issue103 [0710G +U小组]--xiefen0223--第2次作业

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题目：ISSUE103 - "The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives."
字数：398          用时：0:45:00          日期：2007-07-26

History is a big book that one can never finish reading it. It records down the whole development of our society and reveals how we have reached the place where we are standing today. The more we study history, the more we get from it, not only the identification of our human race but also the lessons taught by the people in the past. The subject of history is far more than the extent of our daily lives, so is its value.

To begin with, history gives us identification about our past. People are always seeking where they are from because in our character as human beings, we are eager for identification. And the study of history meets our curiosity and gives us an answer, which can peace our mind in the deep heart. During the immigration period in US history, for example, people have written down the names of the immigrations from other lands, and years after years, there are still lots of people coming to the museum to read the name list to find their ancestors, they just need to know who they are and where they are from.

In addition, the lesson history has taught us is beyond the value relevant to our daily lives. From the past we can learn what mistakes we should avoid in our modern society and what advance we should take. For instance, from the modern history of China, which varies from 1900 to 1945, we have learned that we will get beat if we are too weak. So now China is trying its best to develop the economy as well as become strong in other factors. Moreover, history plays a role of showing hero images to the next generations to inspire their patriotism and perfect their morality, which is the reason why we take the history course from the early education.

Last but not least, from the historical study, we can grasp the rules of the world development, take the initiative to create history, and meet challenges more confidently. For example, the peace policy China carry out now is following the rule that only peace and harmony can bring out the fast development of the country.

So from the discussion above, we can easily come to the conclusion that beyond the value to our daily life, history should be much appreciated by our human beings for its great merits.

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History is a big book that one can never finish reading it. It records down the whole development of our society and reveals how we have reached the place where we are standing today. The more we study history, the more we get from it, [;]not only the identification of our human race but also the lessons taught by the people in the past. The subject of history is far more than the extent of our daily lives, so is its value.[第一段很好，最后一句thesis明确有力，中间也对以下分论点作了说明，值得学习。]

To begin with, history gives us identification about our past. People are always seeking where they are from because in our character as human beings, we are eager for identification. And the study of history meets our curiosity and gives us an answer, which can peace our mind in the deep heart[deep down in the heart是不是好些？]. During the immigration period in US history, for example, people have written down the names of the immigrations from other lands, and years after years, there are still lots of people coming to the museum to read the name list to find their ancestors, they just need to know who they are and where they are from.[这一段是说历史的identification的作用，不过个人觉得，这一作用不是很有力吧]

In addition, the lesson [that]history has taught us is beyond the value relevant to our daily lives. From the past we can learn what mistakes we should avoid in our modern society and what advance we should take. For instance, from the modern [我觉得这个modern会造成误解，干脆直接就说年代好了]history of China, which varies from 1900 to 1945, we have learned that we will get beat[beaten?是不是还有更好的词] if we are too weak.[这个例子很好，不过能找到更好表达方法就好了。 ] So now[at these days] China is trying its best to develop the economy as well as become strong in other factors[respects]. Moreover, history plays a role of showing hero images to the next generations to inspire their patriotism and perfect their morality, which is the reason why we take the history course from the early education.[这一段说历史的教育意义，不过让人觉得似乎跟我们日常生活有很大关系，举的例子就很好了。是不是把前面的we改成our country 或者其它会更好？]

Last but not least, from the historical study, we can grasp the rules of the world development, take the initiative to create history, and meet[face?] challenges more confidently. For example, the peace policy [that, 加上是不是更好]China carry out now is following the rule that only peace and harmony can bring out the fast development of the country.[有详有略，这段简单说下历史的另一个价值]

So from the discussion above, we can easily come to the conclusion that beyond the value to our daily life, history should be much appreciated by our human beings for its great merits.

能在规定时间里写出来很厉害了，基本上都能合要求了。开头很好，结尾需再丰富些。中间的论证如果能从更具有一般意义上说就更有说服力了，这方面我说不出什么具体例子，见谅啦。有些词用的很灵活，需要你能确认他们是没有错误的，有些我标出来了，有些没有。

[ 本帖最后由 ldsun 于 2007-7-27 18:47 编辑 ]