Issue130 【0710G-小猪快跑小组】第5次作业 By freckle

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Issue130. "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
字数：582
It is becoming increasingly difficult to ignore the importance of education. Just as the speaker states that the socialization for children today control our social fortune. Despite I value the significance of how children are socialized, I, however, disagree the latter considerating that we actually learned more skills and experiences for how to socialize children better.

On one hand, socialization of children for social development and advancement is crucial. No one can deny the children are our future, burdening our prospective hope, to achieve our cherished but unfinished dreams for numerous possibilities. Knowledge, a paramount determiner in the progress of society, must be involved in instructing children for socialization. Scientific technologies is so imperative to put  into use to solve air pollution, and satisfied to plentiful requirement such as health, Necessary thoughts for comprehending and exploring the human beings and reassuring solution to soothe the stresses and  strains are also fundamental to future development. In addition, certain mores and rituals for children to be socialized to conformity is also pivotal: interest of the nation outweighs individuals', respect for the older, and adhesion to self-principle without others and etc. If a child have no access to cultivate these primary matters for better development in the whole society, our civilization would pause, probably recess, in the river of history. How to raise children is too significant to be overlooked

Fortunately, rather than unfavorably, we master sufficient skills, pathways and experiences regarding how to foster children for a better society. first, it is never biased to overemphasize parent’s role on the progress of cultivating children. From the period of babbling to certain self-independent, parents impart away basic learning for us to be perfect individuals, exhaustively and full-heartedly: We have been learned how to tolerate and coordinate, what kind of responsibity should be assumed, when we talk suitably and decisively, why we compete against rivals legally. Later, schools and university instill continually us with extensive and intensive instructions, besides parents. Similar to a preparation to more smoothly adapting the society, previous seemingly dogmatic mores are gradually exerted with self experiences: Facing diversified companion, we are cultivated who is better friend and slowly realize how to choose by our own judgment; encompassed by discipline motley, we are trained based on personal bends to pick up our latter studies or career, meanwhile we are shaping unique characteristic, and having internal insights into coordination and competition.

Even though raising children are encountered controversial matters parents and formal educations available provide with no aids, correspondent professions and experts who have more expertise and skills or experiences in better socializing children can also appear in time. Large numbers of possible problems, such as children’s' MBD(minimal brain dysfunction), distraction from serious matters, adolescent rebelling period, over-acquisitive intention and etc, do be weaken when resorting these professions and experts, since they endeavor to insist constantly on the deeper research on how to foster better children. Resting on their professional expertise on having experienced or managed to children with assorted personalities, they can distinguish successfully children and aim to raise children with relative suitable approaches. For children, fruitful pathways and skills should be put into use as much as necessary.

In sum, although I consent the socialization of children control the destiny of future society, I, however, have a strong opinion that we have plentiful resources to foster children better for our world. I believe, with our concord endeavor to better cultivate children, our world would be more comfortable, more comfortable, and more comfortable.

ISSUE 153  (学习)
155. "Contemporary society offers so many ways of learning that reading books is no longer very important."
1：indeed many ways of learning: television: graphical image for boardening our views to identify our culture and comparing between nations and culture. Internet provide numerous resources for papers of different disciplines, and communicate with others promptly, long-distance class is also provided, and even have a dictionary in a mobile phone
2； but reading books is also important: for better intellectual development and logical thinking, fundamental studied should be put on the reading books.
3: no more important, both important , as long as beneficial for our learning and advancement.

26（历史）
26. "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."
1: historic building is an important evidence to document history: the forbidden city, Berlin Wall: historic building is an important symbol of cultural value: the Greet Wall, the liberty status
2:if the modern purpose outweigh importance of the historic building , should dismantle the historical building, such as oil-exploration
3: depend on different circumstances.

