argument48 勇往直前小组

zhangjing106UID：2157010

In this article, the writer induces two results: first, he believes that using computers is not causation to less physically fit; second, he declaims that the recent decline in the economy causes low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, and fitness levels will improve with the economy. However, I find several flaws in this article which could not let me agree with the writer.

At the beginning, the writer does not provide persuasive evidences support the conclusion that using computers is not the causation of citizens' less physically fit. The writer cites an example that overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, which help him induce such a conclusion. Nevertheless, he does not mention about the using computers levels in these regions. It is possible that there are a lot of industries making or selling computers, which preserve great number of computers in these regions, but never using at all. Even if levels of using computer are also highest in these regions, it is also probable that computer users in regions have other methods to ameliorate their fitness, as attaching importance to physical exercises at their spare time.

Secondly, no evidence proves that the recent decline in the economy is one reason to decrease fitness levels, which induces low expenditures on fitness-related products and services. At first, I could not be persuaded that low expenditures on fitness-related products and services cause low levels of fitness. Perhaps the most popular sports are outdoor exercises recently, such as running in road, swimming in sea or climbing mountains. Fitness-related products and services are not as attracted as before. Then, the writer does not provide clear relationship between economy decline and low expenditures on fitness-related products and services. The writer should provide persuasive data about the decline of fitness-related products and services. Even he should give compared data about other industries' situations in the economy declining.

Thirdly, perhaps there are some others reasons which cause levels of fitness declining in the last few years. It is possible that electric radiation from using machines causing eyes hurt or muscles sickness. It is also probable that the circumstances of living become more and more terrible to induce illness. For example, air pollution will cause pulmonary diseases and water pollution will induce tummy bug. Or perhaps people change their dietetic habits which are unscientific and easily to get sickness. I give snack culture as an instance. With the development of snack culture, McDonald’s has been to a worldwide company. A lot of people like food of McDonald’s, especially children. However, some children get fat sick because of excess eating of snack which has high calorie, such as fried chicken and potato.

In summary, the argument lacks some convincing evidences to support the writer's conclusion. In order to prove his conclusion is proper, the writer should analyze clearly between the factors he mentioned.

20、
1、没有证据证明减少出租数量事故就会减少。可以买车
2、和邻岛的情况是否具有可比性。
3、还有其他的手段可以限制事故数量。

29.
1、两市是否有可比性？
2、没提M在上次竞选是失败的原因，可能有别的缺点，而不是不支持环保。
3、是否成功还有其他因素。目前的主要问题，禁止汽车通行会不会有相反效果。

59.
1、没证据证明太阳能和流感有关系。可能流感有其他原因导致。
2、没证据证明不晒太阳就不得流感。
3、其他太阳黑子活动剧烈的年份里是否也有流感大流行呢？

166.
1、没证据证明指责是不正确的，可能是有依据。
2、上市时间长不证明效果好。
3、被更多医院使用不证明效果好。

sweetbettyUID：2359460

Are tradition and modernization incompatible? The answer of the speaker is positive, but I do not think so. In my view, I consider that tradition and modernization are compatible, and people do not have to choose one from them.

Tradition is important to preserve and continue customs and ethics of our society.(Tradition is important for preserving and continuing) Every countries(两者矛盾) have their own traditions, which make the world so colorful and various. Nowadays more and more people like traveling in foreign countries to spend their spare time. Most of them are attracted by traditional customs and special local scenes. In some famous traveling areas, local residents gain main income from traveling industry. If they abandon tradition, they will lose living resources.（这是什么意思） Furthermore, some traditional rituals have become the global cultural properties. Everyone, including local residents and foreign visitors should try their best to preserve traditions for our latter generations.

However, modernization could bring us fresh information and advanced technology which could push our society to advance faster and provide better living conditions. With the development of economy and technology, modernization becomes one of the most crucial aspects of our lives. We could receive the freshest news by watching TV. Children could play video games with foreign friends by computer and internet. Modernization make（makes） us live more conveniently and funnily. Moreover, modernization also serves as important roles in solving some enduring problems. Population of human races is constantly exploring. The resource of Earth could not bear so many people for an enough long period. As results, some terrible situations have appeared, such as pollution, resource crisis and greenhouse effect. People have to utilize the most developed technologies to solve these problems to make people survive. If people give up developing modernization, our lives will be critical because of so many problems unsolved.(我觉得这段有点乱 可以稍微改动下 比如把modernization得好处一条列出 然后分别论证)

At last, I think that tradition and modernization could exist at the same time, not as the speaker declaims. People living for traditional resources still could use modern tools to improve their living conditions. For example, managers of traditional traveling industry could use internet to search （for） the newest information about traditional traveling trends, in order to make their projects more attracted(这个词是被吸引 应该是主动得关系吧). Without modernization, tradition would not develop properly to fit need of modern society. And without modern technologies, some traditional properties would extinct in the future. On the contrast, residents of modern areas could commemorate their custom days participate in traditional ceremonies. For example, American use to giving roses as gifts for their lovers in Valentine's Day, and eating turkeys in Easter Day. No matter how modernization developing, people would till preserve their traditional customs as memory of their histories and culture. In a short, tradition and modernization could be compatible at the same time. Even they could make progresses together.

