Issue207

woodmanUID：161906

Issue207Ritualsand ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups ofpeople have a diminished sense of who they are.

When we take a close look at the history ofculture, we will find that different culture has their own characteristicrituals and ceremonies that help define them. However, as technology progresseslead to globalization, rituals and ceremonies are tending to be hybrid, andthen such notable contribution to defining culture is passing. Even withoutthem, we can still maintain our sense of who we are.  

It istrue that rituals and ceremonies will reflect people’s beliefs, thoughts, tastes,thus can tell a foreigner something about that society’s culture. From the adventruous and fierce bullfightceremony which is full of whoops, applause and laughter, we can touch the valiancy, cordiality andhospitality aspect of Spanish culture. Also, from the white dominant tone,delicate coupdemarriage and beautiful weddingarmosre on the French wedding rituals, we can feel the romantic element in the French culture. In addition, the family union ceremony of China’smoon day reflects the deep filial piety spirit in Chinese culture. And we alsoknow, specifically, the atmosphere of freedom through America’s presidential candidate ceremonies and in augurations of presidents.

However，along with the proceeding of globalization, somerituals and ceremonies are becoming more and more internationalization, thus can’t represent any instinct feature of their culture and define culture as well as they did in the past. Take the Christmas Day for example, nowadays countriesin Asia such as Japan, India and China start celebrate this festivaljust like some west countries where the Christmas Day used to be distinctive intheir culture. However, in these Asian countries, the Christmas Day is notrelated to religion any more, but just a joyful feast to enjoy union of familyand friends. Another example is the Saint Valentine's Day. In the past, the SaintValentine's Day was a special ceremony merely in Christianity world, and embodiedequality, free and loyalty in the Christian culture. But now it becomes aromantic feast prevailing all over the world. Its religionary color of Christianity fades, and function of helping defining Christian culture is weakened.

Inaddition, as the factors contributing to defining culture are far more than ritualsand ceremonies, even if there is no ritual and ceremony exit in this world, wecan still comprehend our culture and understand ourselves. Perhaps we can getenough information about our culture and our nation from piles of books andmovies in which there are so many stories of our ancestors and development ofour society. Also, we can visit the museums where are abound with exhibit recording development at different stagesin our history. We even can hear the developing process of our culture from theelder family members who have a more comprehensive understanding about ourculture as well as a far deeper realization of self. Thus, we can get to knowwho we are in the cultural background without rituals and ceremonies.

In sum, rituals and ceremonies indeed help define a culture, but their function is being weakened because of the globalization. However, without them,we can keep recognizing ourselves as well as before in that sole rituals andceremonies are not the key factor in defining culture.
提纲
63.
1、了解另一种不同的文化有助于我们了解自己文化的特别之处
2、有助于从更多方面来审视自己的文化
3、仅仅了解自己的文化容易产生偏见

72.
1、主要城市具有代表性，典型性
2、小城镇与农村也不可忽视
3、要达到bestunderstand，需要全面的了解

151
1. 现在的电子通讯媒介确实有利于更便捷的交流
2. 然而，电子通讯媒介存在自身的缺陷（如缺乏面对面的交流与沟通）
3. 相对于他们带来的便利而言，这些缺陷是很小的

196
1、科学技术极大的提高了生活水平
2、科学技术也带来了负面的一些东西
3、科技的发展是双刃剑，人们应该合理利用科学技术                                                   

[ 本帖最后由 woodman 于 2007-7-25 16:32 编辑 ]

PudingUID：2364107

When we take a close look at the history of culture, we will find that different culture has their own characteristic rituals and ceremonies that help define them. However, as technology progresses lead to globalization, rituals and ceremonies are tending to be hybrid,(偶认为rituals and ceremonies是不能变得hybrid的，应该是：culture become hybrid or assimilated ) and then such notable contribution to（改成function for 会不会好些？）defining culture is passing. Even without them, we can still maintain our sense of who we are.

It is true that rituals and ceremonies will reflect people’s beliefs, thoughts, tastes, thus can tell a foreigner something about that society’s culture. From the adventurous and fierce bullfight ceremony which is full of whoops, applause and laughter, we can touch the valiancy, cordiality and hospitality aspect of Spanish culture. Also, from the（是否有些重复？换种说法会比较好） white dominant tone, delicate coupde marriage and beautiful wedding armosre on the French wedding rituals, we can feel the romantic element in the French culture. In addition, the family union ceremony of China’smoon day(貌似是mid-autumn day会比较专业？) reflects the deep filial piety spirit in Chinese culture. And we also know, specifically, the atmosphere of freedom through America’s presidential candidate ceremonies and in augurations of presidents. （通过三个例子：斗牛节，法国婚礼，中秋来说明典礼和仪式会反应此社会人群的态度想法，例子中外对比，好。）

