Issue160 [0710G-summer小组]第四次作业

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TOPIC: ISSUE160 - "The most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little."
WORDS: 728          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 7/21/2007 12:11:38 PM

Syllabus:
1. consistently committed to particular principles and objectives是成为领导的必要条件。
2. Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will compromise国家。
3. 好的领导是善于听取意见的。

I concede with the author on the point that the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives is the first and foremost quality of an effective leader. In addition, a leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shits in popular opinion will accomplish little. However, it does not mean that a leader should do not listen to the public opinions. Actually, a good and effective leader is a good listener.

To begin with, I strongly agree with the author that a effective leader should be consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. These principles and objectives is the orientation that leads a person to his/her ultimate destination. Without a goal, people might be lost in the overwhelming choices, opinions, and suggestions. To illustrate this point, one should look into several professions that require entrenched destination. In the political world, a leader, whether a president or a senator, is surrounded with choices, choices waiting him/her to make a decision that could make the civilian wealthier, healthier, and happier or make them suffer from miserable life. When facing these crucial choices, a leader with a clear goal could mistakenly choose the later. But a leader without a clear goal would only choose the later. In business world, the golden rule is to make as much profit as possible. Such conception requires business leaders, CEO, to discern the optimum choice among the good choices. In 1994, for example, Bill Gates faced a dilemma whether continue to sell DOS, the most popular operating system at that time, or present a revolutionary operation system, Windows 95. Both choices could bring the company with great profits, but the later ensured Microsoft the maximum profit after its present. In the sports world, a leader, captain or star player, should also possess a clear goal, that is play to win. Without this strong determination, a team is easily destroyed since they all count on his/her performance to inspire the rest of the team members. For example, Kobe, L.A. Lakers star player, once scored 60+ in 3 overtimes to win a game. Without the conviction, the team would already have already lost in the regular time. In brief, a consistent commitment to particular principles and objectives is the foremost quality of an effective leader.

In addition, a leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion would compromise the development of the country. For example, in our current system, people should pay taxes to ensure the whole nation could enjoy a stabilized society and a good public educational system. Country to the good will of the policy, most people are not willing to pay for the incoming taxes. If many political leaders listened to these opinions, the prosperity of a nation would be compromised since the poor would become poorer, the rich would become richer. Such trends would increase the hatred between these two kinds of people and, inevitably, serious crime, robbery, would prevail in the nation. Moreover, since the major income source of the public education funds would vanish, the children would have no access to education because most children, in our current society, rely on the public educational system. Therefore, more possible criminals could be created since no firm, company, or cooperation would incline to hire literates. In short, an effective leader should not easily influenced by the popular opinions.

However, an effective leader should not easily influenced by the popular opinions does not mean that he/she should not listen to the public suggestions. Actually, as the Queen of England, whose popularity among the Great Britain has enjoyed more than 5 decades as a mentor, a spiritual guide to the British people, said a good leader is also a good listener. Without taking the public opinions into consideration, a political leader would become a tyrant like Hitler. During his tenure as the chancellery of the Germany, millions Jews were murdered and persecuted. Furthermore, his ambition waged the most horrible tragedy in the human history, WWII. There would be redundant to name the other tyrant as Stalin and Mussolini. In short, an effective leader should be a good listener.

In sum, the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives is the most essential quality of an effective leader. Any leader should, at least, take the public opinions into consideration, but not easily and quickly influenced by them.

[ 本帖最后由 laststrike 于 2007-7-21 17:05 编辑 ]

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这次第一段的浆糊淘的有点过了。。。。。

rainyni0812UID: 2186847

1. consistently committed to particular principles and objectives是成为领导的必要条件。
2. Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will compromise国家。
3. 好的领导是善于听取意见的。

I concede with the author on the point that the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives is the first and foremost quality of an effective leader. In addition, a leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little. However, it does not mean that a leader should do not listen to the public opinions. Actually, a good and effective leader is a good listener.

