九月IBT-第九次作业 airbots-你认为那种交通工具改变人们生活

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Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives
automobiles/bicycles/airplanes
WORDS: 305          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-7-26 21:27:43

Which kind of transportation vehicles has changed people's life, automobiles, bicycles, or airplanes? In my viewpoint, airplanes play paramount role in changing people's lives within those three candidates, not only because they realized people's dream of flying in the sky, bur for the significant good or evil effects they have brought about.

First of the all, airplanes do shorten distances among people geographically and phycologically. Nowadays, the fastest plane can travel as  ten times as the sound travel, and even airplane for civil aviation, the speed is twice sonic. People can stride over the Atlantic ocean within 3 hours, If a woman who work in New York, however, her family is in London. she also can go back on time to attend her childern's birthday party or  say "happy anniversary" to her husband.  Without airplane, this trip may take several years. We can imagine what a miserable birthday her children will have without their mom, and her husband may find his new life.

Secondly, not merely the distance among people, airplanes have also done people's lives a favor in many aspects. Take the cartography for example, with  the eyesight enlarged by airplane, cartographer can easily work out a region's map. When it comes to agriculture, farmer can use airplane to plant seeds, spread pestcide, etc.

On the other hand, technology is a double blades sword, airplanes have changed human's history on negative aspect as well. In WWII, the Nazi German carried out sudden invasion to Poland by their powerful and advanced air forces. Just three days, with the land forces which were not worse than German's, Poland had been ocuupied by Naze. Three days ago people of Poland were owner of their homeland. Nevertheless,  three days later six years hardship under Nazi's rein just began.

All in all, based on those ressons about, it is undoubted that people's lives have been modified greatly by airplanes.

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optoAzUID: 2313070

Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people's lives
automobiles/bicycles/airplanes
WORDS: 305          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2007-7-26 21:27:43

Which kind of transportation vehicles has changed people's life （这里要不要加个副词？change肯定是都change了的，只是程度有差别）, automobiles, bicycles, or airplanes? In my viewpoint, airplanes play paramount role（单数名词前面应该有个冠词吧？） in changing people's lives within those three candidates, not only because they realized people's dream of flying in the sky, bur for the significant good or evil effects they have brought about.

First of the all, airplanes do shorten distances among people geographically and phycologically （physiologically）. Nowadays, the fastest plane can travel as ten times as the sound travel, and even airplane for civil aviation（民用航空，这个词值得俺学习哈）, the speed is twice sonic. People can stride over the Atlantic ocean within 3 hours, If a woman who work in New York, however, her family is in London. she also can go back on time to attend her childern's(拼写错误) birthday party or  say "happy anniversary" to her husband. （例子具体温馨，很好。） Without airplane, this trip may take several years. We can imagine what a miserable birthday her children will have without their mom, and her husband may find his new life.（他丈夫会寻找自己的新生活？妻子没回来丈夫就解放了？-_-##）

Secondly, not merely the distance among people, airplanes have also done people's lives a favor in many aspects. Take the cartography（阅读听力常见词汇啊，能用在作文里显得很专业） for example, with  the eyesight enlarged by airplane, cartographer can easily work out a region's map. When it comes to agriculture, farmer can use airplane to plant seeds, spread pestcide（ pesticide）, etc.

On the other hand,（个人感觉，这个短语用在第二方面，第二条比较好。第三个reason用hand,总让人联想到三只手。。） technology is a double blades sword（这个词组好~！）, airplanes have changed human's history on negative aspect as well. In WWII, the Nazi German carried out sudden invasion to Poland by their powerful and advanced air forces. Just three days, with the land forces which were not worse than German's, Poland had been ocuupied（ occupied） by Naze. Three days ago people of Poland were owner of their homeland. Nevertheless, three days later six years hardship under Nazi's rein just began.
这一段很好，写的很有辨证思维的感觉。正反两面都分析了，例子翔实用词专业，不错。

All in all, based on those ressons （reasons）about(above?), it is undoubted that people's lives have been modified greatly by airplanes.
总体逻辑很好，正反两个方面的论述都体现了change这个中心。发现lz的小词用的非常好，一些比较专业的说法也不错，很值得学习。每段中心句突出，例子详尽，是不是可以考虑加个总结句什么的，一来结构完整，而来扩展字数？

Ps:楼主的口语捏？。。