In summary, due to tradition and modernization both are important and useful for us and our society, we could own them together. Without tradition, society would lose some historical customs and ethics, for example some interesting rituals. Without modernization, people would have no chance to watch TV, play video games, or chat with foreign friends through internet, and have no methods to solve crucial social problems. Both tradition and modernization are parts of our lives, which constitute the whole world for our society.
我觉得文章得逻辑还是很清晰得， 但是有些词语得用法还有待解决 呵呵 个人意见而已

linshaoUID：2338229

sweetbetty 贴错了吧！

linshaoUID：2338229

In this article, the writer induces two results: first, he believes that using computers is not causation to less physically fit; second, he declaims that the recent decline in the economy causes low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, and fitness levels will improve with the economy. （我觉得否定电脑不是主要原因，是为了证明经济衰退导致健康下降）However, I find several flaws in this article which could not let me agree with the writer.

At the beginning, the writer does not provide persuasive evidences support the conclusion that using computers is not the causation of citizens' less physically fit. The writer cites an example that overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, which help him induce such a conclusion. Nevertheless, he does not mention about the using computers levels in these regions. It is possible that there are a lot of industries making or selling computers, which preserve great number of computers in these regions, but never using at all. Even if levels of using computer are also highest in these regions, it is also probable that computer users in regions have other methods to ameliorate their fitness, as attaching importance to physical exercises at their spare time.

Secondly, no evidence proves that the recent decline in the economy is one reason to decrease fitness levels, which induces low expenditures on fitness-related products and services. At first, I could not be persuaded that low expenditures on fitness-related products and services cause low levels of fitness. Perhaps the most popular sports are outdoor exercises recently, such as running in road, swimming in sea or climbing mountains. Fitness-related products and services are not as attracted as before. Then, the writer does not provide clear relationship between economy decline and low expenditures on fitness-related products and services. The writer should provide persuasive data about the decline of fitness-related products and services. Even he should give compared data about other industries' situations in the economy declining.

Thirdly, perhaps there are some others reasons which cause levels of fitness declining in the last few years. It is possible that electric radiation from using machines causing eyes hurt or muscles sickness. It is also probable that the circumstances of living become more and more terrible to induce illness. For example, air pollution will cause pulmonary diseases and water pollution will induce tummy bug. Or perhaps people change their dietetic habits which are unscientific and easily to get sickness. I give snack culture as an instance. With the development of snack culture, McDonald’s has been to a worldwide company. A lot of people like food of McDonald’s, especially children. However, some children get fat sick because of excess eating of snack which has high calorie, such as fried chicken and potato.
（这段分析思路满开阔的，反例找得很好）
In summary, the argument lacks some convincing evidences to support the writer's conclusion. In order to prove his conclusion is proper, the writer should analyze clearly between the factors he mentioned.

总的来说说理不错，逻辑层次感很好！
只是好像少分析了一条：fitness levels will improve with the economy.

[ 本帖最后由 linshao 于 2007-7-30 01:23 编辑 ]

xiongnashiongUID：2359406

argument48 勇往直前小组
In this article, the writer induces two results: first, he believes that using computers is not causation to less physically fit; second, he declaims that the recent decline in the economy causes low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, and fitness levels will improve with the economy. However, I find several flaws in this article which could not let me agree with the writer.

At the beginning, the writer does not provide persuasive evidences support the conclusion that using computers is not the causation of citizens' less physically fit. The writer cites an example that overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, which help him induce such a conclusion. Nevertheless, he does not mention about the using computers levels in these regions. It is possible that there are a lot of industries making or selling computers, which preserve great number of computers in these regions, but never using at all. Even if levels of using computer are also highest in these regions, it is also probable that computer users in regions have other methods to ameliorate their fitness, as attaching importance to physical exercises at their spare time.
(反例举的很好)
Secondly, no evidence proves that the recent decline in the economy is one reason to decrease fitness levels, which induces low expenditures on fitness-related products and services. At first, I could not be persuaded that low expenditures on fitness-related products and services cause low levels of fitness. Perhaps the most popular sports are outdoor exercises recently, such as running in road, swimming in sea or climbing mountains. Fitness-related products and services are not as attracted as before. Then, the writer does not provide clear relationship between economy decline and low expenditures on fitness-related products and services. The writer should provide persuasive data about the decline of fitness-related products and services. Even he should give compared data about other industries' situations in the economy declining.
（开头如果和你的批评的内容对应会更好）
Thirdly, perhaps there are some others reasons which cause levels of fitness declining in the last few years. It is possible that electric radiation from using machines causing eyes hurt or muscles sickness. It is also probable that the circumstances of living become more and more terrible to induce illness. For example, air pollution will cause pulmonary diseases and water pollution will induce tummy bug. Or perhaps people change their dietetic habits which are unscientific and easily to get sickness. I give snack culture as an instance. With the development of snack culture, McDonald’s has been to a worldwide company. A lot of people like food of McDonald’s, especially children. However, some children get fat sick because of excess eating of snack which has high calorie, such as fried chicken and potato.

In summary, the argument lacks some convincing evidences to support the writer's conclusion. In order to prove his conclusion is proper, the writer should analyze clearly between the factors he mentioned.
恩 我也觉得有一个 恢复的可以批