To begin with, I strongly agree with the author that an effective leader should be consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. These principles and objectives is the orientation that leads a person to his/her ultimate destination. Without a goal, people might be lost in the overwhelming choices, opinions, and suggestions. To illustrate this point, one should look into several professions that require entrenched destination. In the political world, a leader, whether a president or a senator, is surrounded with choices, choices waiting him/her to make a decision that could make the civilian wealthier, healthier, and happier or make them suffer from miserable life. When facing these crucial choices, a leader with a clear goal could mistakenly choose the later. But a leader without a clear goal would only choose the later. (这句话怎么没看懂呢，还有应该是latter)In business world(这里换用realm上下区别一下), the golden rule is to make as many profits as possible. Such conception requires business leaders, CEO, to discern the optimum choice among the good choices. In 1994, for example, Bill Gates faced a dilemma whether continue to sell DOS, the most popular operating system at that time, or present a revolutionary operation system, Windows 95. Both choices could bring the company with great profits, but the latter ensured Microsoft the maximum profit after its present. In the sports world, a leader, captain or star player should also possess a clear goal, that is play to win. Without this strong determination, a team is easily destroyed since they all count on his/her performance to inspire the rest of the team members. For example, Kobe, L.A. Lakers star player, once scored 60+ in 3 overtimes to win a game. Without the conviction, the team would have already lost in the regular time. In brief, a consistent commitment to particular principles and objectives is the foremost quality of an effective leader.（有点长，论述还是很严密的，要考虑考场上的可操作性阿，不然无法控制，倒时收不了尾思维就乱了）

In addition, a leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion would compromise the development of the country. For example, in our current system, people should pay taxes to ensure the whole nation could enjoy a stabilized society and a good public educational system. Country to the good will of the policy, most people are not willing to pay for the income taxes. If many political leaders listened to these opinions, the prosperity of a nation would be compromised since the poor would become poorer, the rich would become richer. Such trends would increase the hatred between these two kinds of people and, inevitably, serious crime, robbery, would prevail in the nation. Moreover, since the major income source of the public education funds would vanish, the children would have no access to education because most children, in our current society, rely on the public educational system. Therefore, more possible criminals could be created since no firm, company, or cooperation would incline to hire literates. (好像和主题句没有关系啊)In short, an effective leader should not easily influenced by the popular opinions.

However, an effective leader should not easily influenced by the popular opinions does not mean that he/she should not listen to the public suggestions. Actually, as the Queen of England, whose popularity among the Great Britain has enjoyed more than 5 decades as a mentor, a spiritual guide to the British people, said a good leader is also a good listener.（这个例子的前半部分只是说英女王市大家的精神领袖，没有证据说是个好的聆听者阿）Without taking the public opinions into consideration, a political leader would become a tyrant like Hitler. During his tenure as the chancellery of the Germany, millions Jews were murdered and persecuted. Furthermore, his ambition waged the most horrible tragedy in the human history, WWII. There would be redundant to name the other tyrant as Stalin and Mussolini. In short, an effective leader should be a good listener.（希特勒的例子在为了证明这个观点，还是指出他的专制独裁比较好，比方说说他杀死很多犹太人，加上不听劝告之类的就和论点更联系紧密了）

In sum, the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives is the most essential quality of an effective leader. Any leader should, at least, take the public opinions into consideration, but not easily and quickly influenced by them.

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I concede with the author on the point that the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives is the first and foremost quality of an effective leader. In addition, a leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little. However, it does not mean that a leader should do not listen to the public opinions. Actually, a good and effective leader is a good listener.

To begin with, I strongly agree with the author that an effective leader should be consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. These principles and objectives is the orientation that leads a person to his/her ultimate destination. Without a goal, people might be lost in the overwhelming choices, opinions, and suggestions. To illustrate this point, one should look into several professions that require entrenched destination. In the political world, a leader, whether a president or a senator, is surrounded with choices, choices waiting him/her to make a decision that could make the civilian wealthier, healthier, and happier or make them suffer from miserable life. When facing these crucial choices, a leader with a clear goal could mistakenly choose the later. But a leader without a clear goal would only choose the later. (这句话也没看懂呢)In business world, the golden rule is to make as many profits as possible. Such conception requires business leaders, CEO, to discern the optimum choice among the good choices. In 1994, for example, Bill Gates was faced with a dilemma of whether continue to sell DOS, the most popular operating system at that time, or present a revolutionary operation system, Windows 95. Both choices could bring the company with great profits, but the latter ensured Microsoft the maximum profits after its present. In the sports world, a leader, captain or star player should also possess a clear goal, that is play to win. Without this strong determination, a team is easily destroyed since they all count on his/her performance to inspire the rest of the team members. For example, Kobe, L.A. Lakers star player, once scored 60+ in 3 overtimes to win a game. Without the conviction, the team would have already lost in the regular time. In brief, a consistent commitment to particular principles and objectives is the foremost quality of an effective leader.（好！）

