Issue207 [OB小组]_第12次作业_礼仪和典礼定义一个文化

ldongxpUID: 2311083

TOPIC: ISSUE207 - "Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are."
WORDS: 508         TIME: 00:55:00          DATE: 2007-7-24

The speaker asserts that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture and that societies or groups of people have less sense of who they are without them. I concede that rituals and ceremonies can contribute to define a culture. On the other hand, some ceremonies that belong to some country now have been shared by more peoples. Meanwhile rituals and ceremonies are not the only things that can help identify a culture.

Admittedly, rituals and ceremonies are always with the special characteristics of some races and   therefore can help identify a culture. For example, the Spring festival, the most important festival of Chinese, is a tradition with history of several thousand of years. At this festival, all Chinese go home and get together with the family members to enjoy the happiness of family and wish a good future to all family members. It reflects that family is most significant to the every Chinese and living with family is the happiest thing, which is the core of the Chinese culture. For another example, the Thanksgiving Day in western countries is an extremely important ceremony. On this day, people thanks god for things that he has given in the harvest season. This ceremony expresses the westerners' appreciation to the god who is most significant in the western cultures. Therefore, rituals and ceremonies contribute to identify a culture.

With the globalization going on and communication becoming frequent among people in different countries, some ceremonies are now shared by increasingly people with different cultures. The communications with foreign countries bring in other cultures including the rituals and ceremonies. Take the Valentine's Day as an example; the Valentine's Day was a custom for the lovers only in western countries. Yet, nowadays young lovers in Asian countries, such as China, Korea, Japan and so forth, give flowers and chocolates to their lovers to express their sweet love. Thus, the Valentine's Day has become a ceremony of people in both west and east of the world. Moreover, increasing people in China bless each other on December 25th and Christmas day has also become a ceremony in China, too. In short, increasing ceremonies are shared by more people with the communication among countries.

Besides a culture can be identified by rituals and ceremonies, it is also expressed in our daily lives. We can see a culture from every aspect in our lives. There are plenty of examples. Chinese eat rice with chopsticks while Americans have beef and bread with folks and knives. Chinese are always implicative and modest whereas Americans are open-minded and aggressive. People in east always shake hands for greeting while westerners hug and kiss when they meet some acquaintance. Thus, culture can be identified in many ways besides rituals and ceremonies.

In sum, since rituals and ceremonies always possess characteristics of their races, they can help define a culture. Yet, some ceremonies are accepted by more people with distinct cultures because the increasing communication in the world. In addition, not only rituals and ceremonies are able to contribute to identify a culture, but also details in our daily lives do so.

[ 本帖最后由 ldongxp 于 2007-7-24 20:41 编辑 ]

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The speaker asserts that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture and that societies or groups of people have less sense of who they are without them. I concede that rituals and ceremonies can contribute to define a culture. On the other hand, some ceremonies that belong to some countries now have been shared by more peoples. Meanwhile(这里是递进吧,连接词不对) rituals and ceremonies are not the only things that can help identify a culture.

Admittedly, rituals and ceremonies are always with the special characteristics of some races and   therefore can help identify a culture. For example, the Spring festival, the most important festival of Chinese, is a tradition with history of several thousand of years. At this festival, all Chinese go home and get together with the family members to enjoy the happiness of family and wish a good future to all family members. It reflects that family is most significant to the every Chinese and living with family is the happiest thing, which is the core of the Chinese culture. For another example, the Thanksgiving Day in western countries is an extremely important ceremony. On this day, people thanks god for things that he has given in the harvest season. This ceremony expresses the westerners' appreciation to the god who is most significant in the western cultures. Therefore, rituals and ceremonies contribute to identify a culture.(例子得当论述精炼)

With the globalization going on and communication becoming frequent among people in different countries, some ceremonies are now shared by increasingly people with different cultures. The communications with foreign countries bring in other cultures including the rituals and ceremonies. Take the Valentine's Day as an example; the Valentine's Day was a custom for the lovers only in western countries. Yet, nowadays young lovers in Asian countries, such as China, Korea, Japan and so forth, give flowers and chocolates to their lovers to express their sweet love. Thus, the Valentine's Day has become a ceremony of people in both west and east of the world. Moreover, increasing people in China bless each other on December 25th and Christmas day has also become a ceremony in China, too. In short, increasing ceremonies are shared by more people with the communication among countries.(这个观点很新颖那,例子也很好)

Besides a culture can be identified by rituals and ceremonies, it is also expressed in our daily lives. We can see a culture from every aspect in our lives. There are plenty of examples. Chinese eat rice with chopsticks while Americans have beef and bread with folks and knives. Chinese are always implicative and modest whereas Americans are open-minded and aggressive. People in east always shake hands for greeting while westerners hug and kiss when they meet some acquaintance. Thus, culture can be identified in many ways besides rituals and ceremonies.(这段跟前面好像不搭界啊....)

