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ARGUMENT167 - A folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.

*A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of medicine, ones that developed before the advent of modern medical services and technology.
提纲：
调查的有效性值得怀疑
第三周睡眠质量改善是否是薰衣草花香的效果并未得到证实
没有证据显示失眠症被彻底治愈


Giving some facts and analyses, the author seems to assure that lavender would cure insomnia within a short period. However, he or she fails to provide sufficient evidence to support the conclusion.

To begin with, the reliability of the study is open to doubt in the following aspects. First, the sample of only 30 volunteers would be too small to achieve the exact results at all while the author does not preclude this possibility. Also, we have no idea about the detailed information about the patients evolved, such as the age, gender, and vocation as well as how serious they are suffering from the chronic insomnia. It is entirely possible that these volunteers are not too serious suffered by the disease which would cause the study's result only limited to these particular patients. Also if the people evolved are quite young, they would natural recover from chronic insomnia more quickly. In addition, the method of the study is questionable. The volunteers are not divided into several comparing groups to include the other subjective impacts into consideration, such as the potential consciousness that they would be surely cured by this folk remedy, the result may not convince us at all.

Secondly, even if we concede that the study is effective, the conclusion is still unwarranted as it is based on the suspect assumption that the longer and more sound sleep should be attributed to the help of scent in lavender flower which spread out from the volunteers' pillows. While common sense tells us that the effect of a certain medicine would last a long time, how can we deny the possibility that the mentioned change in volunteers' sleeping quality is brought by the sleeping medication they took two weeks ago as the author provides no detailed information about the potential remaining effect of the sleeping medication. What's more, even if the author can preclude the effects of sleeping medication, it may also be the case that two week's study has made the volunteers too tired and they are natural enjoying the sweet sleep in the third week during the study.

Granted that the folk remedy really improves the sleeping quality of the volunteers, whether the chronic insomnia is actually cured is still unwarranted let along the effectiveness of the folk remedy. Primarily, whether three weeks is long enough to judge the effectiveness of the therapy of a chronic disease is open to doubt as common sense tells us that much more time should be required under this circumstance. Moreover, I admit that if the author can assure us the volunteers are more easy to fall asleep, which is supposed to be the most important criterion to judge the effectiveness of the treatment, then the conclusion would be accepted by us, However, the author fails to provide any evidence of it. Perhaps it is even harder for them to get into sleep which makes these volunteers sleep longer and soundly.

To sum up, before claiming the effectiveness of the scent in lavender flowers in curing chronic insomnia, the evidence should be examined from other angles, to better bolster the conclusion we should be provided with more information about the volunteer's conditions in falling asleep, however, the author fails to do it.


[ 本帖最后由 xmubit 于 2007-8-4 07:58 编辑 ]

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ARGUMENT167 - A folk remedy* for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia.

*A folk remedy is usually a plant-based form of treatment common to traditional forms of medicine, ones that developed before the advent of modern medical services and technology.
提纲：
调查的有效性值得怀疑
第三周睡眠质量改善是否是薰衣草花香的效果并未得到证实
没有证据显示失眠症被彻底治愈


Giving some facts and analyses, the author seems to assure that lavender would cure insomnia within a short period. However, he or she fails to provide sufficient evidence to support(我觉得光说证据不足不好，因为也有逻辑错误的) the conclusion.

To begin with, the reliability of the study is open to doubt in the following aspects. First, the sample of only 30 volunteers would be too small to achieve the exact results at all while the author does not preclude this possibility. Also, we have no idea with the detailed information about the patients evolved, such as the age, gender, and vocation as well as how serious they are suffering from the chronic insomnia. It is entirely possible that these volunteers are not too serious suffered by the disease which would cause the study's result only limited to these particular patients. Also if the people evolved are quite young, they would natural recover from chronic insomnia more quickly. In addition, the method of the study is questionable. The volunteers are not divided into several comparing groups to include the other subjective impacts into consideration, such as the potential consciousness that they would be surely cured by this folk remedy, the result may not convince us at all.（我觉得这一层可以笔墨少点）

Secondly, even if we concede that the study is effective, the conclusion is still unwarranted as it is based on the suspect assumption that the longer and more sound sleep should be attributed to the help of scent in lavender flower which spread out from the volunteers' pillows. While common sense tells us that the effect of a certain medicine would last a long time, how can we deny the possibility that the mentioned change in volunteers' sleeping quality is brought by the sleeping medication they took two weeks ago？ as the author provides no detailed information about the potential remaining effect of the sleeping medication.感觉加一句推不出结论好些 What's more, even if the author can preclude the effects of sleeping medication, it may also be the case that two week's study has made the volunteers too tired and they are natural enjoying the sweet sleep in the third week during the study.这一层欧觉得是重点，但是笔墨少了点。

Granted that the folk remedy really improves the sleeping quality of the volunteers, whether the chronic insomnia is actually cured is still unwarranted let along the effectiveness of the folk remedy. Primarily, whether three weeks is long enough to judge the effectiveness of the therapy of a chronic disease is open to doubt as common sense tells us that much more time should be required under this circumstance. Moreover, I admit that if the author can assure us the volunteers are more easy to fall asleep, which is supposed to be the most important criterion to judge the effectiveness of the treatment, then the conclusion would be accepted by us, However, the author fails to provide any evidence of it. Perhaps it is even harder for them to get into sleep which makes these volunteers sleep longer and soundly.

To sum up, 还要对上文总结，说明作者结论不可信before claiming the effectiveness of the scent in lavender flowers in curing chronic insomnia, the evidence should be examined from other angles, to better bolster the conclusion we should be provided with more information about the volunteer's conditions in falling asleep, however, the author fails to do it.（结尾最后一句还是以提建议为主更好，eg  如果作者做了， 结论将更可信）