In addition, languages that could convey distinct ideas and unique culture should be protected. 主题句最好在稍微展开下For instance, insightful ideas and colorful culture of the Complete Fables have been well preserved and passed down through which the indigenous language of Ancient Greece have been talked. If not so, how many these and other ideas or culture would be disappeared? Languages to society are that of thoughts to human, both of which are essential to keep the society progressing好句子. If some particular languages disappeared, the thoughts and benefits of which can be transited by these languages would be lost as well.
这段也不错



On the other hand, as 'the survival of the fittest' occurs in all areas of our life, it is certain that many lesser-known languages would be eliminated. In the highly developed technique and information society, means of communication varied and some Internet language, mobile phone language and so forth pouring out缺谓语. In the world of Internet, if a Chinese talks in archaism, even his compatriot can hardly understanding him, not to mention the foreigners. Some useless lesser-known languages are destined to distinct.这就是说古文是没用的，和前段传递文化传统的观点相悖 Under this circumstance, spending large amount of money on preserving these languages sometimes is less significance than on tackling some more pressing social issues, such as poverty, disease, starve and so on. Therefore, when it comes to whether this language deserves to be carefully protected, the certain authority should take a carefully consideration.
首先优胜劣汰的过程没有论述，优在哪里，劣在哪里也消失得原因也最好说明，
其次题目中说的是 the languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people spoke them 没点到正在消失，也没点到使用者越来越少的动态过程
古文的例子最好换一个，不典型，日常生活中早就不用了，不是正在消失
回来读，发现其实这段有两个分论点，语言优胜劣汰，政府权衡利弊考虑要不要保护


In sum, by preserving some specific languages which are worth for historical and cultural research, one's sense of pride and self-worth would be enhanced跟国家统一和个人定义没搭好关系, and some of cultural essence and thoughts would be maintained. Before making any decisions whether to do their every effort to preserve them, the government nevertheless should first weigh the benefits and drawbacks. In the final analysis, government should always make the most apt choice of which would bring the greatest benefits to开头段提出的优胜劣汰这里没有提

LZ的语言感觉有进步，表达流畅，但是个别词组和单词我读着怪怪的，因为也不肯定就没改了
主要就是倒数二段存在较大问题，再仔细斟酌下吧