In sum, since rituals and ceremonies always possess characteristics of their races, they can help define a culture. Yet, some ceremonies are accepted by more people with distinct cultures because the increasing communication in the world. In addition, not only rituals and ceremonies are able to contribute to identify a culture, but also details in our daily lives do so.
我觉得这篇文章有一个比较大的问题大家都犯了,就是忽视了"Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are",这个可是这篇的ISSUE所在,前面说了这么多,就是为了讨论这个问题,但是文中基本没有看到.审题啊审题!

xiao8686UID: 2266881

我也发现了后面的那个论点没有论到，我写的那篇也是，直到我快写完最后一段才发现那里没有论，只有草草论了一下。审题重要啊！


Thespeaker asserts that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture andthat societies or groups of people have less sense of who they arewithout them. I concede that rituals and ceremonies can contributeto define a culture. On the other hand, some ceremonies that belong tosome country now have been shared by more peoples. Meanwhile ritualsand ceremonies are not the only things that can help identify a culture.
表明观点

Admittedly, ritualsand ceremonies are always with the special characteristics of someraces and   therefore can help identify a culture. （这句话还需要进一步说明。）For example, theSpring festival, the most important festival of Chinese, is a traditionwith history of several thousand of years. （这个时间太恐怖了，那有几（十）万年了...）At this festival, allChinese go home and get together with the family members to enjoy thehappiness of family（表达有误） and wish a good future to all family members. Itreflects that family is most significant to the every Chinese andliving with family is the happiest thing, which is the core of the Chinese culture. For another example, the Thanksgiving Day in western countriesis an extremely important ceremony.（其实也不是extremely。很多foreigners也不过thanksgiving的，倒是可以说一下chrismas） On this day, people thanks god forthings that he has given in the harvest season. This ceremony expressesthe westerners' appreciation to the god who is most significant in thewestern cultures. Therefore, rituals and ceremonies contribute toidentify a culture.
论证的不错，再具体一点就好了

With the globalizationgoing on and communication becoming frequent among people in differentcountries, some ceremonies are now shared by increasingly people withdifferent cultures. The communications with foreign countries bring inother cultures including the rituals and ceremonies. Take theValentine's Day as an example;the Valentine's Day was a custom for the lovers only in westerncountries. Yet, nowadays young lovers in Asian countries, such asChina, Korea, Japan and so forth, give flowers and chocolates to theirlovers to express their sweet love. Thus, the Valentine's Day hasbecome a ceremony of people in both west and east of the world.Moreover, increasing people in China bless each other on December 25thand Christmas day has also become a ceremony in China, too. In short,increasing ceremonies are shared by more people with the communicationamong countries.
要把这一段的观点和全文的论点联系起来，越来越多的人share the some rituals and ceremonies了，那么就可能不能反映一个culture了。这样就联系起来了。另外情人节送东西貌似通常来说不太是什么ceremony和ritual，所以你要说它们是，就要自己说定，解释一下。

Besides a culture canbe identified by rituals and ceremonies, it is also expressed in ourdaily lives. We can see a culture from every aspect in our lives. Thereare plenty of examples. Chinese eat rice with chopsticks whileAmericans have beef and bread with folks and knives. Chinese are alwaysimplicative and modest whereas Americans are open-minded andaggressive. People in east always shake hands for greeting whilewesterners hug and kiss when they meet some acquaintance. （这里举完例子了要说明一下，或者举例子之前要论述一下）Thus, culturecan be identified in many ways besides rituals and ceremonies.

Insum, since rituals and ceremonies always possess characteristics oftheir races, they can help define a culture. Yet, some ceremonies areaccepted by more people with distinct cultures because the increasingcommunication in the world. In addition, not only rituals andceremonies are able to contribute to identify a culture, but alsodetails in our daily lives do so.
的确这个issue后面那个一部分完全没有提到阿

pesticideUID: 2359145

The speaker asserts that rituals and ceremonies help define a culture and that societies or groups of people have less sense of who they are without them. I concede that rituals and ceremonies can contribute to define a culture. On the other hand, some ceremonies that belong to some country now have been shared by more peoples. Meanwhile rituals and ceremonies are not the only things that can help identify a culture.(似乎有点便扭，另外identify与define 有一点差别)

Admittedly, rituals and ceremonies are always with the special characteristics of some races and   therefore can help identify a culture. For example, the Spring festival, the most important festival of Chinese, is a tradition with history of several thousand of years. At this festival, all Chinese go home and get together with the family members to enjoy the happiness of family and wish a good future to all family members. It reflects that family is most significant to the every Chinese and living with family is the happiest thing, which is the core of the Chinese culture. For another example, the Thanksgiving Day in western countries is an extremely important ceremony. On this day, people thanks god for things that he has given in the harvest season. This ceremony expresses the westerners' appreciation to the god who is most significant in the western cultures. Therefore, rituals and ceremonies contribute to identify a culture.

With the globalization going on and communication becoming frequent among people in different countries, some ceremonies are now shared by increasingly people with different cultures. The communications with foreign countries bring in other cultures including the rituals and ceremonies. Take the Valentine's Day as an example; the Valentine's Day was a custom for the lovers only in western countries. Yet, nowadays young lovers in Asian countries, such as China, Korea, Japan and so forth, give flowers and chocolates to their lovers to express their sweet love. Thus, the Valentine's Day has become a ceremony of people in both west and east of the world. Moreover, increasing people in China bless each other on December 25th and Christmas day has also become a ceremony in China, too. In short, increasing ceremonies are shared by more people with the communication among countries.

Besides a culture can be identified by rituals and ceremonies, it is also expressed in our daily lives. We can see a culture from every aspect in our lives. There are plenty of examples. Chinese eat rice with chopsticks while Americans have beef and bread with folks and knives. Chinese are always implicative and modest whereas Americans are open-minded (是要表现坦率的意思吗?)and aggressive. People in east always shake hands for greeting while westerners hug and kiss when they meet some acquaintance. Thus, culture can be identified in many ways besides rituals and ceremonies.

In sum, since rituals and ceremonies always possess characteristics of their races, they can help define a culture. Yet, some ceremonies are accepted by more people with distinct cultures because the increasing communication in the world. In addition,not only rituals and ceremonies are able to contribute to identify a culture, but also details in our daily lives do so.

论述很好，只是提到的都是传统习俗，尽管与仪式有一定关系。

[ 本帖最后由 pesticide 于 2007-7-25 14:13 编辑 ]

ldongxpUID: 2311083

汗一个，的确失误啊……