In addition, a leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion would compromise the development of the country. For example, in our current system, people should pay taxes to ensure the whole nation could enjoy a stabilized society and a good public educational system. Contrary to the good will of the policy, most people are not willing to pay for the income taxes. If many political leaders listened to these opinions, the prosperity of a nation would be compromised since the poor would become poorer, the rich would become richer. Such trends would increase the hatred between these two kinds of people and, inevitably, serious crime, robbery, would prevail in the nation. Moreover, since the major income source of the public education funds would vanish, the children would have no access to education because most children, in our current society, rely on the public educational system. Therefore, more possible criminals could be created since no firm, company, or cooperation would incline to hire literates. In short, an effective leader should not easily influenced by the popular opinions.(怎么说呢，老兄你这一段推理得有些太远了,而且有点极端化...)

However, an effective leader should not easily influenced by the popular opinions does not mean that he/she should not listen to the public suggestions. Actually, as the Queen of England, whose popularity among the Great Britain has enjoyed more than 5 decades as a mentor, a spiritual guide to the British people, said a good leader is also a good listener.Without taking the public opinions into consideration, a political leader would become a tyrant（dictator合适些，内含不听别人意见的意思） like Hitler. During his tenure as the chancellery of the Germany, millions Jews were murdered and persecuted. Furthermore, his ambition waged the most horrible tragedy in the human history, WWII. There would be redundant to name the other tyrant as Stalin and Mussolini. In short, an effective leader should be a good listener.（同意rainyni0812 希特勒的例子在为了证明这个观点，还是指出他的专制独裁比较好，比方说说他杀死很多犹太人，加上不听劝告之类的就和论点更联系紧密了）（ps：直接套例子模板有点小懒哦，呵呵）

In sum, the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives is the most essential quality of an effective leader. Any leader should, at least, take the public opinions into consideration, but not easily and quickly influenced by them.

是在rainyni0812同学的基础上进行修改建议，祝你越写越好，大牛。

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During his tenure as the chancellery of the Germany, he disregarded the objection towards his racial policy, stubborn to his mass persecuted of the Jews.

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I partially concede with the author on the point that the way people look, dress, and act reveal their attitudes and interests. However, a society's ideas and values can not be comprehensively told by only observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

Admittedly, I concede with the author that the appearance and behavior of each individual of a society is deeply influenced by those who connect with them, therefore, their look, dress and act can be a valid candidate for revealing their attitudes and interests. To illustrate this point, we need to analyze the influences of an individual that could be experienced in his/her life time. At the very beginning of an individual, the time we are born, we receive the nurture of our parents. When they spend the time with their children, their value system, view of the world, and their attitude towards the society naturally instill to their children. When an individual go to elementary school, secondary school, and college or university, his/her perception of the society is shaped by the teachers’ views. Through the life of an individual, mass media also play a vital rule in imparting the viewers, us, their idea of the world, society, the system. Also, as a member of the society, we are inevitably constrained by the moral standards, our view of the society are also, inevitably, complied with what our ancestors' definition of what is good and what is evil. Our appearance and behavior, thus,(这个因此也太免强了吧，前面的例子只说明了"influences of an individual that could be experienced in his/her life time") are largely influenced and constrained by the rules and ideas that preceded us. Through the observation of our influenced and constrained appearance and behavior, one could easily find some attitudes and interests of who, as a society member, possess. In short, the reason that the appearance and behavior of an individual could, in some content, reflect the major attitudes and interests of them is very well established.(这一段对主题"appearance and behavior of an individual could reflect the major attitudes and interests of them"阐述的不够，或许你想在这一段中的重点是阐述"influences of an individual that could be experienced in his/her life time"但是从你"In short"后的内容看来更本就不是么！)

