arugment51 [0710G summer] by niuzhist

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT51 - The following appeared in a medical newsletter.
"Doctors have long suspected that secondary infections may keep some
patients from healing quickly after severe muscle strain. This hypothesis
has now been proved by preliminary results of a study of two groups of
patients. The first group of patients, all being treated for muscle injuries
by Dr. Newland, a doctor who specializes in sports medicine, took antibiotics
regularly throughout their treatment. Their recuperation time was, on average,
40 percent quicker than typically expected. Patients in the second group, all
being treated by Dr. Alton, a general physician, were given sugar pills,
although the patients believed they were taking antibiotics. Their average
recuperation time was not significantly reduced. Therefore, all patients who
are diagnosed with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as
part of their treatment."
提纲：
1.the lack of particular information about the two group people
  The former may be younger ,so they recover more quickly. most of the former
  are males, maybe they recover more quickly than the females. Perhaps, The former
  physical fitness is better .
2. the different treatment levels of the two doctors
   The one specialize in sports medicine are good at treating the muscle strain
   than the the general physician. The distinction may influence the recuperation time.
3. the function of the sugar pills.
   The sugar pills may have a bad effect on recovering from the muscle strain.
4. the side effect of the antibiotics.
    Some one are even sensitive to the antibiotics
5. the relation between the secondary infections and the muscle strain
   muscle strain may not have the secondary infection problem
WORDS: 418          TIME: 00:30:48          DATE: 2007-7-23 上午 11:01:23
In the argument ,the author comes to conclusion that all patients who are diagnosed
with muscle strain would be well advised to take antibiotics as part
of their treatment. To support his view, the author points out that a study of two
groups of patients shows the average recuperation is due to the antibiotics the
patients take. Based on some unfounded evidence and illogical assumption, I am
suspicious of the author's argument.
First of all, it is possible that the differences of the two groups result in the
different average recuperation. Perhaps ,the majority of the former group is young
and it is certain their recuperation is shorter. Or perhaps, the people with good
physical fitness constitutes the former group ,so they recover more quickly. Or,
perhaps the fact that the male are more than the female in the first group results
in the different results. Without giving more detailed information
about the  two groups ,it is hard for me to convince that the author's conclusion
is logical.
Besides, the different treatment levels of the two doctors may attribute to the
different average recuperation. The doctor in the first group who specilize in sports
medicine is obviously better than the general physician doctor in the second group .
The recuperation time is likely to be influenced by the distinction.So, without telling
us the real levels of the two doctors, I can not believe that the author's conclusion
is convincing.
Thirdly ,the function of the sugar pills must be taken into account. There is a chance
that the sugar pills have a bad effect on recovering from the disease,
so the second group 's average recuperation is longer than the first group's.
Even though the antibiotics is beneficial to the recovering ,I am still specious about
the real effect of the medicine. Perhaps the antibiotics have a side effect, and some
people are even sensitive to the antibiotics. So, it is too hasty to make the conclusion
that we should use the antibiotics .As matter of fact, the author's assumption is strongly
undermined by the fact that there is little relativity between the secondary infection
and the muscle strain. Muscle may not have the problem of secondary infection .Without
ruling out the possibilities mentioned above, it is hard for me to regard the author's
conclusion as a rational one.
To sum up, I can make the conclusion safely that the author's conclusion is unfounded
and illogical. Even though the study of the two groups mean something useful but too
little. In order to make the conclusion more cogent, we must ensure the two groups have
similar doctors and patients, the disease in research must be relative to the secondary
infection .






