Issue36 【0710G-HIT坚持交作业小组第四次作业】SavileRow

SavileRowUID：2284947

题目：ISSUE36 - "The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries."
字数：528          用时：00:59:13          日期：2007-8-2 9:44:25

提纲
1 很多历史人物在生前没有得到同代人的肯定
Indeed, many great people with their achievements can not be approved by their contemporaries

2 分析原因，是因为对“伟大”的判断标准存在局限性
It is true that the real standards on which the evaluation of individuals depend are limited by bunches of factors and affected by circumstances

3 更进一步，是因为任何人的所作所为有长期和短期效应，只有短期效应被当代人评价
Moreover, the influence of one’s doings is categorized into long-team effects and short-term effects

4 我们现代人,可以更明智和客观，给予了很多伟人肯定
Because we, as modern people, are wiser and more subjective, many of great people receive the applause and approval they should own in their times
最后，进行主题深化，虽然后代更有权作出判断，我们也不能被动的把评判权留给后人。
我提纲写得这么详细了，结果还是超时那么多，天啊，什么时候让我不超时

The speaker asserts that only the successors are qualified to decide their predecessors' greatness. I do agree that they are more qualified, although they are certainly not the only members in the panel.

Indeed, many great people with their achievements can not be approved by their contemporaries and, thus, they did not get the praise and fame they deserved. History supports this point. In the eye of their contemporaries, they couldn't be more ordinary. Vincent Van Gogh, the master of post-impression makes an compelling example. When he was alive, his works are considered heterogeneous compared to the well-received classic paintings back then. Only one of his works was sold at quite a low price all his life due to the help his brother Theo. And still, we are not sure the purchase was out of the buyer's sympathy or not. The example of Van Gogh aptly illustrates the point that the value of individuals usually can not be appreciated by contemporaries.  

It is true that the real standards on which the evaluation of individuals depend are limited by bunches of factors and affected by circumstances, such as time and prejudice. These are the banes for those tragedies in which the shine of great people was completely ignored. However, as time goes by, the limitations are diminishing and the obstacles blinding evaluators' eyes are obviated gradually. The paintings of Van Gogh are classified as the exemplars of post-impression and imitated by almost each artist after him. Plus, they are ,somehow ironically ,the best known, most popular and most expensive around the world nowadays. The greatness of him, was like an invaluable pearl covered by dust, and thus, its gleam was overlooked. Nevertheless, its value was rediscovered because the limitations of standards which acted as the dust were removed finally. For successors, they are standing on the shoulder of great predecessors, and we are not manipulated by the media at that time, thereby they can make better and more impartial judgments.

Moreover, the influence of one’s doings is categorized into long-team effects and short-term effects. People who live in the same period with them, are only able to see the pros and cons the doings bring about. In other words, only the short-term effects are in exertion. On the other hand, the influence of the long-term effects is much more far-reaching and it is entirely possible that it does not work only after the times he lives. Hence, what he receives is totally unfair because the judgment has been made before the long-term effects kick in. People who live after them, are able to evaluate both the short-term and long-term effects and consequently, make fairer judgments.

Because we, as modern people, are wiser and more subjective, many of great people receive the applause and approval they should own in their times. Consider the reputation Ieoh Ming Pei earns through his imaginative and ingenious architecture designs. Or ,consider the academic awards Steven Spielburg wins through his touching and insightful movies. Admittedly, modern people are not thoroughly free from prejudice and blindness and we do not always make right judgments. After all, it is impossible to eradicate all the limitations.

In sum, time, perhaps, is the only and best arbiter in weighing the greatness of individuals. And the successors are surly more qualified to make judgments about their predecessors' achievements. However, we can not leave the task of evaluating to our offspring. Because any great people deserves respect, approval and admiration when they can enjoy them.

[ 本帖最后由 SavileRow 于 2007-8-2 19:26 编辑 ]

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The speaker asserts that only the successors are qualified to decide their predecessors' greatness. I do agree that they are more qualified（和谁比较呀？than the contemporaries）, although they are certainly not the only members in the panel.(提出自己的观点，明确！)

Indeed, many great people with their achievements can not be approved by their contemporaries and, thus, they did not get the praise and fame they deserved.(太多they,都搞晕了，many people can not get the praise and fame that actually belong to them, only because their achievements can not be approved by their contemporaries) History supports this point. In the eye of their contemporaries, they couldn't be more ordinary. Vincent Van Gogh, the master of post-impression makes an（a）compelling example. When he was alive, his works are considered heterogeneous compared to the well-received classic paintings back then. Only one of his works was sold at quite a low price all his life due to the help his brother Theo. And still, we are not sure the purchase was out of the buyer's sympathy or not. The example of Van Gogh aptly illustrates the point that the value of individuals usually can not be appreciated by contemporaries.  (例子能有效支持论点)

It is true that the real standards on which the evaluation of individuals depend are limited by bunches of factors and affected by circumstances, such as time and prejudice. These are the banes for those tragedies in which the shine of great people was completely ignored. However, as time goes by, the limitations are diminishing and the obstacles blinding evaluators' eyes are obviated gradually. The paintings of Van Gogh are classified as the exemplars of post-impression and imitated by almost each artist after him. Plus, they are ,somehow ironically ,the best known, most popular and most expensive around the world nowadays. The greatness of him, was(is,以我的意见只是表示一种状态，下同) like an invaluable pearl covered by dust, and thus, its gleam was overlooked. Nevertheless, its value was rediscovered because the limitations of standards which（which删除）acted（act） as the dust were removed finally. For successors, they are standing on the shoulder of great predecessors, and we are not manipulated(influenced) by the media at that time, thereby they can make better and more impartial judgments.

Moreover, the influence of one’s doings is categorized into long-team effects and short-term effects. People who live in the same period with them, are only able to see the pros and cons the doings bring about. In other words, only the short-term effects are in exertion. On the other hand, the influence of the long-term effects is much more far-reaching and it is entirely possible that it does not work only after the times he lives. Hence, what he receives is totally unfair because the judgment has been made before the long-term effects kick in. People who live after them, are able to evaluate both the short-term and long-term effects and consequently, make fairer judgments.(这一段其实和上一段差不了多少，怎么moreover)

Because we, as modern people, are wiser and more subjective, many of great people receive the applause and approval they should own in their times. Consider the reputation Ieoh Ming Pei earns through his imaginative and ingenious architecture designs. Or ,consider the academic awards Steven Spielburg wins through his touching and insightful movies.(语法有问题，另外or改为in addition好些吧) Admittedly, modern people are not thoroughly free from prejudice and blindness and we do not always make right judgments. After all, it is impossible to eradicate all the limitations.

In sum, time, perhaps, is the only and best arbiter in weighing the greatness of individuals. And the successors are surly more qualified to make judgments about their predecessors' achievements. However, we can not leave the task of evaluating to our offspring. Because any great people deserves respect, approval and admiration when they can enjoy them.( enjoy?)

楼主还是进步不小的，但论证还是欠缺，有些逻辑挺乱的如第四段。
以上只代表本人意见，有错请多多包涵！

[ 本帖最后由 ambitionxx 于 2007-8-3 18:38 编辑 ]