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It is true that using the tenure system is an appropriate way to success(感觉这样表达不太地道), but the author claims that it is the surest way for any enterprises and the term of tenure should be five years. I cannot agree with this statement, because it is not an absolute issue consequently it should be specifically treated but cannot be so simply concluded.
Admittedly, use of tenure system is an appropriate way to success in almost every enterprise, for the reason that the tenure system has two advantages which I will discuss below.
The first advantage of the limited tenure of powerful people is that a limited tenure will force them to make good use of their power and not to abuse them, and it also can stimulate them to perform outstandingly if they want to re-election. Take democratic and feudal society for example, the democratic society has limited tenure, which is usually four or five years. The president of democratic society is elected by citizens and if the present want to continue his/her tenure he would not abuse his of （or）her power, because that would make he or she lose the support and confidence of citizen which will lead to a failure in the next election(这个定语从句是修饰谁的). On the contrary, a feudal society does not have a tenure system, so the seigneurs who have no fear of losing their leading position are inclined to abuse their power. History is replete with examples that many of these despotic seigneurs were finally upset by his or her subjects. As Sir Acton said, absolute power leads to absolute corruption.
The Second advantage is that a new leader who replaces the old one will introduce new policies and new ideas. As I see it, if leaders work so long in their position, then their resource might have been exhausted and they would become stereotyped. For this reason, we need to elect new leaders to take the position of old ones.（明显没有上一段论述充分）
Through the discussion above, we can conclude that tenure system is an appropriate path to achieve success, but is it a surest way, as the speaker claim? I think the answer depends on the condition of the enterprise. In some condition, we should not use the limited term of the leaders. For example, the president FD Roosevelt re-elected president for four times, even breaking the provisions of the constitution. It was just because the situation of the America was in the special state, such as WW2 and Great Depression. In this example, not changing the president is the surest way, and if at that time Americans elected other president who （does not）familiar with the situation, the country might encounter worse calamity. Taking another example, Martin Luther king, a spiritual leader of the Civil Right Movement, to support my contention. Because he is the movement’s key figure, so people at that time would not elect another leader to replace him.(这个例子没有说清楚) Therefore, in my point of view, using the tenure system is not necessarily the surest way to success. People should choose the best way based on specific situation.
Moreover, I cannot agree with the speaker that in any profession the people in power should step down after five years. Similarly to tenure system which is not a surest method for any enterprise, the time frame of the tenure would also not an absolute number. For example, in the field of education, most collages tenure of the university president is not only five years. The average term of president of Harvard University is 13.9 years. Lawrence H. Summers, the former president of Harvard, said that the one of reasons why Harvard has become one of the most outstanding school in the world is that they using long-term tenure system which allows capable presidents to be in their position for many years, and to revise school policies continually to adopt the new social changes. （这个例子非常有说服力）There is another example about United States that the tenure of president is four years but not five years.（相比前面这个例子草率了很多） I think these two tenures both have proved effective, so they aptly illustrate my point of view that five years is not necessarily a suitable term for any profession. Therefore, deciding the term of tenure should be based on the type of professions.
To sum up, my point of view is that using of tenure system is just an appropriate method to success for any enterprise, but not a surest way to achievement. The time frame of the tenure is not necessarily five years, because in some profession, maybe more or less would be better. In short, they all depend on the condition and type of the enterprise and profession.
全文的结构和思路非常清晰，例证充分，其中有的例子非常具有说服力。写得不错。
但是有两处，相对于上面的例子显得过于草率。
另：字数偏多，可以精简一下。
（上次我看错了*^_^*也不是坏事儿啊，补上我的评述给你，加油！） | 
发表于 2007-7-31 14:47:33
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