issue208 [0710G summer] by niuzhist


TOPIC: ISSUE208 - "The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and
interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the
appearance and behavior of its people."
提纲：
   Look,dress,act 只能一定程度的反映attitudes and interest,ideas and values.
1．Look,dress 可以反映 attitudes and interests.
   明星的着装反映他们对时尚的追求。学生们的着装与眼神反映他们对知识的渴求。
2．人们的行为与外表能够反映社会的思想和价值。
   釜山亚运会开幕式：反映韩国社会的热爱环保的思想。
   中东妇女的外表：反映了社会以宗教价值标准为根基而建立。
3．但是在很多时候，Look,dress,act无法准确的反映attitudes and interest,ideas and values.
   很多非常富有的人，穿着却非常朴素。
   封建社会对人们的着装有着严格的规定，扼杀了人的个性，很难反映出他们的attitudes and interest。
   统一化的着装一般都较难反映attitudes and interest。
   有时候只有深入了解人们的内心生活才能了解他们的ideas and values，仅通过 appearance and behavior 是不够的。
WORDS: 429          TIME: 00:44:59          DATE: 2007-7-24 上午 10:54:19
In the author 's view ,he claims that the way people look,dress,and act reveals their
attitudes and interests and the appearance an behavior of the people can reflect a society's
ideas and values.In my opinion,it is a complex issue which need further analysis before my
conclusion is made.
To begin with,people's look ,dress and act can have a reflection of their attitudes and
interests in some aspects.The way people dress is often the characteristic of some socail
groups.Many superstars in show business have various kinds of beautiful and showy clothes
which reflects their pursue for  the quick changing fashion of the times.Students in schools
often have a schoolbag on the back,and wear a pair of glasses with a curious look for the
knowledge.So,people's attitudes and interests often have a relation to the way people look,
dress and act.
Besides,people's behavior and apperance can often reveal a society's ideas and values  in sone
aspects.After the Asian Games' opening ceremony held by Korea,the world media is astounished
by the view that there is no waste left in the chairs of the gym which can hold nearly five
ten thousand people.This so-called amazing thing may just be commomplace for Korean which
shows the korea society's ideas of protectiong environment.The women's appearance in the Middle
East  is often bizzare for many other countries's people.They often wear a black clothes with a
black veil connecting to their hat to cover their faces .All these weird apperance is attributable
to the society's essential values based on the religion's values.Thus,people's appearance and
behavior can effectively reflect the the society's ideas and values.
Nevertheless,it is entirely impossible that the way people look,dress,and act can exacly reveal
people's attitudes and interests,let alone a society's ideas and values which is always rooted
in people's heart.Many people with a lot of
wealth have a simple clothes and common houres rather than gaudary and luxuriant houres which
is hard for us to make sure that the fortune the people have.In the feudalistic society ,there
were so many restrictions about people 'dress and apperance that the people's characteristic
was ruined which could  hardly reflect their attitudes and interests.So,the function of the
look ,dress and the act may be effective in some aspects.
To sum up,I partly agree with the author's convention. There is only some relativity bewteen
the way people look,dress,and act and their attitudes and interests in some aspects.so the
society's ideas and values  and the apperacnce and behavior of its people.

[ 本帖最后由 niuzhist 于 2007-7-24 11:53 编辑 ]

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第四段你融进了三个观点，怎么说了，有点混乱，观点之间的关联不强
我觉得你找到这么多错误，集中说清楚3-4个就好，要不然显得很零散，没有有机的结合起来
最后一句To sum up, I can make the conclusion safely that the author's conclusion is unfounded，没看过这样表达的，可以这么说么？

sanliangmmUID: 2363921

In the author 's view ,he claims that the way people look,dress,and act reveals their
attitudes and interests and the appearance and behavior of the people can reflect a society's
ideas and values.In my opinion,it is a complex issue which need further analysis before my
conclusion is made.
To begin with,people's look ,dress and act can have a reflection of their attitudes and
interests in some aspects.The way people dress is often the characteristic of some socail
groups.Many superstars in show business have various kinds of beautiful and showy clothes
which reflect their pursue for  the quick changing fashion of the times(time).Students in schools
often have a schoolbag on the back,and wear a pair of glasses with a curious look for the
knowledge.So,people's attitudes and interests often have a relation to the way people look,
dress and act.(感觉第二个没有说明问题，戴眼镜不代表就是对知识的一种追求吧)
Besides,people's behavior and apperance can often reveal a society's ideas and values  in sone
aspects.After the Asian Games' opening ceremony held by Korea,the world media is astounished
by the view that there was no waste left in the chairs of the gym which can hold nearly five
ten thousand people.This so-called amazing thing (感觉这样说不是很顺，this amazing thing就足够了)
may just be commomplace for Korean which
shows the korea society's ideas of protectiong environment.The women's appearance in the Middle
East  is often bizzare for many other countries's people.They often wear a black clothes with a
black veil connecting to their hat to cover their faces .All these weird apperance is attributable
to the society's essential values based on the religion's values.Thus,people's appearance and
behavior can effectively reflect the the society's ideas and values.
Nevertheless,it is entirely impossible that the way people look,dress,and act can exacly reveal
people's attitudes and interests,let alone a society's ideas and values which is always rooted
in people's heart.Many people with a lot of wealth have a simple clothes and common houres
rather than gaudary and luxuriant houres which s hard for us to make sure that the fortune
the people have.In the feudalistic society ,there
were so many restrictions about people 'dress and apperance that the people's characteristic
was ruined which could  hardly reflect their attitudes and interests.So,the function of the
look ,dress and the act may be effective in some aspects.
To sum up,I partly agree with the author's convention. There is only some relativity bewteen
the way people look,dress,and act and their attitudes and interests in some aspects.so the
society's ideas and values  and the apperacnce and behavior of its people.(感觉每段虽然有例子，但是对例子的分析还是有点不够，显得光是观点和例子的堆砌)