issue11 [OB小组] 第13次作业 globaliztion help solve problems

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题目：ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."
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Imagine such situation which may happen in the future: a university called "the global university" is established, which attracts only those top students from countries all over the world. In this university, students are taught the same lessons in order to make some contribution in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems, meanwhile news from this university covers all the headlines of newspapers, what will it be like? Harvard, Cambridge, Oxford, Albert, in order to compete with the global university, they'll also learn to be approach globalization. However, this may result in the losing of features of each university.

To begin with, it is true that globalization leads to cooperation in each country. Undeniable it'll do much help in science realm such as the the "gene plan" and the discovery of the universe. Moreover, in commercial realm, the more cooperation between countries will help establish more multinationals, which can help save the transportation fees of products. Besides, in political realm, the cooperation between governments of different countries will help counter-strike the terrorists. Hence, globalization does help a lot in the above realms.

However, every coin has two sides. See the globalization in positive way, it's cooperation, on the other hand, it's also conformity, which will probably affect the diversity of different cultures, customs, arts and commercial competitions. Taking art for example, the art works vary in different countries, it's easy for us to observe the style of each art works, and western countries are famous for their abstract style in art works while eastern countries are famous for their classicality and connotation showed in art works. However, the globalization will probably make art lose its diversities, which is a great damage to the art works. What's worse, the same possibilities also exist in the conformity of customs and cultures. In addition, the conformity also results in more commercial monopolizations, which affects the normal commercial competitions.

Moreover, adding further credibility to my position is the fact that the world's most persistent social problems exist in most countries, however, the best way to solve this problem may vary in different countries. It is possible that the global and uniform way is not the best way to solve the problem. Perhaps it's even better for each country to discover their own way to solve these persistent social problems and communicate with other countries to learn each other's experience. Thus from these opinions we know whether to support the global university still need to be discussed.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that the globalization does do much contribution to the society in many realms. Meanwhile, it also has some negative affection on the above-mentioned fields. In final analysis, it's necessary for us to do more research on whether to support the development of a global university rather than making a immediate decision.

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Imagine such situation which may happen in the future: a universitycalled "the global university" is established, which attracts onlythose top students from countries all over the world. In thisuniversity, students are taught the same lessons in order to make somecontribution in the process of solving the world's most persistentsocial problems, meanwhile news from this university covers all theheadlines of newspapers, what will it be like? Harvard, Cambridge,Oxford, Albert, in order to compete with the global university, they'llalso learn to be approach globalization. However, this may result inthe losing of features of each university.
感觉这样的开头有一些的具体，有一些就是这种大学成立带来的后果了，不知道这样的写法好不好。

To begin with, it is true that globalization leads to cooperation ineach country. Undeniable it'll do much help in science realm such asthe the "gene plan" and the discovery of the universe. Moreover, incommercial realm, the more cooperation between countries will helpestablish more multinationals, which can help save the transportationfees of products. Besides, in political realm, the cooperation betweengovernments of different countries will help counter-strike theterrorists. Hence, globalization does help a lot in the above realms.
文章中说了是social problems，虽然很多问题在本质上面都是social problems，但是我觉得还是要自己扯到那上面去的。所以这一段里面的例子还是要和social problems扯上关系。

However, every coin has two sides. See the globalization in positiveway, it's cooperation, （这个表达有误）on the other hand, it's also conformity, whichwill probably affect the diversity of different cultures, customs, artsand commercial competitions. Taking art for example, the art works varyin different countries, it's easy for us to observe the style of eachart works, and western countries are famous for their abstract style inart works while eastern countries are famous for their classicality andconnotation showed in art works. However, the globalization willprobably make art lose its diversities, which is a great damage to theart works. What's worse, the same possibilities also exist in theconformity of customs and cultures. In addition, the conformity alsoresults in more commercial monopolizations, which affects the normalcommercial competitions.
感觉这一观点不太好。作为主论点来驳斥global university的弊端还不够有力，但是语言上的论证已经不错了。

Moreover, adding further credibility to my position（不要用这种argument的句子来写issue,比较危险。考官很容易把issue判成 “错写为argument”，这个后果很严重） is the fact thatthe world's most persistent social problems exist in most countries,however, the best way to solve this problem may vary in differentcountries. It is possible that the global and uniform way is not thebest way to solve the problem. Perhaps it's even better for eachcountry to discover their own way to solve these persistent socialproblems and communicate with other countries to learn each other'sexperience. Thus from these opinions we know whether to support theglobal university still need to be discussed.
这个论点不错，要多发展一下这个论点。

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw ourconclusion that the globalization does do much contribution to thesociety in many realms. Meanwhile, it also has some negative affectionon the above-mentioned fields. In final analysis, it's necessary for usto do more research on whether to support the development of a globaluniversity rather than making a immediate decision.