issue150 【mettle小组假期作业一】 by imagic80

imagic80UID: 2342633

150"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."
1．亲身体验与单纯观看不同。
2．对旅游有刺激作用。
3．旅游永远不会过时。

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With the developlment of economy, an increaing number of people are beginning realize that they should give their soul a leisurely holiday. In order to meet this need of people, tourism,which can enable one completely free from daily work and has a different experience in strang places, comes in to being. Although people can now get more information about the places of interest they long to with the help of television and worldwide computer. I’m still firmly convinced that tourism will not become obsolete. On the contrary, it will become more and more popular with the propaganda of televisions or computers.
To begin with, it is entirely different between the colorful experience obtaining from your trips with only beaufiful pictures you view ahead of televisions or computers. Although we try to get more information about a certain place of interest, however, only this information can not instead of a real trip to that place. For example, an American boy, who has a dream of visiting The Great Wall of China, spends much of his spare time on browsing pictures,magazines, webpages relevant to The Great Wall—one of the eight miracal of the world. Can you imagine how happy he is, when someday his dream comes true. With sweet shining on his face, he eventually climb to the old history building. This valuable experience will encourage him to court other goals, because the dream makes believe that once he makes his determination to do something, he will successfully do it sooner or later. Moreover, after the visit of The Great Wall, he becomes familiar with the culture and custom of China, and gets along well with his new Chinese friends who help him a lot in the process of climbing. In fact, apart from making your dream come true when you have a trip to a certain place, there are a myriads of valuble thing along the way you to this place such as friends, which can not be obtained only through watching TV or operating computer.
Furthermore, tourism will become thrive with the help of TV and computer. Common sense tells us that if the local government want to develop their tourism, beside the natural or historical advantages, propaganda through TV and computer is an indispensabel way. Convinced by the importance of propaganda, modern government pay more attention in the using of this tools. And the more information people get about a place of interest, the more strong desire they will have to visit this place. In this sense, the popularity of TV and computer will stimulate the local tourism instead of reducing the interest of tourists over the world.
Finally, tourism will never be out of date as long as human beings’ curiosity and desire still exist. Human beings have the natural curiosity and desire to know the places and peoples which are different from them. And it is commonly accepted that tourism is one of the most effective ways to attain this goal. Moreover, tourism can also enhance the emotion between individuals and their families or friends. So there is an increasing trend to have a trip with ones family or friends to improve the communication between them.[ time up]  For example, a father, who has not be together with his child for a long time due to his work, take his boy or girl to Diseney or other place to have a visit. This trip will make the heart of the father and his child’s stay closer and compensate the sense of guilty of the father.
Taken together, only through a real trip, one can enjoy the real interest of tourism and has a chance to get closer to the nature, and also offer a platform of communication between children and parents, or friends. The rapid development of new technology and science, like TV and computer, can not replace the importance of a real trip.

AndierUID: 2302600

With the developlment of economy, an increaing number of people are beginning realize that they should give their soul a leisurely holiday. In order to meet this need of people, tourism,which can enable one completely free from daily work and has a different experience in strang places, comes in to being. Although people can now get more information about the places of interest they long to with the help of television and worldwide computer. I’m still firmly convinced that tourism will not become obsolete. On the contrary, it will become more and more popular with the propaganda of televisions or computers.



To begin with, it is entirely different between the colorful experience obtaining from your trips with only beaufiful pictures you view ahead of televisions or computers. Although we try to get more information about a certain place of interest, however, only this information can not instead of(instead of 不可以做动词吧同学) a real trip to that place. For example, an American boy, who has a dream of visiting The Great Wall of China, spends much of his spare time on browsing pictures,magazines, webpages relevant to The Great Wall—one of the eight miracal(miracle) of the world. Can you imagine how happy he is, when someday his dream comes true. With sweet shining on his face, he eventually climb to the old history building. This valuable experience will encourage him to court other goals, because the dream makes believe that once he makes his determination to do something, he will successfully do it sooner or later. Moreover, after the visit of The Great Wall, he becomes familiar with the culture and custom of China, and gets along well with his new Chinese friends who help him a lot in the process of climbing. In fact, apart from making your dream come true when you have a trip to a certain place, there are a myriads of valuble thing along the way you to this place such as friends, which can not be obtained only through watching TV or operating computer.

感觉这段应该是核心内容，说电视等媒体在这方面的不足。可是缺少这么一句话：究竟不足在哪里呢？

Furthermore, tourism will become thrive(thrive是个动词) with the help of TV and computer. Common sense tells us that if the local government want to develop their tourism, beside the natural or historical advantages, propaganda through TV and computer is an indispensabel way. Convinced by the importance of propaganda, modern government pay more attention in the using of this tools. And the more information people get about a place of interest, the more strong desire they will have to visit this place. In this sense, the popularity of TV and computer will stimulate the local tourism instead of reducing the interest of tourists over the world.



Finally, tourism will never be out of date as long as human beings’ curiosity and desire still exist. Human beings have the natural curiosity and desire to know the places and peoples which are different from them. And it is commonly accepted that tourism is one of the most effective ways to attain this goal. Moreover, tourism can also enhance the emotion between individuals and their families or friends. So there is an increasing trend to have a trip with ones family or friends to improve the communication between them.[ time up]  For example, a father, who has not be together with his child for a long time due to his work, take his boy or girl to Disney (Disneyland? )or other place to have a visit. This trip will make the heart of the father and his child’s stay closer and compensate the sense of guilty of the father.

像上面这段，人类的好奇为什么不能通过电视以及其他途径解决呢？


Taken together, only through a real trip, one can enjoy the real interest of tourism and has a chance to get closer to the nature, and also offer a platform of communication between children and parents, or friends. The rapid development of new technology and science, like TV and computer, can not replace the importance of a real trip

感觉 lz 思路每篇都很清晰，不过在针对每个分论点的时候可以再具体一点。比如提到的，论证电视媒体的不足，究竟是因为什么。提到一个小孩的例子感觉不够compelling :)

类似的，最后那段可以说明，亲自去体验都会得到什么东西呢，哪些是电视等媒体无法提供的？

这篇我还没写~ 所以意见也不一定合适~ 仅供参考。。。