CRACK 9T小组第3次作业---f_ding

f_dingUID: 2283047

1. writing(Build):
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.


Nowadays, due to the fact that people pay much attention the efficiency, more and more people choose to eat at restaurant in order to save precious time. Considering that in my neighborhood there are only a few restaurants and regarding the interests of consumers, I support the plan that a new restaurant should be built in my neighborhood.

In the first place, thinking of the present situation in the neighborhood that the limited number of restaurants can not meet the demand that an increasing number of people are prone to eat at restaurant, especially at lunch time on weekdays, since eating at restaurants can save much more precious for other useful purposes, a new restaurant is highly desired. It is often the case that at lunch time you walk into several restaurants and just find no seat available! Therefore, to change the situation the plan for building a new restaurant must be a welcome one.

Moreover, in the interests of consumers building a new restaurant makes sense. As we all know, competition results in improvement or disappearance. Adding a new restaurant to the neighborhood makes those already existent ones realize that to maintain their share of consumers, they have to improve the service and offer high-quality food, otherwise they will lose the market and be replaced. It is no doubt that during this market process, consumers are the ones who can benefit most.

Finally, building a new restaurant, a large one in particular, can do much good to the finance of local government. If the newly built restaurant can run in good shape, it will surely gain a volume of wealth and in turn it can financially contribute a lot to the local government in the form of tax.

To conclude, it is wise to build a new restaurant for the interests of people in the neighborhood and the restaurant, if properly managed, will bring about many benefits. I support the plan with enthusiasm.


2. speaking


[ 本帖最后由 f_ding 于 2007-7-21 06:37 编辑 ]

yeren7722UID: 2297829

1.        writing(Build):
It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.


Nowadays, due to the fact that people pay much attention (to) the efficiency, more and more people choose to eat at restaurant in order to save precious time. Considering that in my neighborhood there are only a few restaurants and regarding the interests of consumers, I support the plan that a new restaurant should be built in my neighborhood.

In the first place, thinking of the present situation in the neighborhood that the limited number of restaurants can not meet the demand that an increasing number of people are prone to eat at restaurant, especially at lunch time on weekdays, since eating at restaurants can save much more precious (time) for other useful purposes, a new restaurant is highly desired. It is often the case that at lunch time you walk into several restaurants and just find no seat available! Therefore, to change the situation ,the plan for building a new restaurant must be a welcome one.

Moreover, in the interests of consumers building a new restaurant makes sense. As we all know, competition results in improvement or disappearance. Adding a new restaurant to the neighborhood makes those already existent ones realize that to maintain their share of consumers, they have to improve the service and offer high-quality food, otherwise they will lose the market and be replaced. It is no doubt that during this market process, consumers are the ones who can benefit most.

Finally, building a new restaurant, a large one in particular, can do much good to the finance of local government. If the newly built restaurant can run in good shape, it will surely gain a volume of wealth and in turn it can financially contribute a lot to the local government in the form of tax.

To conclude, it is wise to build a new restaurant for the interests of people in the neighborhood and the restaurant, if properly managed, will bring about many benefits. I support the plan with enthusiasm.

Comments:
1.        总的来说,文章思路清楚,表达流畅,句型变换也比较丰富.
2.        主体部分(2,3,4段)内容略显单薄与抽象,如能加入一些更为具体的例子,文章将增色不少.
3.        结尾段可以再花点心思,写得更漂亮一点.

Speaking:
1.        childhood:表达比较清析,但是语速太慢.导致内容不够丰富.与作文存在的同样的问题是,最好能有具体细节的事情或事情描述,个人觉得ets比较看重这个.
2.        place:相比之下,这个要好很多,内容也丰富很多,语速比较正常,唯一的缺点是发音稍微有点不清楚,如果能改进,就差不多perfect了.
以上都是个人意见,有什么不对的地方请指正,大家多交流才有进步

f_dingUID: 2283047

Many thanks to Yeren's correction

关于口语：
此次口语我做了一下比较，place做了事先准备，而childhood是按照考试要求说的，结果问题很多，正像你说的那样place内容充实些，所以说的快些，导致某些发音不是很准，而childhood因为说的时候，脑子里没有内容所以语速慢， 看来如果事先不准备好，考试时时比较困难的，要开始多准备话题啦，要不然来不及了。

大家加油！
fighting!!

zhanxttUID: 2313376

DDDD

f_dingUID: 2283047

呵呵，洪水冲到这里了