Therefore, through observing the appearances and behaviors could actually, in some content, reveals the interests and attitude of a society. In modern America society, people are easily found wearing the world famous fashion clothing, such as Armani, Versace, and Parda; businessmen/businesswomen are all equipped with most advanced mobile devices, such as cell phones, laptops and PDAs; students are also equipped with mobile phones, laptops, and MP3 players for them to review the knowledge they were taught in schools. All these facts reflect that in modern developed society, western society, people advocates the most advanced and fashionable facilities to ease their life. In other words, they enjoy the culture of consumption(这个主题我在我的作文中还没有用,好！). Moreover, the emphasis of financial gaining, quick fame, and right choices of the modern society are deeply reflect(reflected) by the advocacy of a TV show, the American Idol. Millions, billions of people worldwide swamps with the audition with the hope of become an idol perfectly reflect the idea of such impression. In short, the actual observation could, in some sense, reveals the interests and interests of a society.(这一段非常有说服力，但是好像与上一段的主题有重复的迹象)

However, the appearance and behavior of the people often concern more about the interests of themselves not a larger unit. Thus, only observing the appearance and behavior of the people could not well perceive a comprehensive ideas and values of a society. Modern society is controlled by the government. (不知道说这句话的用意是什么？)For example, the attitudes of the income tax policy are controversial among the people in America. People who advocate it believe it ensure the prosperity of the society since it reduce the discrepancy of the rich and poor. The other people who against it are convinced that it robbers the income from their own hands makes them poorer. Can such conflicts among people reflect the true ideas and values of a society? Obviously, not. In short, the observation of the public(不应该是对大众的观察，而应该是他们的装束和行为吧！) is could not completely reveal the idea of the society.(这段中For example后的例子的内容好像对主题句支持没有对大帮助么！)

In sum, by the analysis of the internal reason that people are deeply influenced by their family, teachers, morals and media, the author's claim is strongly coherent. However, an individual concerns his/her interest heavier than the public, therefore, the complete idea and values of a society can not be perceived by only observing the appearance and behavior of its people.

(总的看来这一篇作文正文1、2段主题有重复，3段例子对主题句的支持不够)


TOPIC: ARGUMENT51

In this news the author recommends that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part of their treatment. To support his claim, he cites the result of a study of two groups of patients, which reveals the recuperation time of the group with antibiotics is quicker than the group with sugar. At the first glance, the argument seems somehow plausible. However, after a deep reflection, it suffered from several logic fallacies.

To begin with, the author falsely concludes that the first group of patients recovered quicker than the second group based on a questionable sample group. Since the basic information of the patients is not provided by the author or the author appeal to ignore the information, the similarity of tow(two) sample groups is highly questionable. It is possible that the first group is strong and young people, who inherently heal faster than the second group, which might be comprised with old and serious injured people. Thus, without such reasonable doubt about the difference of the recuperation time, the author can not convince me the sample is similar enough to conduct the study.

In addition, even assuming the groups possess enough similarity, the methodology of the study is also highly suspicious. First, the first group took antibiotic as part of their treatment while the second took sugar as their treatment. It is entire possible that some undeclared elements in the sugar took by the second group compromised the recuperation which directly resulted in the difference of the time. Second, the difference doctors assigned to the two groups are also high suspicious. Common sense tells us that muscle strain is common in sports. Coincidently, the doctor assigned to the first group was specialized in sports field. Therefore, it might be the suggestion about the daily exercises, which is given by Dr. Newland, which is not given by Dr Alton, that helps the first group quickly healed. Without solid evidence to support the validity of the methodology of the study, the author could not convince me that the result of the study is convincing.

Finally, even assuming that the study conducted is methodologically valid the author could not generalize the recommendation to all patients. All the facts that the author given in the argument could only prove that antibiotics work when treating the severe muscle strain with certain conditions. Is there any need for any patients to be treated with antibiotics is high questionable. What if the patients are allergic to the antibiotics? Such treatment could only serious the situation not improve. What if the injuries are not severe enough to be treated with antibiotics? With such concerns of the veracious of the recommendation, the author could not convince me that all patients who are diagnosed with muscle strain could be treated with antibiotics.

In sum, to better strengthen the argument the author should provide more substantial evidence to validate the study. Hence, the argument could totally not convince to me.

主要逻辑错误都找出来了，反驳顺序也安排得很合理