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Issue130. "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
字数：582

It is becoming increasingly difficult to ignore the importance of education. Just as the speaker states that the socialization for children today control our social fortune. Despite I value the [把 I value the给去掉] significance of how children are socialized, I, however, disagree the latter considerating that we actually learned more skills and experiences for how to socialize children better. [题目中是说社会化重要，因此需要教导他们。而这里的观点却是，虽然社会化重要，但我不认为我们从中学到多少技能和经验？好象不太切题吧？补充：看完一遍原文后再回到这个句子，我觉得把learned改为need更合适，因为你下面的意思是说俺们已经有足够多的力量和资源教育好小孩了，是不？]

On one hand, socialization of children for social development and advancement is crucial. No one can deny the children are our future, burdening our prospective hope, to achieve our cherished but unfinished dreams for numerous possibilities. Knowledge, a paramount determiner in the progress of society, must be involved in instructing children for socialization. Scientific technologies is so imperative to put  into use to solve air pollution, and satisfied to plentiful requirement such as health, [说实话，我自己的理解是觉得socialization和technology还是有蛮大不同的]Necessary thoughts for comprehending and exploring the human beings and reassuring solution to soothe the stresses and  strains are also fundamental to future development. In addition, certain mores and rituals for children to be socialized to conformity is also pivotal: interest of the nation outweighs individuals', respect for the older, and adhesion to self-principle without others and etc. If a child have[has] no access to cultivate these primary matters for better development in the whole society, our civilization would pause, probably recess, in the river of history. How to raise children is too significant to be overlooked.[社会化是很重要滴，这段用的词都比我高级，学习。]

Fortunately, rather than unfavorably, we master sufficient skills, pathways and experiences regarding how to foster children for a better society. first, it is never biased to overemphasize parent’s role on the progress of cultivating children. From the period of babbling to certain self-independent, parents impart away basic learning for us to be perfect individuals, exhaustively and full-heartedly: We have been learned[learning] how to tolerate and coordinate, what kind of responsibity should be assumed, when we talk suitably and decisively, why we compete against rivals legally [这个地方为什么要用why?]. Later, schools and university instill continually [这两个是否应该调换位置？]us with extensive and intensive instructions, besides parents. Similar to a preparation to more smoothly adapting [to] the society, previous seemingly dogmatic mores are gradually exerted with self experiences: Facing[facing] diversified companion, we are cultivated who is better friend and slowly realize how to choose by our own judgment; encompassed by discipline motley, we are trained based on personal bends to pick up our latter studies or career, meanwhile we are shaping unique characteristic, and having internal insights into coordination and competition. [本段第一句表明we和children不是一个群体吧，可接下来的文字中为什么出现代表children立场的we？]

Even though raising children are encountered [with] controversial matters [加个that更好些] parents and formal educations available provide with no aids, correspondent professions and experts who have more expertise and skills or experiences in better socializing children can also appear in time. Large numbers of possible problems, such as children’s' MBD(minimal brain dysfunction)[长知识了，恩], distraction from serious matters, adolescent rebelling period, over-acquisitive intention and etc, do[can] be weaken when resorting these professions and experts, since they endeavor to insist constantly [有了endeavor，还用constantly，有些重复了]on the deeper research on how to foster better children [foster children better]. Resting on their professional expertise on having experienced or managed to children with assorted personalities, they can distinguish successfully children and aim to raise children with relative suitable approaches. For children, fruitful pathways and skills should be put into use as much as necessary. [专家可以作为有效的补充]

In sum, although I consent the socialization of children control the destiny of future society, I, however, have a strong opinion that we have plentiful resources to foster children better for our world. I believe, with our concord endeavor to better cultivate children, our world would be more comfortable, more comfortable, and more comfortable.

[本文观点是同意前半句，不同意后半句，我觉得这个思路挺清晰的，展开地篇幅也差不多，只是显得说理过多，例子没有。另外，句子长短结合比较好点，某些句子也忒长了点。6分范文里的长句子其实也不多的，我觉得。不过这个问题好调整，反正是属于向下兼容的问题，不需要升级，呵呵。]