However，along with the proceeding of globalization, some rituals and ceremonies are becoming more and more internationalization, thus can’t represent any instinct feature of their culture and define （the）culture as well as they did in the past. Take the Christmas Day for example, nowadays countries in Asia such as Japan, India and China start celebrate this festival just like some west(western) countries where the Christmas Day used to be distinctive in their culture(这句是不是有点多余？). However, in these Asian countries, the Christmas Day is not related to religion any more, but just a joyful feast to enjoy union of family and friends. Another example is the Saint Valentine's Day. In the past, the Saint Valentine's Day was a special ceremony merely in Christianity world, and embodied equality, free and loyalty in the Christian culture. But now it becomes a romantic feast prevailing all over the world. Its religionary（religion） color of Christianity fades, and function of helping defining Christian culture is weakened. （通过两个例子：圣诞节、感恩节变得全球化来说明仪式和典礼逐渐全球化，也就不能起到define作用了）

In addition, as the factors contributing to defining culture are far more than ritual sand ceremonies, even if there is no ritual and ceremony exit in this world, we can still comprehend our culture and understand ourselves. Perhaps we can get enough information about our culture and our nation from piles of books and movies in which there are so many stories of our ancestors and development of our society. Also, we can visit the museums where are abound with exhibit recording development at different stages in our history. We even can hear the developing process of our culture from the elder family members who have a more comprehensive understanding about our culture as well as a far deeper realization of self. Thus, we can get to know who we are in the cultural background without rituals and ceremonies.(我们可以通过其他方式来define culture)

In sum, rituals and ceremonies indeed help define a culture, but their function is being weakened because of the globalization. However, without them, we can keep recognizing ourselves as well as before in that sole rituals and ceremonies are not the key factor in defining culture.

总结：
1.      组长的文逻辑结构很清晰，并且能够在每段展开论述。内容为主题服务
2.       但是我觉得例子有些普遍了（节日偏多）可以找些更好的例子（尽管这个题目比较难找）比如一些社会科学家关于典礼啊仪式阿的话什么的
3.       空格。。。。。小注意一下

[ 本帖最后由 Puding 于 2007-7-24 19:20 编辑 ]

woodmanUID：161906

我也发现例举了好多节日啊，好难找例子的， 下次一定注意例子的多样化。自己觉得论证比较浅显，不够深入，继续努力了。

nornsUID：2325187

Issue207Ritualsand ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups ofpeople have a diminished sense of who they are.

When we take a close look at the history ofculture, we will find that different culture has their own characteristicrituals and ceremonies that help define them. However, as technology progresseslead to globalization, rituals and ceremonies are tending to be hybrid, andthen such notable contribution to defining culture is passing. Even withoutthem, we can still maintain our sense of who we are.  

It istrue that rituals and ceremonies will reflect people’s beliefs, thoughts, tastes,thus can tell a foreigner something about that society’s culture. From the adventruous and fierce bullfightceremony which is full of whoops, applause and laughter, we can touch the valiancy, cordiality andhospitality aspect of Spanish culture. Also, from the white dominant tone,delicate coupdemarriage and beautiful wedding armosre on the French wedding rituals, we can feel the romantic element in the French culture. (这个例子会不会有些不到位呢？没有具体指出哪些元素)In addition, the family union ceremony of China’smoon day reflects the deep filial piety spirit in Chinese culture. And we alsoknow, specifically, the atmosphere of freedom through America’s presidential candidate ceremonies and in augurations of presidents. （这一段例子的排比很棒，对比啊结构啊都很好；要是平常的作文，我觉得很棒，但对AW例子会不会稍嫌分析不充分？至于应该保结构，还是应该进一步展开呢我觉得很矛盾 这只是我的疑问，）

我觉得however后面最好有个承起软点


However，along with the proceeding of globalization, somerituals and ceremonies are becoming more and more internationalization, thus can’t represent any instinct feature of their culture and define culture as well as they did in the past.（加上一句，这样就不能起到define的作用了） Take the Christmas Day for example, nowadays countriesin Asia such as Japan, India and China start celebrate this festivaljust like some west countries where the Christmas Day used to be distinctive intheir culture. However, in these Asian countries, the Christmas Day is notrelated to religion any more, but just a joyful feast to enjoy union of familyand friends. Another example is the Saint Valentine's Day. In the past, the SaintValentine's Day was a special ceremony merely in Christianity world, and embodiedequality, free and loyalty in the Christian culture. But now it becomes aromantic feast prevailing all over the world. Its religionary color of Christianity fades, and function of helping defining Christian culture is weakened.

Inaddition, as the factors contributing to defining culture are far more than ritualsand ceremonies, even if there is no ritual and ceremony exit in this world, wecan still comprehend our culture and understand ourselves. Perhaps we can getenough information about our culture and our nation from piles of books andmovies in which there are so many stories of our ancestors and development ofour society. Also, we can visit the museums where are abound with exhibit recording development at different stagesin our history. We even can hear the developing process of our culture from theelder family members who have a more comprehensive understanding about ourculture as well as a far deeper realization of self. Thus, we can get to knowwho we are in the cultural background without rituals and ceremonies.

In sum, rituals and ceremonies indeed help define a culture, but their function is being weakened because of the globalization. However, without them,we can keep recognizing ourselves as well as before in that sole rituals andceremonies are not the key factor in defining culture.

很不错